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The Tor

Viewing comments for Chapter 17 "Bam! Bam!"
Adventures around & upon a hill

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Comment from John Ciarmello
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This is another great chapter. The karaoke scene was exciting and brought me into the place and the performances. Your writing is always clear and concise, and the chapters never disappoint. Well done!

 Comment Written 04-Mar-2022


reply by the author on 04-Mar-2022
    Thank you for your praises of my work. I'm glad you are enjoying it.
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
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The plot of this book is moving along nicely. Even though you've gone into this several times, it still isn't clear to me why yje natural situation means it's better to leave the harps at home. Sorry; I must be really dense...

 Comment Written 04-Mar-2022


reply by the author on 04-Mar-2022
    Thank you for your involved review. I just realized the link with the images of the Tor wasn't the best on for you to see the step we had to walk up. A long haul for a weighty harp.
    https://www.dogpile.com/serp?qc=images&q=glastonbury+tor+england&sc=yWIR8LZCL1b210
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
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This is a nice, exciting chapter with lots of good dialogue and description. It sounds like great fun, and yet you say the karaoke was an add on. You wrote it as if you were there, and that is very good writing.

 Comment Written 03-Mar-2022


reply by the author on 03-Mar-2022
    Thank you for your involved review. I used to do that song at Karaoke back in the day, 20+ years ago. It was so fun. The crowd were very entertained with my presentation. Thank you for your high compliment.
Comment from lyenochka
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I like the wild time of Karaoke! It acted like a kind of cleansing to prepare for the trip which had cause so much trepidation. I liked "The object of anxiety was always cloaked in some cold darkness" to give us the sense of some ominous unknown.
Your characters are certainly going through an emotional or spiritual energy roller coaster!

 Comment Written 02-Mar-2022


reply by the author on 03-Mar-2022
    Thank you for your lovely review. I'm glad you are enjoying it. In a couple of chapters, there will be more answers
Comment from aryr
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This was an amazing continuation chapter, Liz. The lady's did a wonderful job of their karaoke and they all had a great time. The Mary line was delightful and promising then at the end of this chapter the Michael line clicked in. Well done, greatly enjoyed. Hugs!

 Comment Written 02-Mar-2022


reply by the author on 03-Mar-2022
    Thank you for your lovely review. I'm glad you are enjoying it. In a couple of chapters, there will be more answers
reply by aryr on 03-Mar-2022
    You are so very welcome, Liz.
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2022
    I'm still waiting for my neighbor who gets me mail down the .8 of a mile. I understand I have a lovely love-filled gift coming from you & Helen. Thank you for pointing it out to Helen.
    Hugs
    Liz
reply by aryr on 05-Mar-2022
    My pleasure, Liz.
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2022
    ***hugs***
Comment from Judy Lawless
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Karaoke Nights sounds like so much fun, Liz! I'm glad everyone decided to participate and it seems like they were glad as well. Then the adventure on the road the next day, calming until the sudden hit of energy. It will be interesting to learn what that is all about. Well written.

One typo: 'Gypys(Gypsies), Tramps, and Thieves'

 Comment Written 02-Mar-2022


reply by the author on 02-Mar-2022
    Thank you for your involved review. In the song it is spelled Gypsys. Probably to get us to pause.
reply by Judy Lawless on 02-Mar-2022
    You're welcome, Liz. I kinda thought that, but spell check didn't recognize it. You did leave out the first "s" though.
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2022
    Thank you for your involved review. I'm glad your are enjoying it. We're just chapters away for the answers to be revealed.
Comment from jessizero
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I recognized the characters from another piece of yours. It was fun to "see" and "hear" them perform karaoke. I wonder what will happen next. Keep up the good work!

 Comment Written 02-Mar-2022


reply by the author on 02-Mar-2022
    Thank you for your involved review. I'm glad you are enjoying it.
Comment from Cristine22
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I really, really like the narrator's upbeat voice. I was immediately interested in her and what she had to say. Also, an Arthurian labyrinth? Very cool. Your descriptions of the feelings of the energy on the different ley lines were very good and easy to imagine. The beginning of the chapter could use more description of the character's surroundings and more of the characters interacting with those surroundings for the sake of grounding the reader in the story and making us feel like we're there. Anyway, this sounds like a really cool book. Great job!

 Comment Written 02-Mar-2022


reply by the author on 02-Mar-2022
    Thank you for your involved review. It will get even more exciting. If you'd like to read the previous chapters, feel free to go to my portfolio. There is no need to do reviews, just enjoy it.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
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Well, a good time was had by all, and the Karaoke was a huge success. I would never have the nerve to stand up and sing. Now we are off again, I've never heard of the Mary line or the Michael line. It sounds like the Michael line is awful. I'll have to wait to see what happens there. Well done, Liz! :)) Sandra xx

 Comment Written 02-Mar-2022


reply by the author on 02-Mar-2022
    Thank you for your involved review. If you look on the map of the Michael line, you'll see a lot of churches. They built them over Pagan spots. Everyone seems to realize that line needs healing energy. England, being so old, many horrible things happened upon that line of negative energy.
Comment from karenina
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Well! Nothing like jumping in with both feet!
Of course, the hazard is I don't know the backstory... The saving grace is your characters are intriguing and you've piqued my interest! I went off into a Google rabbit hole to educate myself on Ley lines. Kind of like saying I fell off my roof to get a feeling about this whole "gravity" thing! It's all way above my pay grade... But I am a believer in a higher consciousness... If I were on FB I'd stop by your page! --Karenina

 Comment Written 02-Mar-2022


reply by the author on 02-Mar-2022
    Thank you for your involved review. If you look on the map of the Michael line, you'll see a lot of churches. They built them over Pagan spots. Everyone seems to realize that line needs healing energy. England, being so old, many horrible things happened upon that line of negative energy. If you go to the link in the author's notes. Also if you check back to Ch. 10 it talks a lot about ley lines.
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    This is from Ch. 10. It may help or make things worse....bwaaa

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    "Among many others, there are two basic ley lines running through the world. Just as we have energy waves throughout the atmosphere, so too, do we have them within the earth's makeup. The energy below the surface affects the outcomes above. You may have heard the saying, ?As above, so below?.

    The two ley lines of which I speak, are referred to as the St. Michael line and the Mary line. The Michael line has a harsh dark feeling to it. The Mary line, skirting around bodies of water, has a fluffy energy sensation.

    The Michael line is a rigidly directed line whereas the Mary line forms more of a weaving pattern across England. These two opposing energies do cross each other in several places.

    "It turns out, what I discovered is the Michael ley line begins a few miles from us right here. Doesn?t that makes sense, now?"

    Cordelia sat forward, with her eyes wide open. "I guess it certainly does make a lot of sense. That Michael line must carry massive mean energy." Pursing her lips while nodding her head from side to side. "Okay? tell me where else will we meet?ole Michael."

    "One thing I read in my research is, since at least before the 20th-century, many believed the churches were built on power plots which were previous Pagan gathering places. So it seems these energies were perceived long before churches were built."
    Cordelia shuddered as she said, "I suspect we?ll be seeing many churches or cathedrals on our venturing. I don?t know why that thought makes me want to scrinch up, but it does."

    If you keep this stuff in mind and you don't have time to go back to previous chapter, without having to write any reviews, this should be enough to get you through the rest of the story...just know the Michael line is not a nice place to be.
reply by karenina on 02-Mar-2022
    "bwaaa" yourself! (smile)

    I have read Chapter 10 and will go to the link provided, as this is all fascinating! Sadly, life is stubbornly prodding me toward the excitement of pharmacy pick-up and bank deposit...and the ever-inspiring grocery list! (Don't you hate when that happens!?) I'll have more questions once I amass the time to gather my wits and learn more! I appreciate your guide map!--Karenina
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2022
    I enjoy your humor in life's face
reply by karenina on 02-Mar-2022
    I will try my best to double back next week and read your first 16 chapters!

    Karenina
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2022
    Cool...remember no need to write any reviews
reply by karenina on 03-Mar-2022
    No promises! Smile...
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2022
    ***chuckle***