UFO in the Kitchen
Pass the tea towel... (5-7-5)14 total reviews
Comment from pome lover
uh-oh! sounds bad, but very clever.
If this is true, it will probably cost almost as much to repair as it would to get a new one. I have a 25 yr old washing machine that when it hits the SPIN cycle, sounds like it's going to explode. Got to replace it.
Cute 5-7-5! Good luck.
Katharine
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2022
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uh-oh! sounds bad, but very clever.
If this is true, it will probably cost almost as much to repair as it would to get a new one. I have a 25 yr old washing machine that when it hits the SPIN cycle, sounds like it's going to explode. Got to replace it.
Cute 5-7-5! Good luck.
Katharine
Comment Written 19-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2022
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Your washing machine might take off one day and disappear over the horizon!
My old dishwasher tries to vibrate itself across the floor.
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sounds like they were made for each other :)
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Let's get kinky and add my dysfunctional tumble dryer!
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I think Home Depot's callin'
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Austerity times - I just need a tea towel and a sunny day.
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hope you get both. :)
Comment from lindafisher
I love the title of your poem. I was half expecting it to be about aliens. The picture it conjures up of your out of control dishwasher is better than aliens.
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2022
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I love the title of your poem. I was half expecting it to be about aliens. The picture it conjures up of your out of control dishwasher is better than aliens.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2022
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I'm pleased you enjoyed my poem - thanks for reviewing.
Comment from Mrs. J.B
This is a very nice and funny poem! Who would have ever thought that dishes could look like a UFO after they get stacked up high on top of another...well thanks to the "unidentified problem with the dishwasher" or DIY plan going sour ! LOL.
I also love the blue font. against the light grey background which is very nice and easy to see.
The only suggestion that I will like to make is to space out your lines a little bit more so it will be easier to tell where each line begins and ends which will increase readability.
Overall this is a 5 star very funny, unique poem that will have you laughing everytime you think about it!
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reply by the author on 19-Feb-2022
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This is a very nice and funny poem! Who would have ever thought that dishes could look like a UFO after they get stacked up high on top of another...well thanks to the "unidentified problem with the dishwasher" or DIY plan going sour ! LOL.
I also love the blue font. against the light grey background which is very nice and easy to see.
The only suggestion that I will like to make is to space out your lines a little bit more so it will be easier to tell where each line begins and ends which will increase readability.
Overall this is a 5 star very funny, unique poem that will have you laughing everytime you think about it!
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Comment Written 19-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2022
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Thanks for reviewing. I'm pleased you liked my poem and said some really nice things about it.
Your assessment of the syllable count is inaccurate though... because the word 'unidentified' does have 5 syllables, and the other lines are accurate too.
un-i-den-ti-fied is how the syllables are counted.
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Okay I understand. I apologize for miss counting the syllables in the word " unidentified" I couldn't tell where each line started or ended. I'm go back in and reread it and redo the syllables assessment if it's alright with you
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Interested to know what device you are reading the poem on? ... my computer screen shows 3 centred lines in 5-7-5 as I wrote them:
unidentified
problem with the dishwasher ?
flying saucers whirl
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On my phone unfortunately. I prefer on a laptop but it keeps freezing up. There's nothing wrong with the word formatting and I think your lines are centered perfectly but I'm only suggesting that you space out your centered lines just a little more to increase readability.
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
I got a smile out of this one this morning. All syllables present & correct.
The pedant in me urges me to reflect on the title as there are no UFOs present as the unidentified element is the dishwasher issue not the flying saucers! lol
Best of luck
GMG
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reply by the author on 19-Feb-2022
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Hi there,
I got a smile out of this one this morning. All syllables present & correct.
The pedant in me urges me to reflect on the title as there are no UFOs present as the unidentified element is the dishwasher issue not the flying saucers! lol
Best of luck
GMG
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Comment Written 19-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2022
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Suspend your pedantry and keep smiling, eh?
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lol
