Love Life
While there's Still Time...9 total reviews
Comment from Thatguypk
Congratulations on your competition win. Very worthy. My wife's sister was taken in a tragic accident when she was only 10. It's a loss that a family never gets over. You have summed it up so well in your poem.
PK
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2022
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Congratulations on your competition win. Very worthy. My wife's sister was taken in a tragic accident when she was only 10. It's a loss that a family never gets over. You have summed it up so well in your poem.
PK
Comment Written 22-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2022
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Thank you. My daughter's boyfriend was killed in a car accident in 2008. I was the last person he talked to on the phone. I appreciate your kind words.
Comment from The Mom/DarleneThomson
A very sad poem. The writer does meet the qualifications for the contest. The poem does send a message in a poem. It does rhyme. The flow is very even and consistent. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2022
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A very sad poem. The writer does meet the qualifications for the contest. The poem does send a message in a poem. It does rhyme. The flow is very even and consistent. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2022
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Thank you for this nice review and the good wishes...both are very appreciated. :)
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You are welcome. Blessings, Darlene
Comment from Joanne Gill-Maddick
This is a nicely written poem. Too many times senseless accidents causes life's to be cut short. So sad. Sometimes unknown causes take them. To lose loved ones In the prime of life is so devastating. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2022
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This is a nicely written poem. Too many times senseless accidents causes life's to be cut short. So sad. Sometimes unknown causes take them. To lose loved ones In the prime of life is so devastating. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 19-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2022
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Thank you for your thoughtful review and your kind words. :)
Comment from WriterHeather
This a a beautiful and poignant tribute to so many lives lost in car accidents each year. It always breaks my heart to see those roadside memorials. Thanks for sharing this piece
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2022
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This a a beautiful and poignant tribute to so many lives lost in car accidents each year. It always breaks my heart to see those roadside memorials. Thanks for sharing this piece
Comment Written 19-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2022
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Thank you, this is overwhelming. :)
Comment from Barry Penfold
Yep this hits the spots on all fronts. Well written and rhymed. The message is clear and is one we all probably forget until we are reminded again. Life is short so live it well. Well done.
Cheers
Barry Penfold
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2022
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Yep this hits the spots on all fronts. Well written and rhymed. The message is clear and is one we all probably forget until we are reminded again. Life is short so live it well. Well done.
Cheers
Barry Penfold
Comment Written 19-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2022
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Thank you for this amazing review and the 6 stars. It is so kind of you. :)
Comment from Theodore McDowell
Cut down before he had the chance,
to taste each flavor of his life.
Before he had more time to dance,
before my daughter became his wife.
This is a powerful stanza. I shudder every time I pass a wooden cross plunged in the embankment along a road or highway. Such seemingly meaningless tragedies.
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2022
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Cut down before he had the chance,
to taste each flavor of his life.
Before he had more time to dance,
before my daughter became his wife.
This is a powerful stanza. I shudder every time I pass a wooden cross plunged in the embankment along a road or highway. Such seemingly meaningless tragedies.
Comment Written 19-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2022
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Thank you for this excellent review and your kind and thoughtful comments.
Comment from Wendy G
A very meaningful poem - but so sad. You have written it beautifully with feeling and compassion - and a strong message. Very smooth flowing, with great rhyme. Best wishes for your excellent entry in the contest.
Wendy
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2022
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A very meaningful poem - but so sad. You have written it beautifully with feeling and compassion - and a strong message. Very smooth flowing, with great rhyme. Best wishes for your excellent entry in the contest.
Wendy
Comment Written 19-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2022
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Thank you so much, this thoughtful review means a lot to me. :)
Comment from kahpot
What a wonderful message you told in these words, yes we must live life to the fullest everyday as we cannot see the future, "all dreams erased, cuts like a knife" (cuts) should this be (cut like a knife? very well done, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022
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What a wonderful message you told in these words, yes we must live life to the fullest everyday as we cannot see the future, "all dreams erased, cuts like a knife" (cuts) should this be (cut like a knife? very well done, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
Comment Written 18-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022
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Thanks so much for this great review and for the correction...it's very appreciated. :)
Comment from LisaMay
I too have lost loved friends in car accidents, so your poem feels particularly vivid to me. You bring the emotion of loss to the fore with mention of a daughter's boyfriend dying.
A couple of corrections in the last stanza:
Cherish has one 'r'
heavens needs an apostrophe = heaven's
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022
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I too have lost loved friends in car accidents, so your poem feels particularly vivid to me. You bring the emotion of loss to the fore with mention of a daughter's boyfriend dying.
A couple of corrections in the last stanza:
Cherish has one 'r'
heavens needs an apostrophe = heaven's
Comment Written 18-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022
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Thank you for sharing your thoughts and for the corrections. I really appreciate both.
