Just A Load Of Rubbish?
I hate to see thoughtless people littering.15 total reviews
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Lisa,
Fantastic message in your poem, a fine entry in the "Take Note" writing prompt. I wrote a children's poem about garbage that's strewn all over the place. It's called "The Litterbug", way back in my portfolio. I have run (now walk) the Grand Bay Trail since 2006. One spring day, after viewing so much garbage near the junior high school, I sat down and wrote it. People are such pigs, even kids. It just proves that they don't love or respect the planet.
The Indians respected Earth. They believed everything is alive. I remember Chief Dan George's speech in the 1970 movie, "Little Big Man"...
https://youtu.be/rrirdytJj5k
I like the inner rhymes in each verse.
My favorite verse,
"This message I send in the hope to end
the litter that spoils my view.
It's aimed at the crass, be they lad or lass,
so thoughtless in what they do."
Nicely penned! Good Luck in the contest!
Hugs,
Kimbob
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Hi Lisa,
Fantastic message in your poem, a fine entry in the "Take Note" writing prompt. I wrote a children's poem about garbage that's strewn all over the place. It's called "The Litterbug", way back in my portfolio. I have run (now walk) the Grand Bay Trail since 2006. One spring day, after viewing so much garbage near the junior high school, I sat down and wrote it. People are such pigs, even kids. It just proves that they don't love or respect the planet.
The Indians respected Earth. They believed everything is alive. I remember Chief Dan George's speech in the 1970 movie, "Little Big Man"...
https://youtu.be/rrirdytJj5k
I like the inner rhymes in each verse.
My favorite verse,
"This message I send in the hope to end
the litter that spoils my view.
It's aimed at the crass, be they lad or lass,
so thoughtless in what they do."
Nicely penned! Good Luck in the contest!
Hugs,
Kimbob
Comment Written 22-Jan-2022
Comment from Gee
Very nice poem.
You might be surprised to hear.
Many Asian countries are terrible about littering.
I hope you do well in the competition.
Thanks for sharing with us.
Good Luck
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2022
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Very nice poem.
You might be surprised to hear.
Many Asian countries are terrible about littering.
I hope you do well in the competition.
Thanks for sharing with us.
Good Luck
Comment Written 22-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2022
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Thanks for reviewing.
I'm not surprised at all about littering in Asian countries - I've seen it.
Comment from tempeste
Ciao mystery poet , you now have 5 votes.
People that litter make me sick.
It's a question of education . People that learn to be clean at home are clean in public too.
So parents should teach their kids to be tidy starting of with their rooms.
I hate stepping in chewing gum or when my dog gets it caught up in his fur ..discussing.
Also plastic bags and other rubbish dump in the neighbourhood can end up injuring or suffocating wildlife.
Your poem flowed well and you summed up well the problem.
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2022
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Ciao mystery poet , you now have 5 votes.
People that litter make me sick.
It's a question of education . People that learn to be clean at home are clean in public too.
So parents should teach their kids to be tidy starting of with their rooms.
I hate stepping in chewing gum or when my dog gets it caught up in his fur ..discussing.
Also plastic bags and other rubbish dump in the neighbourhood can end up injuring or suffocating wildlife.
Your poem flowed well and you summed up well the problem.
Comment Written 22-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2022
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Thank you for voting for my poem! I totally agree with your comments - I wanted to mention how litter affects wildlife but the poem was already getting too long.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Excellent entry for the
Take Note writing prompt contest.
A poem about garbage is pretty funny.
The rhymes do not seem forced. Your poem flows well. It draws on emotions and it presents strong images.
I wish you the best of luck in the contest.
Gypsy
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Excellent entry for the
Take Note writing prompt contest.
A poem about garbage is pretty funny.
The rhymes do not seem forced. Your poem flows well. It draws on emotions and it presents strong images.
I wish you the best of luck in the contest.
Gypsy
Comment Written 21-Jan-2022
Comment from Wendy G
A very cleverly written poem on an important theme for the whole community. You have developed it well, and your rhyme is smooth and unforced. Best wishes - a great entry.
Wendy
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A very cleverly written poem on an important theme for the whole community. You have developed it well, and your rhyme is smooth and unforced. Best wishes - a great entry.
Wendy
Comment Written 21-Jan-2022
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem, Just a Load of Rubbish, works well, I think, as a strong statement directed towards those who still refuse to choose using a waste can over littering. Good work.
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This poem, Just a Load of Rubbish, works well, I think, as a strong statement directed towards those who still refuse to choose using a waste can over littering. Good work.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2022
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
I sure hope they will read your poem and tidy of the roads, streets in town. The words flow well in your poem. It is easy to understand. The stanzas are very well formed. Good luck in the contest.
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I sure hope they will read your poem and tidy of the roads, streets in town. The words flow well in your poem. It is easy to understand. The stanzas are very well formed. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2022
Comment from AnnieDawn
I had to comment on this poem as it is so well done. I have never read one that had the rhyme in the middle and at the end of the sentence at the same time. You have done it so well that there must be a certain style for it. Great job.
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I had to comment on this poem as it is so well done. I have never read one that had the rhyme in the middle and at the end of the sentence at the same time. You have done it so well that there must be a certain style for it. Great job.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2022
Comment from The Mom/DarleneThomson
So somebody else feels the same way I do. This poem is well written. It does rhyme. It flows so well. It is very creative. It sends a wonderful and much-needed message. Best wishes in the contest.
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So somebody else feels the same way I do. This poem is well written. It does rhyme. It flows so well. It is very creative. It sends a wonderful and much-needed message. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2022
Comment from Joanne Gill-Maddick
This is a nicely written poem it has a great flow and rhyme. I'm with you on that I hate seeing people through garbage around. With a trash bin not far away either. It's awful. Great photo to compliment your words. Good luck in the contest.
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This is a nicely written poem it has a great flow and rhyme. I'm with you on that I hate seeing people through garbage around. With a trash bin not far away either. It's awful. Great photo to compliment your words. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 20-Jan-2022
