Banked Memories
Many Best Days Ever Make a Lifetime29 total reviews
Comment from Anne Johnston
That is a great entry for the Best Day Ever contest. When we look back at our lives, we can remember lots of "best days" and it is great when we can sit down with someone else and remember them.
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2022
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That is a great entry for the Best Day Ever contest. When we look back at our lives, we can remember lots of "best days" and it is great when we can sit down with someone else and remember them.
Comment Written 06-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2022
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Thanks so much!
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You are welcome
Comment from the13thpoet
Hello fellow Writer a happy Tuesday to you, I hope this finds you well. Thanks for sharing your Best Day ever entry, it was an enjoyable read. I wish I could relate but I don't have friends (by choice) i have a lot of associates but no friends, maybe my bar for friendship is too high or maybe I'm just an antisocial introvert. Anyway, good job and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2022
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Hello fellow Writer a happy Tuesday to you, I hope this finds you well. Thanks for sharing your Best Day ever entry, it was an enjoyable read. I wish I could relate but I don't have friends (by choice) i have a lot of associates but no friends, maybe my bar for friendship is too high or maybe I'm just an antisocial introvert. Anyway, good job and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2022
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Sorry to hear no friends - I would be lost without one or two. Still, to each his own. Wish you a happy day and thanks so much for the good luck wishes. ann
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Good story. Thanks for sharing.
In 1st person it would be more natural to spell out 'that is' rather tan i.e.
And so it went - This sentence has 3 semicolons. Better to make 3 sentences.
afterwards --- just - spacing. (1 dash is enough)
possible. Yeah, - spacing. Sometimes you have 1, sometimes 2, and it appears that there might be 3 spaces between sentences here.
Steve looked at his watch:
"Geez, Ann, I've got to go. - no paragraph break
Best of luck.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2022
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Good story. Thanks for sharing.
In 1st person it would be more natural to spell out 'that is' rather tan i.e.
And so it went - This sentence has 3 semicolons. Better to make 3 sentences.
afterwards --- just - spacing. (1 dash is enough)
possible. Yeah, - spacing. Sometimes you have 1, sometimes 2, and it appears that there might be 3 spaces between sentences here.
Steve looked at his watch:
"Geez, Ann, I've got to go. - no paragraph break
Best of luck.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2022
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Thanks for the constructive criticism. I will take another.
ann
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tan i.e. - sorry. 'than'
Comment from Mary Shifman
Yes, I'm grateful for my memories both good and bad because they are what makes me who I am. We often hear people comment, "If I could do things over, I would..." I don't know if I'd actually change the major choices I've made, because I've learned from them ... even the bad choices. Of course, I've said and done things I wish I hadn't and people have been hurt. I wish I could change them but since I can't, I can only choose not to repeat them. I enjoyed your post because it made me think of my own memories. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2022
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Yes, I'm grateful for my memories both good and bad because they are what makes me who I am. We often hear people comment, "If I could do things over, I would..." I don't know if I'd actually change the major choices I've made, because I've learned from them ... even the bad choices. Of course, I've said and done things I wish I hadn't and people have been hurt. I wish I could change them but since I can't, I can only choose not to repeat them. I enjoyed your post because it made me think of my own memories. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 31-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2022
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I'm afraid the competition in this contest is a bit more than my little story will show much. I appreciate your reading and your words of encouragement.
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I know what you mean. We're up against tough competition here.
Comment from lyenochka
That's sweet! I'm glad you have such a good friend to have breakfast and share memories with. That's a great idea to bring up the contest and write about the memories shared. Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2022
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That's sweet! I'm glad you have such a good friend to have breakfast and share memories with. That's a great idea to bring up the contest and write about the memories shared. Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 30-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2022
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Thank you for reading and your kind comments.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I think that was an excellent 'best day ever' story. You're right, those memories we cherish, putting them together, makes for one heck of a best ever day that will last forever. Well done, and good luck in the contest! :)) Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2022
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I think that was an excellent 'best day ever' story. You're right, those memories we cherish, putting them together, makes for one heck of a best ever day that will last forever. Well done, and good luck in the contest! :)) Sandra xxx
Comment Written 30-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2022
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Thanks so much!
Comment from Susan Newell
I really like your creative approach to this. I could never pick a best day, because there were so many great ones, all different, and I don't tend to think or speak in superlatives. Neither can I ever come up with a favorite anything.
I liked the details of the story. Good contest entry.
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2022
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I really like your creative approach to this. I could never pick a best day, because there were so many great ones, all different, and I don't tend to think or speak in superlatives. Neither can I ever come up with a favorite anything.
I liked the details of the story. Good contest entry.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2022
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Thank you for reading and commenting.
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You are welcome.
Comment from Lisa Tepp
Oh my...totally expected you and Steve to get together. I thought maybe it was a story of how a childhood friend turned into more. But I did enjoy it! You did an awesome job of interweaving all those great best-day-evers into one piece. A very creative way of making a final best day ever...great job!
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2022
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Oh my...totally expected you and Steve to get together. I thought maybe it was a story of how a childhood friend turned into more. But I did enjoy it! You did an awesome job of interweaving all those great best-day-evers into one piece. A very creative way of making a final best day ever...great job!
Comment Written 29-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2022
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Thank you! I also wanted to make the point that a male/female friendship can be extra special when there is sexual sidestory. I appreciate you reading and commenting.
Comment from LisaMay
I immersed myself in your story, pretending I was at the table with Ann and Steve reminiscing about good days involving people and activities. There is a touch of nostalgia and poignant moments but the overall sense is one of connection and gratitude. Your dialogue feels very natural.
(What are sausage biscuits? I guess they are sausages with biscuits but I've never heard of them.)
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2022
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I immersed myself in your story, pretending I was at the table with Ann and Steve reminiscing about good days involving people and activities. There is a touch of nostalgia and poignant moments but the overall sense is one of connection and gratitude. Your dialogue feels very natural.
(What are sausage biscuits? I guess they are sausages with biscuits but I've never heard of them.)
Comment Written 29-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2022
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All of the fast food restaurants serve them -- sausage biscuits - and they are indeed nothing more than a biscuit with patty sausage inside. Where do you live?
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I live in New Zealand. I don't go to fast food places very often, so maybe they do have them here.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your contest entry reads well, Mystery Author. I like the many examples and how you 'banked' them. That was a great line and way of remembering best days. I like the dialogue, the way you described events and husband/wife etc.
Best wishes in the contest.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2022
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Your contest entry reads well, Mystery Author. I like the many examples and how you 'banked' them. That was a great line and way of remembering best days. I like the dialogue, the way you described events and husband/wife etc.
Best wishes in the contest.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 29-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2022
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Thanks for your kind words. I appreciate your time and your sharing with me an evaluation of my work.
