Life cycle
What I learnt from the ...10 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This lost 5-7-5, Life Cycle, has the right setup and reminds the readers that all that seems lost is merely part of the rotation we must accept as life.
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2022
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This lost 5-7-5, Life Cycle, has the right setup and reminds the readers that all that seems lost is merely part of the rotation we must accept as life.
Comment Written 15-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2022
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Thank you so much for reviewing. I appreciate it.
Comment from jaded831
Your 5-7-5 poem gave me a feeling like nothing is really lost definitely a unique perspective and it gives the reader a sense of wonder. My only suggestion is with the presentation, the color or the font blends in with the background, making it hard to read.
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2022
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Your 5-7-5 poem gave me a feeling like nothing is really lost definitely a unique perspective and it gives the reader a sense of wonder. My only suggestion is with the presentation, the color or the font blends in with the background, making it hard to read.
Comment Written 15-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2022
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Thank you very much for reviewing and for your suggestion. I changed it to a darker colour to contrast better.
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
Warming up. Stay hydrated. Meditate. Meditation is well-known as a powerful tool to calm the mind. Take time for yourself. You will enjoy the seasons (autumn and spring) if you feel better.
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2022
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Warming up. Stay hydrated. Meditate. Meditation is well-known as a powerful tool to calm the mind. Take time for yourself. You will enjoy the seasons (autumn and spring) if you feel better.
Comment Written 15-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2022
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Thank you for your review, Rosemary. I feel fine, and I do enjoy the seasons, especially spring and autumn, my favourites.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
You have made excellent use of your seventeen syllables in this lovely,
inspirational piece that fulfills the prompt and conveys a powerful message about not losing hope.
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2022
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You have made excellent use of your seventeen syllables in this lovely,
inspirational piece that fulfills the prompt and conveys a powerful message about not losing hope.
Comment Written 15-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2022
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Thank you very much Janice.
Comment from Pearl Edwards
This is a lovely 5-7-5 poem using the shedding of the leaves in autumn and the renewal in spring to give the message
Never lose your hope
A lovely presentation. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2022
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This is a lovely 5-7-5 poem using the shedding of the leaves in autumn and the renewal in spring to give the message
Never lose your hope
A lovely presentation. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 14-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2022
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Thank you very much for your thoughtful and encouraging review.
Comment from K.L. Rockquemore
I enjoyed reading your poem. The message is relatable and incredible true. Your writing is light and the font choice works well here. Keep writing and submitting your work.
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2022
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I enjoyed reading your poem. The message is relatable and incredible true. Your writing is light and the font choice works well here. Keep writing and submitting your work.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2022
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Thank you very much. So glad you enjoyed it, and I appreciate your review.
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
This is a haiku rather than merely a basic 5-7-5 poem I think. I am not competent to judge its qualities in the former context, but as a 5-7-5 I enjoyed it. Winter can seem very long, with the majestic specter of autumn stripped, but we are right of course to hope that Spring in all its glory will come in the end - it always does.
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2022
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This is a haiku rather than merely a basic 5-7-5 poem I think. I am not competent to judge its qualities in the former context, but as a 5-7-5 I enjoyed it. Winter can seem very long, with the majestic specter of autumn stripped, but we are right of course to hope that Spring in all its glory will come in the end - it always does.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2022
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Thank you Katherine for your astute review, and in retrospect, I think you are right. I was thinking of lost hope initially, just to be different from other lost things, and worked backwards from there. Never mind, too late now, and I enjoyed writing it anyway ....
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and I enjoyed reading it
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
You brought the autumnal scene here as those leaves turn gold and fall from the trees, then you skip to spring and miss out the winter months, good luck with the contest, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2022
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You brought the autumnal scene here as those leaves turn gold and fall from the trees, then you skip to spring and miss out the winter months, good luck with the contest, love Dolly x
Comment Written 13-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2022
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Thank you Dolly. I appreciate your review and good wishes.
Comment from LisaMay
Your posting is attractively presented. Using the life cycle of trees' leaves renewal in Spring as a metaphor for hope works well in this 5-7-5 poem. We can learn a lot from nature when we pay attention.
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2022
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Your posting is attractively presented. Using the life cycle of trees' leaves renewal in Spring as a metaphor for hope works well in this 5-7-5 poem. We can learn a lot from nature when we pay attention.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2022
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Thank you LisaMay. I appreciate your thoughtful true words.
Comment from Heather Burroughs
Amen! Such a beautiful way to look at the world. Especially the one we live in today. Best of luck with your entry in the upcoming contest. Many blessings to you
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2022
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Amen! Such a beautiful way to look at the world. Especially the one we live in today. Best of luck with your entry in the upcoming contest. Many blessings to you
Comment Written 13-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2022
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Thank you heaher. A lovely review, and I also appreciate your good wishes.
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Sorry, Heather. I misspelled your name. Clumsy fingers!
