Quiet Lawyer
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Comment from lancellot
A good chapter.
notes:
"Whoa boys! I'm excited to see you, too, but you know jumping on {humans} isn't allowed."
- should this be: people. You don't really hear us referring to each other as humans.
Cordero adjusted a gel seat cushion. "This is so your rear end doesn't get sore." He handed her gloves. "Put these on. They'll help your hands and those fancy fingernails." As she did, he stood on Dolly's side. "We mount horses on the left, so stand here." He held out the stirrup. Place your left foot here and pull yourself up by the saddle horn. As you do, swing your right leg over the horse."
- add spaces
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reply by the author on 22-Jan-2022
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A good chapter.
notes:
"Whoa boys! I'm excited to see you, too, but you know jumping on {humans} isn't allowed."
- should this be: people. You don't really hear us referring to each other as humans.
Cordero adjusted a gel seat cushion. "This is so your rear end doesn't get sore." He handed her gloves. "Put these on. They'll help your hands and those fancy fingernails." As she did, he stood on Dolly's side. "We mount horses on the left, so stand here." He held out the stirrup. Place your left foot here and pull yourself up by the saddle horn. As you do, swing your right leg over the horse."
- add spaces
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Comment Written 22-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2022
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I changed 'humans' to people. I don't understand your suggestion for spacing. Cordero is the only person speaking. I did notice a missing quotation mark and added it. Thank you for the suggestions and reading.
