Dancer's Prayer/reposted
There is nothing closer to love than dance38 total reviews
Comment from kahpot
How beautiful, having someone to guide and to helps through life, with all our ups and downs, and persevere with our short comings, an excellent poem and tribute to a loved one, especially "would you cradle me there" loved this one, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2023
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How beautiful, having someone to guide and to helps through life, with all our ups and downs, and persevere with our short comings, an excellent poem and tribute to a loved one, especially "would you cradle me there" loved this one, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
Comment Written 25-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2023
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kahpot, thank you so much for the six and the wonderful words. I'm so happy you enjoyed this one.
Comment from Pearl Edwards
I love this rhyming poem about the dance of life and love and about being there through all different dances. Ireally enjoyed the sentiments in this one and wish you luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2023
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I love this rhyming poem about the dance of life and love and about being there through all different dances. Ireally enjoyed the sentiments in this one and wish you luck in the contest.
Comment Written 25-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2023
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Thank you Pearl, for this great review. I'm happy you enjoyed this one.
Comment from Aussie
The ebb and flow of the dancers down through the years is described so well. Til' death do we part' came to mind. Dancing is a wonderful introduction to partnership. I enjoyed this much John. K xx Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2023
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The ebb and flow of the dancers down through the years is described so well. Til' death do we part' came to mind. Dancing is a wonderful introduction to partnership. I enjoyed this much John. K xx Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 25-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2023
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Thank you, K, for the great review and the beautiful words. Arrivederci!!! And keep on dancing, my friend!
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You silly moo! I've only got one leg to dance?! 😊
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Oh crap! I didn't know, K! However, I tried to look up your referencing me as a silly moo and couldn't find it anywhere! I think it may be better if I don't find it? Hahahaha. Thank you for keeping your sense of humor, K. Best, JohnC
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John it is a friendly saying 'silly moo' meaning cows (moo) are dumb. I had a FS fellow write to me saying he couldn't find FS. Told him to look it up on the web...duh, silly moo! :-)
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Ahh, gotcha! I'm going to use it on my kids!! Hahaha
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Here is another one for kids or adults who talk too much, "Gee, you sure can talk under concrete!" Hee, Hee.
Comment from Jim Wile
I'm so glad you re-posted this, John. This was a little before I joined, and I can see why you wanted to share it with more people. It is beautifully written with the metaphor of dance representing life itself. It was heartfelt and beautiful and showed the strong bond between this pair. I loved the font you chose too. Great job. Jim
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2023
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I'm so glad you re-posted this, John. This was a little before I joined, and I can see why you wanted to share it with more people. It is beautifully written with the metaphor of dance representing life itself. It was heartfelt and beautiful and showed the strong bond between this pair. I loved the font you chose too. Great job. Jim
Comment Written 25-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2023
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Thank you, Jim, for the six and the beautiful review.
Comment from Mary Vigasin
John, this is beautiful, gentle, intimate and romantic. As soon as I read the first question, I knew this was
a gem.
I am glad you reposted.
Good luck in the contest.
Best wishes and regards.
Mary
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2023
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John, this is beautiful, gentle, intimate and romantic. As soon as I read the first question, I knew this was
a gem.
I am glad you reposted.
Good luck in the contest.
Best wishes and regards.
Mary
Comment Written 25-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2023
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Mary, thank you so much for the six and the kind words and encouragement.
Comment from Charles W. Johnson
This is a beautiful piece of poetry. Terrific metaphor, lovely rhyming, smooth pace and it captures the soul. Well done, John. Good luck in your contest.
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2023
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This is a beautiful piece of poetry. Terrific metaphor, lovely rhyming, smooth pace and it captures the soul. Well done, John. Good luck in your contest.
Comment Written 25-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2023
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Thank you, Charles for this great review and wonderful words. Much appreciated!
Comment from rspoet
Hello John,
This is a wonderful poem of couplets,
like partners in a dance of love and life.
I like the form using questions that go deeper into the relationship
with each dance and question.
"If I dance with the angels,
might you share in my grace?
If I've lessened in vigor,
might you urge a new pace?"
I might switch the position of these two couplets
So the angels are towards the end.
You also could also alternate "might" and "would" just for variety.
But it's a wonderful poem just as it is too.
Best wishes.
Robert
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2023
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Hello John,
This is a wonderful poem of couplets,
like partners in a dance of love and life.
I like the form using questions that go deeper into the relationship
with each dance and question.
"If I dance with the angels,
might you share in my grace?
If I've lessened in vigor,
might you urge a new pace?"
I might switch the position of these two couplets
So the angels are towards the end.
You also could also alternate "might" and "would" just for variety.
But it's a wonderful poem just as it is too.
Best wishes.
Robert
Comment Written 25-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2023
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Thank you, Robert! You don't know how many times I've switched around these stanzas. Hahaha. I think you're right! Perhaps one more switch? And might and would are also in my sights.
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I want to thank you for those changes, Robert! They were perfect! It reads more gracefully. I switched the Stanzas and altered the might and would. Thank you!
Comment from lyenochka
I'm glad that you reposted because I don't think I was notified of your post! Oh. I just noticed it was posted in January. Perhaps I wasn't getting your notifications then?
This is a lovely poem that uses the dance metaphor for love in life. And you pose each couplet question to seek out the true love's response for each season in life.
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2023
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I'm glad that you reposted because I don't think I was notified of your post! Oh. I just noticed it was posted in January. Perhaps I wasn't getting your notifications then?
This is a lovely poem that uses the dance metaphor for love in life. And you pose each couplet question to seek out the true love's response for each season in life.
Comment Written 25-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2023
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Thank you, Helen, for the great review. It's always a pleasure to have you review my work--old or new! LOL
Comment from w.j.debi
The dance is an excellent metaphor for life as we are sometimes in perfect timing, at other times completely out of step and sometimes we just make those little missteps that throw us off balance.
Thanks for sharing you verse.
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2023
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The dance is an excellent metaphor for life as we are sometimes in perfect timing, at other times completely out of step and sometimes we just make those little missteps that throw us off balance.
Thanks for sharing you verse.
Comment Written 25-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2023
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Thank you for the great review, w.j.debi! I'm happy you enjoyed it!
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi John
The rhyming couplets can form abab quatrains which seem to use dancing as a fighting with faith. It is a prayer that we have enough to be invited into Heaven.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2023
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Hi John
The rhyming couplets can form abab quatrains which seem to use dancing as a fighting with faith. It is a prayer that we have enough to be invited into Heaven.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
Comment Written 25-Mar-2023
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2023
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Thank you, Joan for the great review and reassuring words.
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You're welcome on both accounts, John.
Joan
