What Counts in the Long Run
when nobody's looking6 total reviews
Comment from cupa tea
Makes me think about my childhood days. We had apple trees. Tons of seeds.
What?" Danny said, (asked) blowing a seed.
Well told...Good luck in the contest
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022
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Makes me think about my childhood days. We had apple trees. Tons of seeds.
What?" Danny said, (asked) blowing a seed.
Well told...Good luck in the contest
Comment Written 18-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022
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how fun to have apple trees.
Thanks for reading and the suggested correction, and good wishes.
Comment from Jesse James Doty
Good for Danny, he won fair and square! Celeste may have shown him up in front of her friends but he knew that he had won in the game of life! This children's watermelon tale shows pride in its most important element. The other pride entries I read only scratched on the surface of what it means to have pride in your accomplishments.
Thanks for showing what pride is all about.
Have a wonderful week!
Jesse
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022
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Good for Danny, he won fair and square! Celeste may have shown him up in front of her friends but he knew that he had won in the game of life! This children's watermelon tale shows pride in its most important element. The other pride entries I read only scratched on the surface of what it means to have pride in your accomplishments.
Thanks for showing what pride is all about.
Have a wonderful week!
Jesse
Comment Written 18-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022
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Jesse, what a lovely review! Thank you so much! You have a wonderful week, too.
Katharine
By the way, I printed your review. I keep those that are extra special to me. Thanks again.
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I am honored that you printed my review.
Enjoy the rest of your week!
Jesse
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Excellent entry for the Pride contest. You named the most important thing to be proud of oneself. Cute watermelon story. Great samples. I like the presentation. Well done my friend. Good luck in the contest.
Gypsy
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022
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Excellent entry for the Pride contest. You named the most important thing to be proud of oneself. Cute watermelon story. Great samples. I like the presentation. Well done my friend. Good luck in the contest.
Gypsy
Comment Written 18-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022
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Thanks, Gypsy. much appreciated!
Comment from Paul McFarland
Nice little story. Danny just couldn't perform under pressure. Sometimes we all do better when no one is looking. Some of us, me included, just have to be satisfied with our accomplishments, even though they go unwitnessed.
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2022
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Nice little story. Danny just couldn't perform under pressure. Sometimes we all do better when no one is looking. Some of us, me included, just have to be satisfied with our accomplishments, even though they go unwitnessed.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2022
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thanks, Paul.
Yes, he proved to himself he could do it. :)
Comment from Thatguypk
What a very enjoyable tale. I'm prepared to wager that Danny will have a brighter future than Celeste, based on his attitude.
She wallows in the victory of the moment, while he is perhaps more long-sighted, and has the self-belief to know he can do better. I like that he doesn't feel the need to prove himself. Thanks for sharing this.
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2022
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What a very enjoyable tale. I'm prepared to wager that Danny will have a brighter future than Celeste, based on his attitude.
She wallows in the victory of the moment, while he is perhaps more long-sighted, and has the self-belief to know he can do better. I like that he doesn't feel the need to prove himself. Thanks for sharing this.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2022
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I think he will, too. And thank you for seeing that and for your comments.
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
This is a nice piece for the competition. Well written and engaging write. Couple of missing bits-
"B+. Missed two. - need closing speech marks here.
two pieces, one yellow one blue. - may need punctuation or conjunctive after yellow.
It matches my dress." - need opening speech marks here.
"That's not fair, Celeste whined. - need closing speech marks here.
Both of them went further than Celeste's - farther.
All the best GMG
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2022
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Hi there,
This is a nice piece for the competition. Well written and engaging write. Couple of missing bits-
"B+. Missed two. - need closing speech marks here.
two pieces, one yellow one blue. - may need punctuation or conjunctive after yellow.
It matches my dress." - need opening speech marks here.
"That's not fair, Celeste whined. - need closing speech marks here.
Both of them went further than Celeste's - farther.
All the best GMG
Comment Written 17-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2022
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my punctuation (or lack thereof) gets me every time. Thanks for the catches. I wrote this after 2 last night, it's a wonder I got any.
thanks
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my punctuation (or lack thereof) gets me every time. Thanks for the catches. I wrote this after 2 last night, it's a wonder I got any.
thanks
tried to nominate you for your help. said I already had, sorry.
