God On Dale
God made an angel in heaven30 total reviews
Comment from The Mom/DarleneThomson
Dear Mr. Alcreator Litt Dear DR,
I thoroughly enjoyed your three line poem. You got all the required words in which is amazing in itself. Great job.
Blessings,
Darlene
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Dear Mr. Alcreator Litt Dear DR,
I thoroughly enjoyed your three line poem. You got all the required words in which is amazing in itself. Great job.
Blessings,
Darlene
Comment Written 12-Feb-2022
Comment from Ulla
Hi there, you do seem to be on a role here. So winning the Nobel prize was the ultimate step to become an angel. I wish you the best.of luck. Ulla:)))
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Hi there, you do seem to be on a role here. So winning the Nobel prize was the ultimate step to become an angel. I wish you the best.of luck. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 12-Feb-2022
Comment from Tpa
Good job. It was a complete story and an accurate one. I like your smart move of noting the required words of the contest in red. I wish you the best and enjoy all your work.
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Good job. It was a complete story and an accurate one. I like your smart move of noting the required words of the contest in red. I wish you the best and enjoy all your work.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2022
Comment from NANCY V. FORREST
You cmeup with a clever use of the limits set up for this contest. You managed to get irony as well as spirituality into this challenge--no mean feat.
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You cmeup with a clever use of the limits set up for this contest. You managed to get irony as well as spirituality into this challenge--no mean feat.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2022
Comment from Terry Broxson
Since you were limited to only twenty-one words is hard to get a message across. You have done that in a thought-provoking way. Is the only way to become an angel to win the Nobel Prize for literature? Maybe so.
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Since you were limited to only twenty-one words is hard to get a message across. You have done that in a thought-provoking way. Is the only way to become an angel to win the Nobel Prize for literature? Maybe so.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2022
Comment from Bill Schott
This twenty-one-word spiritual fiction story, God on Dale, meets all the requirements and finds Dale completing his purpose on earth. Nice story.
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This twenty-one-word spiritual fiction story, God on Dale, meets all the requirements and finds Dale completing his purpose on earth. Nice story.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2022
Comment from lancellot
Here is the problem. This isn't a personal thing, but really consider this. What is written isn't a story. You have a subject and and two events. At best it's an ad or a brief message.
Dale Ray won the Nobel Prize in literature yesterday. {He died in sleep today}. God made him an angel in heaven.
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Yesterday, Nobel Prize winner Dale Ray, whose literature touched millions of hearts died. Today, in Heaven God made Dale an angel.
Now we understand who Dale was to others and why God makes him an angel.
This tells a story, and an emotional impact.
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Here is the problem. This isn't a personal thing, but really consider this. What is written isn't a story. You have a subject and and two events. At best it's an ad or a brief message.
Dale Ray won the Nobel Prize in literature yesterday. {He died in sleep today}. God made him an angel in heaven.
- incomplete.
or
Yesterday, Nobel Prize winner Dale Ray, whose literature touched millions of hearts died. Today, in Heaven God made Dale an angel.
Now we understand who Dale was to others and why God makes him an angel.
This tells a story, and an emotional impact.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2022
Comment from Lloyd T. Okoko
The objective correlative of your work reminisces an ward to become an angel occasioned by Ray's winning of the Nobel Prize in Literature.
The work highlights Ray's winning of the prize; its predisposition of his death, just a day after his winning of the prize and the corollary of his being awarded an angel's status in heaven.
The work earns its texture through its strict compliance with the imperative of using the words: angel, heaven, God, Nobel, Literature and today as part of the content as well as its use of anecdotes of the prize predisposing his change of status to an angel.
Excellent work. Bravo.
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The objective correlative of your work reminisces an ward to become an angel occasioned by Ray's winning of the Nobel Prize in Literature.
The work highlights Ray's winning of the prize; its predisposition of his death, just a day after his winning of the prize and the corollary of his being awarded an angel's status in heaven.
The work earns its texture through its strict compliance with the imperative of using the words: angel, heaven, God, Nobel, Literature and today as part of the content as well as its use of anecdotes of the prize predisposing his change of status to an angel.
Excellent work. Bravo.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2022
Comment from Ricky1024
"Go on Dale"
This is 21 word spiritual fiction writing prompt entry.
Rich in Theme and Imagery.
Speaks of Dale winning the Pulitzer but then passing away the very next day?
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Sometimes life can be disappointing.
I'm watching a movie right now entitled countdown.
A bunch of college students decided to play a game.
They loaded app countdown on their cell phones as they were drinking.
The person who will die the soonest has to drink all the drinks.
That's basically what the movie is about countdown.
The winner of the game only had 3 hours to live.
A couple of students especially her boyfriend wondered why anybody would load something like that on their cell phone.
So the boyfriend drinks all the beers and then they're leaving the party and he's driving.
His girlfriend decides the walk and he gets upset and drives off.
Of course right at the very minute she dies in her kitchen of her house we don't see how he crashes into a tree in a branch pierces him!
He's in a hospital waiting for his operation but it states that his death is going to happen in today's so he's afraid.
Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.
Doctor Ricky 1024
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"Go on Dale"
This is 21 word spiritual fiction writing prompt entry.
Rich in Theme and Imagery.
Speaks of Dale winning the Pulitzer but then passing away the very next day?
...
Sometimes life can be disappointing.
I'm watching a movie right now entitled countdown.
A bunch of college students decided to play a game.
They loaded app countdown on their cell phones as they were drinking.
The person who will die the soonest has to drink all the drinks.
That's basically what the movie is about countdown.
The winner of the game only had 3 hours to live.
A couple of students especially her boyfriend wondered why anybody would load something like that on their cell phone.
So the boyfriend drinks all the beers and then they're leaving the party and he's driving.
His girlfriend decides the walk and he gets upset and drives off.
Of course right at the very minute she dies in her kitchen of her house we don't see how he crashes into a tree in a branch pierces him!
He's in a hospital waiting for his operation but it states that his death is going to happen in today's so he's afraid.
Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.
Doctor Ricky 1024
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Comment Written 12-Feb-2022
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
You are certainly good at these short flash fiction stories by using them to glory God. This is another of yours and it tells us of Dale Ray winning the Nobel Prize, and it's after that God calls him home. Well done! Good luck in the contest. :) Sandra
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You are certainly good at these short flash fiction stories by using them to glory God. This is another of yours and it tells us of Dale Ray winning the Nobel Prize, and it's after that God calls him home. Well done! Good luck in the contest. :) Sandra
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Comment Written 12-Feb-2022
