Heart Crafted Poems - 2022
Viewing comments for Chapter 22 "Losing Patience"Musings of an old man - 2022
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Comment from the13thpoet
Hello JLR a good day to you. I hope this review finds you well. As a poet/writer it is always interesting to see the different takes on these contest/writing prompts. I think your take is definitely a good one. Hopefully so will others, it was also a good use of the required words. Good job and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2022
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Hello JLR a good day to you. I hope this review finds you well. As a poet/writer it is always interesting to see the different takes on these contest/writing prompts. I think your take is definitely a good one. Hopefully so will others, it was also a good use of the required words. Good job and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2022
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I welcome your support on this one!
Comment from in777wr#
The is a very entertaining spiritual fiction. The story reads, and flows well. The picture you chose compliments this poem well. The writing prompt was followed well throughout the story. Good job.
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2022
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The is a very entertaining spiritual fiction. The story reads, and flows well. The picture you chose compliments this poem well. The writing prompt was followed well throughout the story. Good job.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2022
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I value your review, thank you.
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You are welcome.
Comment from Carolyn Dooley
Obviously, they do not believe in God. And the devil is waiting on them.
If I were those guys, I would watch my back. Not from man, but God.
He is watching closely. They will pay dearly.
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2022
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Obviously, they do not believe in God. And the devil is waiting on them.
If I were those guys, I would watch my back. Not from man, but God.
He is watching closely. They will pay dearly.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2022
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Carolyn - I agree!
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Have a great morning. And thank you.
Comment from Shirley McLain
I like your God story, but one of your sentences didn't read clear. I think it would sound better if you used country after country. You might also change still to remain. Enjoy your evening. Shirley
t it possible that countries after countries would repeatedly be in conflict and still this greedy.
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2022
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I like your God story, but one of your sentences didn't read clear. I think it would sound better if you used country after country. You might also change still to remain. Enjoy your evening. Shirley
t it possible that countries after countries would repeatedly be in conflict and still this greedy.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2022
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Thank you Shirley, great feedback!
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your contest entry reads naturally. I enjoyed reading it. Your conversation works well and makes great sense. I like the final words God spoke.
I believe countries after countries would read better to say-->
country after country. [I know your work, your choice,]
Best wishes in the contest.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2022
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Your contest entry reads naturally. I enjoyed reading it. Your conversation works well and makes great sense. I like the final words God spoke.
I believe countries after countries would read better to say-->
country after country. [I know your work, your choice,]
Best wishes in the contest.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 14-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2022
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an, thanks for this input ...nation upon nation is probably better in retrospect.
Comment from amahra
This is indeed fiction and a lovely story to boot. You did a great job incorporating every contest word into your writing. Though just for the record, and I know it's fiction, the rainbow God placed in the sky prevents Him from destroying the world ever again with water. Just saying. :))
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2022
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This is indeed fiction and a lovely story to boot. You did a great job incorporating every contest word into your writing. Though just for the record, and I know it's fiction, the rainbow God placed in the sky prevents Him from destroying the world ever again with water. Just saying. :))
Comment Written 14-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2022
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amahra - I do agree - and that is why I so love the rainbows!
Comment from Wendy G
Interesting and different, and you seem to have completed the requirements satisfactorily for the page full of rules - so well done! Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2022
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Interesting and different, and you seem to have completed the requirements satisfactorily for the page full of rules - so well done! Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
Comment Written 13-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2022
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Thanks Wendy
Comment from lyenochka
It's interesting to limit this story to just 120 words and require so many must-be-used words. I think since God is omniscient, nothing surprises Him like it does us. He does know the end of the story.
Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2022
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It's interesting to limit this story to just 120 words and require so many must-be-used words. I think since God is omniscient, nothing surprises Him like it does us. He does know the end of the story.
Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 13-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2022
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Yes, the restrictiveness in word usage is stifling to say the least. But God, as yo so perfectly state knows and has a plan ... 🙏🙏
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Excellent entry for the 6 Sentence Spiritual Fiction writing prompt contest. You did a good job following the rules. The ending was frightening but funny too. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2022
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Excellent entry for the 6 Sentence Spiritual Fiction writing prompt contest. You did a good job following the rules. The ending was frightening but funny too. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2022
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Yes, I agree, we don't know what the end times are, but we know his word will be just fine. 👌🙏🙏
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
It is sad to think that one man could start a world war and here we are again in that situation, another Hitler grabbing power and taking countries by force. The problem this time is nuclear weapons and the destruction with bombs, bullets and chemical weapons are also deployed. Can we prevent one man from causing all this terror? This remains to be seen, the last time it happened if took 6 years to stop it, let us hope the same thing does not happen again, a poignant write, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2022
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It is sad to think that one man could start a world war and here we are again in that situation, another Hitler grabbing power and taking countries by force. The problem this time is nuclear weapons and the destruction with bombs, bullets and chemical weapons are also deployed. Can we prevent one man from causing all this terror? This remains to be seen, the last time it happened if took 6 years to stop it, let us hope the same thing does not happen again, a poignant write, love Dolly x
Comment Written 13-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2022
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Thank you! I fear for the people of Ukraine and the potential that we are going to see a long and sustained gorilla war develop that will cost Ukraine their independence unless something happens to Putin.
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Something will happen to Putin, watch this space x
