Banked Memories
Many Best Days Ever Make a Lifetime29 total reviews
Comment from Mary Vigasin
This is a wonderfully written story of friendship and sharing memories with joy.
One cannot feel your mood uplifted after reading this story.
Good luck in the contest.
Best wishes,
Mary
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2022
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This is a wonderfully written story of friendship and sharing memories with joy.
One cannot feel your mood uplifted after reading this story.
Good luck in the contest.
Best wishes,
Mary
Comment Written 29-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2022
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I am hoping that you actually meant 'one can feel' rather than 'cannot'. lol Thank you so much for reading and commenting. ann
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yep, I should have read it closely. I did meant one can feet your mood uplift after reading this story.
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No reply was necessary. I make so dang many mistakes and don't catch them on re-reading, because I expect the text to say what I was thinking! I just feel a little less inept in the rare case that I find someone's error. lol
Comment from BethShelby
This is a nice story. Good friends to laugh with and to remember happy times should be right up there with the best memories ever. There are many great moments in our life and thinking about the good ones is a good exercise in positive thinking.
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2022
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This is a nice story. Good friends to laugh with and to remember happy times should be right up there with the best memories ever. There are many great moments in our life and thinking about the good ones is a good exercise in positive thinking.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2022
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Thanks so much for your time in reading and your kind words.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This was a very good day for you, not only remembering your best days but enjoying Steve's memories of best days. You wrapped it all in a great time together and will have his memories for years to come along with yours. Good job.
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2022
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This was a very good day for you, not only remembering your best days but enjoying Steve's memories of best days. You wrapped it all in a great time together and will have his memories for years to come along with yours. Good job.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2022
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Thanks for your time in reading and commenting.
Comment from royowen
I was only talking about this yesterday. We either remember the really good days, )which are mostly this side of the fence memories) or alternatively the really bad days. And we have a myriad of times in our bank of memories to draw on, beautifully written dear friend, good luck, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2022
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I was only talking about this yesterday. We either remember the really good days, )which are mostly this side of the fence memories) or alternatively the really bad days. And we have a myriad of times in our bank of memories to draw on, beautifully written dear friend, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 28-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2022
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Thank you for reading and commenting.
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Most welcome
Comment from Theodore McDowell
Great poem for the contest. It's very creative. I love the last words, which sum up the story:
"It's today! Not only do I have all of those banked best-day-ever memories to bring out and enjoy all over again, I have a friend with whom to share them and another good memory to bank."
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2022
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Great poem for the contest. It's very creative. I love the last words, which sum up the story:
"It's today! Not only do I have all of those banked best-day-ever memories to bring out and enjoy all over again, I have a friend with whom to share them and another good memory to bank."
Comment Written 28-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2022
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Thank you for your time and kind words.
Comment from Terry Broxson
Okay, you are right. This is a crappy story. It is also an exceptional story; we can drop the crappy part. I had tears in my eyes as I read the last paragraph. How insightful you expressed that life is full of the best days ever, made better when we remember them and can share them with a friend.
The paragraph about Merilyn might need a little more explanation. Think about it. Otherwise, it is beautiful.
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2022
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Okay, you are right. This is a crappy story. It is also an exceptional story; we can drop the crappy part. I had tears in my eyes as I read the last paragraph. How insightful you expressed that life is full of the best days ever, made better when we remember them and can share them with a friend.
The paragraph about Merilyn might need a little more explanation. Think about it. Otherwise, it is beautiful.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2022
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What would I do without you, Terry! You always make me feel better about myself and about 'things'. Thank you. You are right about the Merilyn paragraph -- and I am going to take a second look at that. I appreciate you insight, your support and maybe most all the not-complete-truths when you say what I want to hear. Buit I enjoy hearing them anyway.
Comment from Jay Squires
Ohhhh, this is so good! Your writing is exquisite in its simplicity--and of course, there's power in that. You conveyed the bonds of true friendship, which is a rarity between a man and woman when there is no underlying sexual tension.
Here are a few points that you may (or may not) want to incorporate in your story. Only one is in the way of spag (your piece was so well-edited)! And that was simply an oversight.
I heard the front door opening. [If you will allow for a suggestion, I believe this sentence would be better served in the paragraph below it, since it is the first-person narrator, Ann, who heard it.]
so I left the front door open while I took my dog out back. [Open? Or do you mean unlocked?]
"Actually, I was just checking in on my Fanstory site a few minutes ago. There's new contest posted - Best Day Ever. What was your best day ever, Steve? [Fascinating how you made this contest a part of the story!]
"That's difficult question to answer. [That's {a?} difficult question to answer.]
I hit that three-bagger home run in the district playoffs! [I'm not trying to dictate what Steve should have said, but a "three-bagger" is a triple. If he was talking about a home run that knocked in runners, one on each bag, then it's called a "grand slam" home run, or "homer".]
I believe you may well have a winner here. It's very warm and personal, and written to entertain ... which it certainly did!
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2022
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Ohhhh, this is so good! Your writing is exquisite in its simplicity--and of course, there's power in that. You conveyed the bonds of true friendship, which is a rarity between a man and woman when there is no underlying sexual tension.
Here are a few points that you may (or may not) want to incorporate in your story. Only one is in the way of spag (your piece was so well-edited)! And that was simply an oversight.
I heard the front door opening. [If you will allow for a suggestion, I believe this sentence would be better served in the paragraph below it, since it is the first-person narrator, Ann, who heard it.]
so I left the front door open while I took my dog out back. [Open? Or do you mean unlocked?]
"Actually, I was just checking in on my Fanstory site a few minutes ago. There's new contest posted - Best Day Ever. What was your best day ever, Steve? [Fascinating how you made this contest a part of the story!]
"That's difficult question to answer. [That's {a?} difficult question to answer.]
I hit that three-bagger home run in the district playoffs! [I'm not trying to dictate what Steve should have said, but a "three-bagger" is a triple. If he was talking about a home run that knocked in runners, one on each bag, then it's called a "grand slam" home run, or "homer".]
I believe you may well have a winner here. It's very warm and personal, and written to entertain ... which it certainly did!
Comment Written 28-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2022
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Thank you!! The spag will be immediately corrected and I am so very appreciative of every suggestion and word you have written.
Comment from dellsworthpoet
Very nicely done. The whole piece has a over the kitchen table feel. You expressed the feel of friendship with this piece.
The pace is good. The language is conversational and warm. The dialogue is believable and relaxed. The end is well-written.
Thanks for sharing. A good read.
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reply by the author on 28-Jan-2022
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Very nicely done. The whole piece has a over the kitchen table feel. You expressed the feel of friendship with this piece.
The pace is good. The language is conversational and warm. The dialogue is believable and relaxed. The end is well-written.
Thanks for sharing. A good read.
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Comment Written 28-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2022
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Thanks so much for your time and your kind words.
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You are welcome.
Comment from Melodie Michelle
Excellent and cute story! Perfect entry for the BEST DAY EVER contest and I wish you all the best in the contest my friend;-)
The storyline was very interesting and held my attention throughout the piece and I enjoyed the wavy the characters bounced off nicely with one another! I would've loved to have seen some imagery added to tie it all together into a lovely presentation;-(
Thanks for sharing this well written piece and many blessings to you!
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reply by the author on 28-Jan-2022
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Excellent and cute story! Perfect entry for the BEST DAY EVER contest and I wish you all the best in the contest my friend;-)
The storyline was very interesting and held my attention throughout the piece and I enjoyed the wavy the characters bounced off nicely with one another! I would've loved to have seen some imagery added to tie it all together into a lovely presentation;-(
Thanks for sharing this well written piece and many blessings to you!
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Comment Written 28-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2022
Thank you for your time and your kind words.
