Sea Glass
Upon the shore I find my way...68 total reviews
Comment from tempeste
Ciao!
Reading your poem brought back happy memories. When I was young I collected smooth pebbles and now and then I would found a prized piece : a sea glass.
I filled many jars , it was like being on a treasure hunt.
I love that the narrative is from the sea glass' point of view
It travelled oceans wanting to be found, touched , kept.
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2022
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Ciao!
Reading your poem brought back happy memories. When I was young I collected smooth pebbles and now and then I would found a prized piece : a sea glass.
I filled many jars , it was like being on a treasure hunt.
I love that the narrative is from the sea glass' point of view
It travelled oceans wanting to be found, touched , kept.
Comment Written 21-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2022
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I've always enjoyed collecting sea glass and once had many decanters filled with many colors... I am down to a few now, as I've downsized. I still can't resist looking whenever I find myself at the seashore. Thanks for reviewing this one! I haven't posted in so long it's a thrill to see a review on anything!
All my best-- Karenina
Comment from MissMerri
I love this poem! It is breathtaking. It is amazing in so many ways. It is vivid and bright and warming and exciting and inspiring. I'm so glad you wrote it and so thankful I had a six remaining to give it. A ten would be more appropriate. I've read this several times, and with each reading it just gets better. MM
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2022
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I love this poem! It is breathtaking. It is amazing in so many ways. It is vivid and bright and warming and exciting and inspiring. I'm so glad you wrote it and so thankful I had a six remaining to give it. A ten would be more appropriate. I've read this several times, and with each reading it just gets better. MM
Comment Written 05-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2022
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You are too kind... A supportive soul, gracious friend, eloquent poet--whose work inspires me every time!
This makes these six stars sparkle especially shimmery!
Gratefully yours,
Karenina
Comment from John Ciarmello
I am a huge fan of yours! "Babies in Buckets" is a sensational piece.
This is to no surprise as beautiful. An intimacy of the inanimate; brought to life with graceful words and gentle caresses. Taken home and put-on proud display away from the uncertainties of life's currents. Exceptionally beautiful, Karenina.
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2022
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I am a huge fan of yours! "Babies in Buckets" is a sensational piece.
This is to no surprise as beautiful. An intimacy of the inanimate; brought to life with graceful words and gentle caresses. Taken home and put-on proud display away from the uncertainties of life's currents. Exceptionally beautiful, Karenina.
Comment Written 10-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2022
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Oh John, thanks for saying that! I am hardly in the trail of your celestial orbit-- your work has impressed and amazed me. Honored to have you take a moment to read any of my work, anytime!
All My Best,
Karenina
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You are too kind. I'll be reading for sure, Karenina.
Comment from Liz O'Neill
Your e.e. cummings poem is appropriate for 2 of my friends who find and collect sea glass. I've seen some of it. How beautiful. I like how you have personified the glass. Part of it was once alive and you recognized this.
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2022
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Your e.e. cummings poem is appropriate for 2 of my friends who find and collect sea glass. I've seen some of it. How beautiful. I like how you have personified the glass. Part of it was once alive and you recognized this.
Comment Written 10-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2022
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Thanks Liz! I love collecting it...
So it became an apt metaphor for trash becoming treasure by the badgering sea.
I've felt that way before...
Love does heal the broken places!
I appreciate your comments!
Karenina
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It is lovely
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Thanks Liz!
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You're very welcome
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Sea Glass
by karenina
Wonderful imagery of the amethyst sea glass...I love to look for shells, smooth pebbles, and coloured glass.
Great alliteration. Lovely e.e. cummings quote that fits your poem perfectly.
Well done, Karenina. I hope you are all recovered.
Gypsy hugs
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2022
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Sea Glass
by karenina
Wonderful imagery of the amethyst sea glass...I love to look for shells, smooth pebbles, and coloured glass.
Great alliteration. Lovely e.e. cummings quote that fits your poem perfectly.
Well done, Karenina. I hope you are all recovered.
Gypsy hugs
Comment Written 09-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2022
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Thank you, Gypsy!
I love searching for sea glass as well.
It was a lovely inspiration as metaphor!
I am well.
Hope you are the same!
Six-stars?
Very kind!
Hugs back at you!
Karenina
Comment from Janetsue
This brings back some wonderful memories of strolling the beach searching for sea glass, driftwood, and seashells. This is a beautifully written free verse. I enjoyed it so much!
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2022
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This brings back some wonderful memories of strolling the beach searching for sea glass, driftwood, and seashells. This is a beautifully written free verse. I enjoyed it so much!
Comment Written 08-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2022
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Thanks so much! One of my all-time favorite things to do! I have decanters full of sea glass around my home... Decades of memories!
May we all be so humbled and tumbled by the sea and emerge as wondrous!
Karenina
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What a lovely response! xo
Comment from SimianSavant
This is a gorgeous work that makes me miss living at the beach. Of course it hints at much more, such as fate/destiny: "One sidestep left or right,
and unrelenting waves
would have tumbled me
back".
The normal rules don't necessarily apply to this form, however I will mention it anyway, for consistency:
A semicolon separates two independent clauses. In the following instance:
"Blue eyes smile
as you lift me to your cheek;
aglow with the warmth of the sun."
the second clause is lacking a subject, as you are still using the subject in the first clause. Therefore, a comma is appropriate in place of a semicolon.
The same goes for "the rainbow arc of our improbability". This one sticks out a little less.
One other technical comment: ellipses. You have five of them. In order to increase their impact, I would suggest using fewer of them. If you were to choose one of the five, I would probably keep the one after "slowly stroking bits of sand away..."
Thank you for the lovely read,
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2022
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This is a gorgeous work that makes me miss living at the beach. Of course it hints at much more, such as fate/destiny: "One sidestep left or right,
and unrelenting waves
would have tumbled me
back".
The normal rules don't necessarily apply to this form, however I will mention it anyway, for consistency:
A semicolon separates two independent clauses. In the following instance:
"Blue eyes smile
as you lift me to your cheek;
aglow with the warmth of the sun."
the second clause is lacking a subject, as you are still using the subject in the first clause. Therefore, a comma is appropriate in place of a semicolon.
The same goes for "the rainbow arc of our improbability". This one sticks out a little less.
One other technical comment: ellipses. You have five of them. In order to increase their impact, I would suggest using fewer of them. If you were to choose one of the five, I would probably keep the one after "slowly stroking bits of sand away..."
Thank you for the lovely read,
Comment Written 08-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2022
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Hello! Thank you for this helpful assist! I am pleased you enjoyed the overall read and thrilled to have the editing guidance! Will make the changes n the AM. I appreciate your help!
Karenina
Comment from Wendy G
How very beautiful. The perfect timing, and "coincidence" of finding the precious sea glass ... and yet that is but a delightful metaphor for the real love of which you are speaking, between a man and a woman, I think. Very creative, and so perfectly composed.
Wendy
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2022
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How very beautiful. The perfect timing, and "coincidence" of finding the precious sea glass ... and yet that is but a delightful metaphor for the real love of which you are speaking, between a man and a woman, I think. Very creative, and so perfectly composed.
Wendy
Comment Written 08-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2022
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Thanks Wendy! I got swept up in my metaphor! So glad you enjoyed. Thank you also for the six-stars...
Karenina
Comment from Artasylum
"For whatever we lose (like a you or a me),
It's always our self we find in the sea. -- e.e. cummings
Pays 8 points and 1.08 member dollars (and maybe more).
This is so sweet and a wonderful tribute to Sea Glass. yours diana
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2022
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"For whatever we lose (like a you or a me),
It's always our self we find in the sea. -- e.e. cummings
Pays 8 points and 1.08 member dollars (and maybe more).
This is so sweet and a wonderful tribute to Sea Glass. yours diana
Comment Written 07-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2022
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Hello Diana.
Thanks so much for your review. That e.e. cummings quote always caught my fancy!
Karenina
Comment from Terry Broxson
Oh my, I may be old, but I can feel the passion in these words. Am I reading about sea glass? I think not. Sea glass would not take me back to yesteryear. Sea glass would not start with Beloved! Exceptional work!
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2022
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Oh my, I may be old, but I can feel the passion in these words. Am I reading about sea glass? I think not. Sea glass would not take me back to yesteryear. Sea glass would not start with Beloved! Exceptional work!
Comment Written 07-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2022
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It's a lovely thing, this anthropomorphism. Passion cast, like a ventriloquist poet onto the amethyst sea glass...
Where I might never have dared bare my soul--alas, the arc of improbability brought me to the shore!
Smile.
Thanks for the sixer. No one is too old for passion...
Karenina
