The Fire Within
Justice for all12 total reviews
Comment from karenina
Got here late but that's an advantage because the votes are in and you tied for first place...which is perfect. This is a mantra I wish the entire world would take up. Too much division and not enough justice. Great job summing up a societal mess in 17 syllables!
Karenina
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Got here late but that's an advantage because the votes are in and you tied for first place...which is perfect. This is a mantra I wish the entire world would take up. Too much division and not enough justice. Great job summing up a societal mess in 17 syllables!
Karenina
Comment Written 04-Feb-2022
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
This sacred bird is flying, soaring through the skies. He is displaying the quietness of his flight. Peacefulness and tranquility are what he is sending from the heaven above.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2022
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This sacred bird is flying, soaring through the skies. He is displaying the quietness of his flight. Peacefulness and tranquility are what he is sending from the heaven above.
Comment Written 04-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2022
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Rosemary, thanks so much for the very kind review.
Comment from jaded831
Your poem gave me a feeling of calm, almost like a prayer. Your poem has a religious vibe to it. The picture is perfect it reminded me of the holy spirit. Whether intentional or not. It is a great poem.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2022
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Your poem gave me a feeling of calm, almost like a prayer. Your poem has a religious vibe to it. The picture is perfect it reminded me of the holy spirit. Whether intentional or not. It is a great poem.
Comment Written 04-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2022
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Jaded, thanks very much for the very kind review.
Comment from Bill Schott
This 5-7-5, The Fire Within, has the right set up and emphasizes the journey to find justice. The justice sought and the use of the sea gull are unclear.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2022
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This 5-7-5, The Fire Within, has the right set up and emphasizes the journey to find justice. The justice sought and the use of the sea gull are unclear.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2022
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Bill, Thanks so much for the kind review. The justice sought is justice for ALL, and the seagull symbolizes freedom. Thanks for reading.
Comment from Patty Palmer
Your poem says a lot in these few syllables allowed. When will this madness stop. How many crimes have to be committed and how many innocent people (including children) end up dying for no reason before someone steps forward and says "That's enough!!" Someone needs to start running our country instead of killing it. Good luck with the contest.
Patty
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2022
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Your poem says a lot in these few syllables allowed. When will this madness stop. How many crimes have to be committed and how many innocent people (including children) end up dying for no reason before someone steps forward and says "That's enough!!" Someone needs to start running our country instead of killing it. Good luck with the contest.
Patty
Comment Written 03-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2022
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Hi Patty, thanks so much for the wonderful review, six stars, and encouragement.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Excellent entry for the 5-7-5 fire writing prompt contest. Good syllables count and connection between lines. Nice imagery and presentation. Add a dash after justice.
I love the justice theme.
Good luck in the contest.
Gypsy
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2022
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Excellent entry for the 5-7-5 fire writing prompt contest. Good syllables count and connection between lines. Nice imagery and presentation. Add a dash after justice.
I love the justice theme.
Good luck in the contest.
Gypsy
Comment Written 03-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2022
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Gypsy, thanks very much for the kind review and encouragement.
Comment from Wendy G
An excellent spiritual analogy with fire, and hopefully the desire for justice and actions which promote it will be a constant fire within many. Best wishes for your thoughtful and fine entry.
Wendy
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2022
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An excellent spiritual analogy with fire, and hopefully the desire for justice and actions which promote it will be a constant fire within many. Best wishes for your thoughtful and fine entry.
Wendy
Comment Written 02-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2022
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Wendy, thanks so much for the wonderful review and kind words.
Comment from Ricky1024
"The Fire Within"
This is a 5/7/5 Fire Writing Prompt Entry.
Rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
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The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned Perfectly.
Good luck with this one.
Doctor Ricky 1024
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2022
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"The Fire Within"
This is a 5/7/5 Fire Writing Prompt Entry.
Rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
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The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned Perfectly.
Good luck with this one.
Doctor Ricky 1024
Comment Written 02-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2022
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Doctor Ricky, thanks very much for the wonderful review and kind words.
Comment from juliaSjames
Yes indeed! There is something inside our spirits that keeps us motivated in the struggle for justice.
This entry resonates with me and hopefully with all who are moved to vote in the prompt..
Personally I think it would be more effective if you switched the first and last lines.
Good luck!
Stay safe and blessed
Julia
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2022
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Yes indeed! There is something inside our spirits that keeps us motivated in the struggle for justice.
This entry resonates with me and hopefully with all who are moved to vote in the prompt..
Personally I think it would be more effective if you switched the first and last lines.
Good luck!
Stay safe and blessed
Julia
Comment Written 02-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2022
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Julia, thanks so much for the wonderful review. Stay safe, also!
Comment from prettybluebirds
I found this to be a most creative and interesting poem. The artwork is perfect for the subject of the writing. Hope is one thing we can always carry within no matter how bad things get. I wish you a world of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2022
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I found this to be a most creative and interesting poem. The artwork is perfect for the subject of the writing. Hope is one thing we can always carry within no matter how bad things get. I wish you a world of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 02-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2022
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Thanks very much for the wonderful review and encouragement.
