Heart Crafted Poems - 2022
Viewing comments for Chapter 20 "Spring Splashes"Musings of an old man - 2022
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Comment from Mark D. R.
Congrats on your stacked 5-7-5. I applaud your ability to write this entry in my favorite (shortened three-line) format. Nice phrasing throughout your poem.
We all can look forward to your Springtime fever.
Mark
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2022
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Congrats on your stacked 5-7-5. I applaud your ability to write this entry in my favorite (shortened three-line) format. Nice phrasing throughout your poem.
We all can look forward to your Springtime fever.
Mark
Comment Written 12-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2022
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I appreciate your validation.
Comment from RGstar
If this was longer, and had the chance to escape its boundaries, this would be a six star. Nicely balanced, and well the elaboration. The colours, spring, all to the fore, and the various 5-7-5's were never separate.
Bravo.
Very well done. Good luck in the competition.
My best.
RG
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2022
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If this was longer, and had the chance to escape its boundaries, this would be a six star. Nicely balanced, and well the elaboration. The colours, spring, all to the fore, and the various 5-7-5's were never separate.
Bravo.
Very well done. Good luck in the competition.
My best.
RG
Comment Written 12-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2022
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RG Thanks, yes so restrictive! That is why I most favor Free Verse which is my strong voice I prefer to write with.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a great job with your contest entry. Your syllable count per line is correct. Your words paint a great picture of Spring. I like the line about the raindrops on the petals. The picture is a great pairing with your descriptive words.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2022
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You did a great job with your contest entry. Your syllable count per line is correct. Your words paint a great picture of Spring. I like the line about the raindrops on the petals. The picture is a great pairing with your descriptive words.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 12-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2022
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Thanks much, Jan!
Comment from write hand blue
Hi JLR, An appropriate picture of a colourful selection of flowers. This sets off your poem which describes the dew dripping off the spring flowers. A good match to the picture and a pleasant read. Good work. ~Mel~
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2022
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Hi JLR, An appropriate picture of a colourful selection of flowers. This sets off your poem which describes the dew dripping off the spring flowers. A good match to the picture and a pleasant read. Good work. ~Mel~
Comment Written 12-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2022
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Mel, thank you for sharing your comments and validation on this poem.
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My Pleasure.
Comment from oliver818
This is a lovely little poem, and I particularly enjoyed the comparison with a kaleidoscope. The poem flows well and has a nice feel to it and i will also say that it's very nice that spring has finally come. Thanks for sharing this
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2022
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This is a lovely little poem, and I particularly enjoyed the comparison with a kaleidoscope. The poem flows well and has a nice feel to it and i will also say that it's very nice that spring has finally come. Thanks for sharing this
Comment Written 12-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2022
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Thanks!
Comment from lyenochka
Enjoyed your celebration of spring in your stacked 5-7-5 stanzas. I liked the comparison to a kaleidoscope, the sounds of the fourth stanza about the droplets of rain that reminded me of raindrops with the "dancing...on tips of petals" and I liked the mention of the approaching season of Easter. Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2022
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Enjoyed your celebration of spring in your stacked 5-7-5 stanzas. I liked the comparison to a kaleidoscope, the sounds of the fourth stanza about the droplets of rain that reminded me of raindrops with the "dancing...on tips of petals" and I liked the mention of the approaching season of Easter. Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 11-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2022
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Thank you!
Comment from Leann DS
This stack 5-7-5 turned out really well. Everything connects in a cohesive manner, and you inspire visual imagery with your words. If I were to change one thing, I would look at the third stanza and try to figure out how to take out one of the "drop"s.
Very nice. Best of luck to you in the contest, and have a great weekend.
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2022
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This stack 5-7-5 turned out really well. Everything connects in a cohesive manner, and you inspire visual imagery with your words. If I were to change one thing, I would look at the third stanza and try to figure out how to take out one of the "drop"s.
Very nice. Best of luck to you in the contest, and have a great weekend.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2022
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Thank you fro your thougths.
Comment from Heather Burroughs
This is a beautiful poem and goes perfectly with the picture. It's well written and flows nicely. Thank you for sharing. Best of luck with your entry in the upcoming contest.
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2022
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This is a beautiful poem and goes perfectly with the picture. It's well written and flows nicely. Thank you for sharing. Best of luck with your entry in the upcoming contest.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2022
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Thank you for your comments Heather..
Comment from Ember Henning
This is a beautiful poem. You really made spring come alive through all the sensory language. My only suggestion would be to change the lines "couldn't compete with this array/ of flowering plants" since they don't really use literary devices like the other lines and I feel like these could be used to build up the scene a little bit more. But overall, great work, and thank you for sharing! <3
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2022
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This is a beautiful poem. You really made spring come alive through all the sensory language. My only suggestion would be to change the lines "couldn't compete with this array/ of flowering plants" since they don't really use literary devices like the other lines and I feel like these could be used to build up the scene a little bit more. But overall, great work, and thank you for sharing! <3
Comment Written 11-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2022
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Ember thank you for your comments something I can use moving forward.
Comment from Willie P. Smith
Rhyming poetry is my preference, however the picture you chose was so
beautiful, I had to read what went with it. Your words paint a beautiful
picture. Well done. Thanks for coloring my day.
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2022
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Rhyming poetry is my preference, however the picture you chose was so
beautiful, I had to read what went with it. Your words paint a beautiful
picture. Well done. Thanks for coloring my day.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2022
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Willie, I agree, and thank you!
