Comment from BLACKTITANIUM86

Excellent

Wow!!! I think this book might turn out to
be a real barn burner. And I do mean hot!!!
For, it felt like a real page turner when I was
reading. And when I was done, I was looking
forward to reading more. So Keep Writing. And
don't forget to stop by to talk to me. Stay Connected

 Comment Written 16-Feb-2022

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reply by the author on 17-Feb-2022

Thanks so much!!! :) So thrilled to hear you enjoyed this chapter. Hearing positive feedback gives me the motivation to keep on writing. I appreciate this more than you know.

Sincerely,
Shana :)

Comment from Shirley McLain

Excellent

Another great chapter. So an angel rescued Carrie at age five. This is interesting, and I can't wait to see where this storyline goes. Have a great evening. Shirley

 Comment Written 14-Feb-2022

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reply by the author on 15-Feb-2022

Thanks so much, Shirley :)
Yes, there is a chapter where Carrie is dreaming of when her parents died in the accident and about the angel who saved her. I think that was one of my favorite chapters in this story. It's fun to write about make believe. :)
Thanks for taking the time to read my chapter. I appreciate your generous stars and feedback.

Sincerely,
Shana :)

Comment from AJ McCall

Exceptional

OOOOOHHHHHH! SHANAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA!

What a cliffhanger! I actually kinda liked this one. (No, I'm not mad this time, lol.) I'm hoping it's Frank and Manuel... if it isn't... I WILL BE MAD AT YOU! Again with Drakon looking intimidating, lol. (I love him,;) I could see how Joseph would feel guilty... but it's not really his fault. And he's right, they'll believe him and Carrie if that's THEM at the DOOR. It better be SHANA!
LOL. You know I love your story. I can't wait to see what happens next. UNTIL THE NEXT MILLENNIA!!..... Six stars!

 Comment Written 14-Feb-2022

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reply by the author on 15-Feb-2022

Thanks AJ :) You know it has to be the detectives. Besides, Frank did say he didn't want to wait until the party at noon to check on Carrie. His gut feeling is telling him something isn't right. You'll like the next chapter. It gets a bit tense.
Thanks again for the support and awesome feedback! You're the best!

Big hugs,
Shana :)

reply by AJ McCall on 15-Feb-2022

OH, good. I was worried there for a second, lol. And you're very welcome. Yes, always trust your gut feeling!! ANd I forgot to say, I liked that little joke you wrote in there when Frank or Manuel (I can't remember who) said that his stomach didn't feel right it was from the food. I love Chinese food... pork fried rice, lol. ;)

Comment from royowen

Exceptional

You've managed to perform a fantastic swing in this fabulous story Shana, the creative saga, of the demon leaving Joseph, and somehow entering Carrie, is fantastic, I do know demons cannot operate without a human host to outwork their evil, the encountered demonic possessions in the Bible had evil obsessions, they needed to fulfil. This is beautifully written and imaginative, nobody writes these as well as you Shana. Well done my talented friend, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 14-Feb-2022

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reply by the author on 15-Feb-2022

Aww... thanks Roy :)
The story is about to get tense. Carrie is now possessed by the Shadow and now the detectives are coming to her apartment. How will this story end? I have an idea, but still, not sure. LOL! But something has to happen soon.

Thanks for all your positive feedback and helpful support.
Always your fan,
Shana :)

reply by royowen on 15-Feb-2022

I?m sure it will be fine

Comment from Lunar Duck

Excellent

Fantastic and realistic dialogue. Without a ton of contextual background, the anxiety ridden feeling of the situation is prevalent. Though the construction of some setting is subtle, it's effective. Best of luck in the contest!

 Comment Written 14-Feb-2022

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reply by the author on 15-Feb-2022

Thank you, Lunar :)
I appreciate the generous stars and positive feedback.
I'm glad you enjoyed this chapter. It only gets more tense at this point. I sure love writing this story. It gives me a purpose.

Thanks again!
Sincerely,
Shana :)