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Comment from Boogienights
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A beautiful lune poem and very true. Isnt it a winder how God designed nature to create and protect that beautiful creature. Thanks for sharing and best of luck in the contest. :)

 Comment Written 20-Jan-2022


reply by the author on 20-Jan-2022
    thank you boogie :-)
Comment from Janet Foor
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A lovely lune poem. I was not familiar with this form of a condensed haiku of 5-3-5 syllables. You paint a beautiful picture with a minimal amount of words. Well done.

Blessings
Janet

 Comment Written 20-Jan-2022


reply by the author on 20-Jan-2022
    thank you janet :)
Comment from dragonpoet
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This quick short poem gives the stages of life for the butterfly. I like the way you spread out the middle word to show the spreadig of the wings, maybe.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan

 Comment Written 20-Jan-2022


reply by the author on 20-Jan-2022
    thank you joan :)
reply by dragonpoet on 21-Jan-2022
    Any time.
    Joan
Comment from harmony13
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The first two lines of this poem flow and connect well. The last line
says it all! I thought about how much I love butterflies and their
symbolism. I visualized butterflies and how they emerge. Great Poem!

 Comment Written 20-Jan-2022


reply by the author on 20-Jan-2022
    thank you harmony :-)
Comment from royowen
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Oh yes indeed, there's something wonderful about about beauty emerging from something that is fairly ordinary, if I was to describe rebirth, it would be in exactly that way. Beautifully written, blessings Roy,

 Comment Written 20-Jan-2022


reply by the author on 20-Jan-2022
    thank you roy :-)
reply by royowen on 20-Jan-2022
    Most welcome
Comment from Joanne Gill-Maddick
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This is a nicely written lune poem. The whole process of emerging from a caterpillar into a butterfly totally amazes me. Love this one. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 20-Jan-2022


reply by the author on 20-Jan-2022
    thank you joanne :)
Comment from Pam (respa)
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-The syllable count is good, along with the topic.
-Effective imagery describing the
change from caterpillar to butterfly.
-A very good concluding line shows
the beauty that transforms in the process.
-Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 20-Jan-2022


reply by the author on 20-Jan-2022
    thank you pam :)
reply by Pam (respa) on 20-Jan-2022
    You are welcome.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
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Perfect! This tells the tale of the caterpillar through to his emergence into a butterfly. They are incredible creatures and probably the only one who is the perfect Cinderella. The scullery maid to a princess. Loved this, well done and good luck in the contest. :)) Sandra xx

 Comment Written 20-Jan-2022


reply by the author on 20-Jan-2022
    thank you sandra :)
Comment from Gee
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This is a wonderful entry in the lune contest.
My only suggestion would be to post a butterfly picture with the poem.
I noticed poems with pictures do better in the contest.

But a great poem in my opinion.
Thanks for sharing
Gee

 Comment Written 20-Jan-2022


reply by the author on 20-Jan-2022
    thank you gee :)
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
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Few words that describe a beautiful transformation here as a butterfly emerges into a world of flight, much enjoyed, a wonderful scene described, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 20-Jan-2022


reply by the author on 20-Jan-2022
    thank you dolly :-)