Disobeyed
an essence poem22 total reviews
Comment from royowen
One thing that sets a free country apart is the rule of law, if all live by it, it reigns over government, it's citizen and local government, it makes all free if adhered to. Beautifully written Bill, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2022
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One thing that sets a free country apart is the rule of law, if all live by it, it reigns over government, it's citizen and local government, it makes all free if adhered to. Beautifully written Bill, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 26-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2022
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Thank you, Roy.
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A pleasure Bill,
Comment from lyenochka
Ah, there are so many who view rules as a challenge to their freedoms. I really liked your creative rhyming of "made" with "disobeyed" as your internal rhyme! Hope you do well in the contest!
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2022
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Ah, there are so many who view rules as a challenge to their freedoms. I really liked your creative rhyming of "made" with "disobeyed" as your internal rhyme! Hope you do well in the contest!
Comment Written 26-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2022
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Thanks, Helen, for the kind review. Bill
Comment from Sally Law
This is a powerful one in two line poetry, Bill. It looks like a winner to me. The abstract is equally important and adds imaginary subtext. Sending you my best today as always and best wishes for the upcoming contest,
Sal XOs
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2022
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This is a powerful one in two line poetry, Bill. It looks like a winner to me. The abstract is equally important and adds imaginary subtext. Sending you my best today as always and best wishes for the upcoming contest,
Sal XOs
Comment Written 26-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2022
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Thank you, Sal
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Your essence poem makes effective use of its mere twelve syllables and
rhyming words to convey a powerful message about following the rules. Not doing so can lead to real trouble, even if we are convinced the rule is unfair!
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2022
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Your essence poem makes effective use of its mere twelve syllables and
rhyming words to convey a powerful message about following the rules. Not doing so can lead to real trouble, even if we are convinced the rule is unfair!
Comment Written 26-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2022
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Thank you, Janice
Comment from robyn corum
Bill,
Oookkkkaaayyyy... Scrolled past that pic, thinking, what on earrtthhh will he have this time? *smile*
But I LOVE it! Absolutely on point. You nailed this one, dude. I don't know why this truth prevails so strongly - when some things seem to be so CLEARLY and EVIDENTLY foolish, but there you go.
Nice!
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2022
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Bill,
Oookkkkaaayyyy... Scrolled past that pic, thinking, what on earrtthhh will he have this time? *smile*
But I LOVE it! Absolutely on point. You nailed this one, dude. I don't know why this truth prevails so strongly - when some things seem to be so CLEARLY and EVIDENTLY foolish, but there you go.
Nice!
Comment Written 26-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2022
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Thank you, Robyn
Comment from BLACKTITANIUM86
You know, that I am feeling your poetry. For, you don't hold back any punches. And the fact that you did your thing on this, only adds to your greatness. Keep Writing. And don't forget to stop by to talk. For, there is always something exciting and new on deck. Stay Connected
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2022
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You know, that I am feeling your poetry. For, you don't hold back any punches. And the fact that you did your thing on this, only adds to your greatness. Keep Writing. And don't forget to stop by to talk. For, there is always something exciting and new on deck. Stay Connected
Comment Written 26-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2022
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Thanks, BT
Comment from Mark D. R.
Bill
A most reflective poem you have penned for this contest. Your selected illustration just adds to my interest. The black and white color scheme adds nuance to your verse.
Mark
P.S. intended return(s) following your last line?
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2022
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Bill
A most reflective poem you have penned for this contest. Your selected illustration just adds to my interest. The black and white color scheme adds nuance to your verse.
Mark
P.S. intended return(s) following your last line?
Comment Written 26-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2022
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Thank you, Mark
Comment from John Ciarmello
This is a great two liner Bill. I can tell your words were carefully chosen. I'm not sure if they were written before or after your choice of artwork, however, both, and either way it all works perfectly. I wish you much success with the contest.
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2022
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This is a great two liner Bill. I can tell your words were carefully chosen. I'm not sure if they were written before or after your choice of artwork, however, both, and either way it all works perfectly. I wish you much success with the contest.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2022
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Thank you, John
Comment from nomi338
Some of us just cannot help ourselves. We know that the pain will soon come as a result of our misbehaving, but you see, the pain hurts so good that we keep coming back for more. We are drawn and defined by the pain.
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2022
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Some of us just cannot help ourselves. We know that the pain will soon come as a result of our misbehaving, but you see, the pain hurts so good that we keep coming back for more. We are drawn and defined by the pain.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2022
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Pain is good; extreme pain is extremely good.
Comment from Tom Horonzy
Need I say more that I haven't said before... like a second ago..........................................................................................................................
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2022
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Need I say more that I haven't said before... like a second ago..........................................................................................................................
Comment Written 26-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2022
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TY, T
