The Tree
I had a favorite tree as a child that changed my life.6 total reviews
Comment from cupa tea
I like your concept. I believe if you listen trees do talk to you. I had one in my grandma's yard as a kid. As an adult we moved into her house and once again it spoke to me. I live in another state now so that tree is lost to me.
I saw no errors in your piece and the idea you suggested came through clearly. Good luck in the contest...
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022
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I like your concept. I believe if you listen trees do talk to you. I had one in my grandma's yard as a kid. As an adult we moved into her house and once again it spoke to me. I live in another state now so that tree is lost to me.
I saw no errors in your piece and the idea you suggested came through clearly. Good luck in the contest...
Comment Written 17-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022
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Thank you for your kind words and generous rating.
Comment from SimianSavant
Cradled in its' boughs <= its
even now, as I set <= sat, or sit
looking at a different tree outside of my retirement home window. I remember.
At the age of eight, I had become a Christian. As a child, that is an easy decision. I had been taught by my mother, so of course, I believed. Before long, though, doubts crept in. Did God really care that I had come to Him? I had to ask my mother.
"Mom, " <= eliminate space after comma I asked. " <= this period should be a comma
Sheesh, I have seen UFOs before but no angels. You are lucky!
Entry feels a bit maudlin, but will probably get you lots of votes from this crowd ; )
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2022
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Cradled in its' boughs <= its
even now, as I set <= sat, or sit
looking at a different tree outside of my retirement home window. I remember.
At the age of eight, I had become a Christian. As a child, that is an easy decision. I had been taught by my mother, so of course, I believed. Before long, though, doubts crept in. Did God really care that I had come to Him? I had to ask my mother.
"Mom, " <= eliminate space after comma I asked. " <= this period should be a comma
Sheesh, I have seen UFOs before but no angels. You are lucky!
Entry feels a bit maudlin, but will probably get you lots of votes from this crowd ; )
Comment Written 17-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2022
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Thank you for your constructive insight. I missed every one of the things you pointed out. That kind of critique is what I treasure the most. Thank you for your help.
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You are most welcome; glad it was helpful!
Comment from Theodore McDowell
Super response to the prompt. It shows the continuity of faith from the speaker's childhood due to the encounter with the tree/angels and extending into old age as the speaker looks out his retirement window. The poem possesses a since of contentment and assurance in God's love.
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2022
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Super response to the prompt. It shows the continuity of faith from the speaker's childhood due to the encounter with the tree/angels and extending into old age as the speaker looks out his retirement window. The poem possesses a since of contentment and assurance in God's love.
Comment Written 15-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2022
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Thank you for your kind observations and generous rating.
Comment from LisaMay
Your story steps into a child's mind and simple understanding really well, while also delivering a message about revelation and salvation with clarity. God's timeframe is often quite different to our own expectations of time. I am so pleased for young impatient Billy that he was given the gift of Angelic presence very quickly.
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2022
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Your story steps into a child's mind and simple understanding really well, while also delivering a message about revelation and salvation with clarity. God's timeframe is often quite different to our own expectations of time. I am so pleased for young impatient Billy that he was given the gift of Angelic presence very quickly.
Comment Written 15-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2022
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Thank you for your kind observations and generous rating.
Comment from moongirlwriter
What a lovely story. I'm so glad I changed my mind to learn about your tree. Trees hold a special place in my heart. . .but, I've never had the pleasure of seeing angels. Lucky you. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2022
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What a lovely story. I'm so glad I changed my mind to learn about your tree. Trees hold a special place in my heart. . .but, I've never had the pleasure of seeing angels. Lucky you. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 15-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2022
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Thank you for your kind observations and generous rating.
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:)
Comment from BethShelby
This is a good story. It is listed a supernatural fiction and a tree full of angel would be supernatural, but I'm not sure a child wouldn't be able to see something like that. I had a tree too as child that I claimed as my own. It where I always took a favorite book, but it was the spot where I chose to go to communicate with God. It always felt He was there. Congratulations on sharing first place with me in the Family story contest.
Beth
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2022
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This is a good story. It is listed a supernatural fiction and a tree full of angel would be supernatural, but I'm not sure a child wouldn't be able to see something like that. I had a tree too as child that I claimed as my own. It where I always took a favorite book, but it was the spot where I chose to go to communicate with God. It always felt He was there. Congratulations on sharing first place with me in the Family story contest.
Beth
Comment Written 15-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2022
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Thank you for your kind observations and generous rating.
