Jane Awakens to a New Jane
Someone Else contest entry.5 total reviews
Comment from Tom Horonzy
I liked it. You held me in suspense until the final third which clarifie where you began was a necessity. I love women in white, silk blouses! I imagined the gal as first described but after the attendant found her in the raw my mind tuned out to the twilight Zone.
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2022
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I liked it. You held me in suspense until the final third which clarifie where you began was a necessity. I love women in white, silk blouses! I imagined the gal as first described but after the attendant found her in the raw my mind tuned out to the twilight Zone.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2022
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Sorry about the switch - hope you recover :-). Thank you for the kind review!
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Be well; keep writing.
Comment from SimianSavant
This is clever. And a little bit sad. It reminds me just a little of driving my grandmother back from Mass, down a country road, and her being so excited that we were at the beach. The mind is a wonderful and strange place, creating unvisited new worlds and revisiting old ones. I like that you keep the reader guessing which one it might be. Nice work.
-Harambe
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2022
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This is clever. And a little bit sad. It reminds me just a little of driving my grandmother back from Mass, down a country road, and her being so excited that we were at the beach. The mind is a wonderful and strange place, creating unvisited new worlds and revisiting old ones. I like that you keep the reader guessing which one it might be. Nice work.
-Harambe
Comment Written 20-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2022
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Thank you! That was a kind review.
Comment from LisaMay
Virtual 6
What a terrific story! You put us into the day's schedule of this woman with an important role to play in public life, only to discover she is delusional. Her pride in her appearance, so well described in the first part of your story, is particularly sad as we discover she is an agitated, naked, confused resident at an institution.
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2022
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Virtual 6
What a terrific story! You put us into the day's schedule of this woman with an important role to play in public life, only to discover she is delusional. Her pride in her appearance, so well described in the first part of your story, is particularly sad as we discover she is an agitated, naked, confused resident at an institution.
Comment Written 19-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2022
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Thank you! What a kind review.
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A powerful story, ultimately very sad.
Comment from The Journaler
This is an interesting story. It wasn't till the end that i realized that the character was in the hospital. I was all set for the big business meeting!
Well done, and moves along nicely.
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2022
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This is an interesting story. It wasn't till the end that i realized that the character was in the hospital. I was all set for the big business meeting!
Well done, and moves along nicely.
Comment Written 19-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2022
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Thank you, and thanks for the kind review!
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You are welcome!
Comment from lancellot
So, she wasn't actually someone different. She was only a woman in a hospital having delusions. Well that is quite a take on the prompt. Original ideas and different ways of looking at things makes for good stories. I enjoyed this one and the twist ending.
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2022
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So, she wasn't actually someone different. She was only a woman in a hospital having delusions. Well that is quite a take on the prompt. Original ideas and different ways of looking at things makes for good stories. I enjoyed this one and the twist ending.
Comment Written 19-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2022
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Thank you, and thanks for the kind review!
