Dancer's Prayer/reposted
There is nothing closer to love than dance38 total reviews
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your contest entry was a beautiful memory in verse of
a life well lived filled with love. I liked the way the verses
began with a question for the most part. You took readers
through the stages of this couple's life and showed how
true love always wins in the end despite situations not in
one's control.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes in the contest, Jan
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2023
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Your contest entry was a beautiful memory in verse of
a life well lived filled with love. I liked the way the verses
began with a question for the most part. You took readers
through the stages of this couple's life and showed how
true love always wins in the end despite situations not in
one's control.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes in the contest, Jan
Comment Written 25-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2023
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Thank you, Jan for the great review and beautiful words
Comment from royowen
Hi John, I would have thought it was a little more than dancing with one's partner, what if you both tire? I love the idea of the three pronged rope, which is ultimately as strong as many more prongs to its structure. Beautifully written, blessings Roy
Ecclesiastes 4:12 And though one may be overpowered, two can resist. Moreover, a cord of three strands is not quickly broken.5
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2023
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Hi John, I would have thought it was a little more than dancing with one's partner, what if you both tire? I love the idea of the three pronged rope, which is ultimately as strong as many more prongs to its structure. Beautifully written, blessings Roy
Ecclesiastes 4:12 And though one may be overpowered, two can resist. Moreover, a cord of three strands is not quickly broken.5
Comment Written 25-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2023
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Thank you so much for reviewing and commenting on this one,Roy. It means much
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Well done
Comment from Anne Johnston
Thank you for promoting your poem again. It is beautiful. I get the message that you trust your love is there for you in every part of your life, and even when it comes to a time when you can no longer dance, she will still hold you close.
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2023
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Thank you for promoting your poem again. It is beautiful. I get the message that you trust your love is there for you in every part of your life, and even when it comes to a time when you can no longer dance, she will still hold you close.
Comment Written 25-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2023
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Thank you, Ann, for a wonderful review of my poem. I'm so happy you enjoyed it
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You are very welcome
Comment from Mario PIERRE
It's a really heartfelt post about life, aging and caring for one another. A little sad as life itself, when we feel we can't do what we did before with ease. That's the secret of true love and making the other come first. Accept who the other one is, unconditionally.
Really great post!
mario
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2023
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It's a really heartfelt post about life, aging and caring for one another. A little sad as life itself, when we feel we can't do what we did before with ease. That's the secret of true love and making the other come first. Accept who the other one is, unconditionally.
Really great post!
mario
Comment Written 25-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2023
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Thank you, Mario for the heartfelt review and encouraging comments.
Comment from karenina
Ah, John. It's true when you bring these older pieces forward without promoting them your fans do not get a notification they are up (again) for review and consideration. Thanks for sharing this one a second time.
Life is a dance... As we smoothly glide with our partner, as we stumble and lose balance, as we step on a toe or two, it's the melody of love we hope carries us through...
I'm reminded of John Michael Montgomery's song "Life's a Dance" --the chorus of which is;
"Life's a dance you learn as you go
Sometimes you lead, sometimes you follow
Don't worry about what you don't know
Life's a dance you learn as you go'..."
There have been dark times in my life when I would have sworn there wasn't a tune to be heard, much less any hope at a "dance" -- my partner guided me through and I trusted him until God provided the melody once again...
Love this one, my friend.
Karenina
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2023
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Ah, John. It's true when you bring these older pieces forward without promoting them your fans do not get a notification they are up (again) for review and consideration. Thanks for sharing this one a second time.
Life is a dance... As we smoothly glide with our partner, as we stumble and lose balance, as we step on a toe or two, it's the melody of love we hope carries us through...
I'm reminded of John Michael Montgomery's song "Life's a Dance" --the chorus of which is;
"Life's a dance you learn as you go
Sometimes you lead, sometimes you follow
Don't worry about what you don't know
Life's a dance you learn as you go'..."
There have been dark times in my life when I would have sworn there wasn't a tune to be heard, much less any hope at a "dance" -- my partner guided me through and I trusted him until God provided the melody once again...
Love this one, my friend.
Karenina
Comment Written 25-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2023
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Ah! I figured as much. I'll have to repost from scratch then and maybe alter the title a bit.
Karenina, I want to thank you for reviewing this, and I want you to know I wasn't soliciting a read from you. Well, I mean not entirely, anyway, but I'm glad you did, and thank you! :))
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I need no solicitation to review your work, John. You know I'm a huge fan.
Do not repost from scratch and lose your accrued reviews... I'll PM you...
Comment from estory
Great use of form; I think these couplets really reflect the idea of pairings, and you get this great feel of two people waltzing around each other in a dance. There's also great ying yang balance in the questions juxtaposed against the answers, this feeling of one person's soul balancing out the other person's soul, their mood, everything. Interesting piece and nice imagination in the construction to illustrate the theme. estory
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2023
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Great use of form; I think these couplets really reflect the idea of pairings, and you get this great feel of two people waltzing around each other in a dance. There's also great ying yang balance in the questions juxtaposed against the answers, this feeling of one person's soul balancing out the other person's soul, their mood, everything. Interesting piece and nice imagination in the construction to illustrate the theme. estory
Comment Written 25-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2023
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Thank you, estory, for the great review and kind words. They mean much.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very nice artwork and presentation, John.
-Your notes are appreciated and I am glad you re-posted
the poem because I missed it the first time.
-I like the style with each line using the dance
as a symbol of life and it's challenges.
-I like how you use questions to understand her feelings.
-There is also a good rhyming pattern.
-I particularly line the lines about the shadows and silence.
-The two concluding verses are also very good.
-Well done.
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2023
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-Very nice artwork and presentation, John.
-Your notes are appreciated and I am glad you re-posted
the poem because I missed it the first time.
-I like the style with each line using the dance
as a symbol of life and it's challenges.
-I like how you use questions to understand her feelings.
-There is also a good rhyming pattern.
-I particularly line the lines about the shadows and silence.
-The two concluding verses are also very good.
-Well done.
Comment Written 25-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2023
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Thank you, Pam! Sandra suggested the spacing and the color scheme. I see a big difference in the presentation. Thank you for the great review and kind words. Much appreciated, Pam.
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Sandra did a good job and am glad she was helpful. You are very welcome for the review, John.
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
This is a good entry into the Love poem Poetry Contest. The text is a good size. However, there needs to be a greater contrast in the background and text color. Why not make the text the teal/turquoise color in the visual? That color would also add the energy of the movement in the visual. The message is stated with clarity and is easily understood. I knew it was a love poem before I saw it was in a love poem contest. It reads like a tender, sweet love letter to a spouse in an aging relationship.
The text is imbalanced in the poem box. Backspace the first line or add more space under the last line to make it balanced. Good spacing adds to the presentation. The visual fits perfectly. Love the movement in it! Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2023
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This is a good entry into the Love poem Poetry Contest. The text is a good size. However, there needs to be a greater contrast in the background and text color. Why not make the text the teal/turquoise color in the visual? That color would also add the energy of the movement in the visual. The message is stated with clarity and is easily understood. I knew it was a love poem before I saw it was in a love poem contest. It reads like a tender, sweet love letter to a spouse in an aging relationship.
The text is imbalanced in the poem box. Backspace the first line or add more space under the last line to make it balanced. Good spacing adds to the presentation. The visual fits perfectly. Love the movement in it! Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 25-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2023
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Thank you, Sandra, for the in-depth review and the help with color and spacing. It needed a woman's touch! LOL. Thanks again. I made those changes and it made a huge difference. :)
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You are welcome, John. I would say it is more of a visual creative touch.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I think dancing with someone does indeed bring us closer together and your romantic dancing here seems to have great meaning and purpose, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2023
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I think dancing with someone does indeed bring us closer together and your romantic dancing here seems to have great meaning and purpose, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 24-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2023
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Thank you, Dolly for the great review. It means a lot coming from you.
Comment from Ginda Simpson
This is a beautiful tribute to enduring love, throughout the years and the struggles and challenges that are inevitable. Dancing even when our steps begin to falter. THIS is a love poem. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2023
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This is a beautiful tribute to enduring love, throughout the years and the struggles and challenges that are inevitable. Dancing even when our steps begin to falter. THIS is a love poem. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2023
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Thank you Ginda, for the great review and encouraging words.
