Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

No image required for this fine 5-7-5, I felt the heat and saw the melt here as the scary red serpent slithers by and consumes people's homes, a fine write, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 20-Jan-2022

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reply by the author on 20-Jan-2022

Dolly,

So pleased with your response to my post. Glad my words gave you a real feel for my image(ry).

Comment from tempeste

Excellent

Ciao poet, you now have three votes .

The title and the artwork drew me in .

I love the expression :

RED SERPENT SLITHERS

at night is when I find an active volcano vomiting lava looks bests.. it s simply mesmerising.

Our Etna in 2021 was very active and offered some amazing footage at night.

I get all emotional watching this video.

https://m.youtube.com/watch?v=1-r7bpZO9Vw

 Comment Written 19-Jan-2022

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reply by the author on 20-Jan-2022

Thanks Tempeste!

Any vote is good by me. At the moment, I am not on the top rung. Maybe I will garner my votes, or not. Que sera, sera.

Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Excellent

Excellent entry for the 5-7-5 writing prompt contest. Good syllables count and connection between lines. Nice presentation and effective imagery. Good luck in the contest.

Gypsy

 Comment Written 19-Jan-2022

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reply by the author on 19-Jan-2022

Thanks Gypsy!

I always appreciate your comments and review of my posts. Thanks too for your good wishes in the voting.

Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)

Excellent

I was awed by this poem. Your description is incredibly vivid, painting a true picture of the volcanic eruption. It is a tour de force to create a snake.

 Comment Written 19-Jan-2022

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reply by the author on 19-Jan-2022

Thanks for your kind remarks for my snake allusion.

Comment from Rosemary Everson1

Excellent

The volcano is made of hot lava, very dangerous to be near. A volcano is a rupture in the crust of earth, that allows hot lava, volcanic ash, and gases to escape from a magma chamber below the surface. Your poem explains this eruption well.

 Comment Written 19-Jan-2022

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reply by the author on 19-Jan-2022

Thanks for your explanation. Given the recent Pacific eruption, we also must worry about tsunamis and their destructive forces.

Comment from Gee

Excellent

oh, I liked the color scheme of the words.
Very nicely done.
I know it is difficult doing these small poems.
I think you did well.

Thanks for sharing.
We appreciate it.

 Comment Written 19-Jan-2022

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reply by the author on 19-Jan-2022

Thanks for your kind review.

Unlike many FanStory poets, my writing style is predominantly 5-7-5 in the modern or classical Japanese format. I have no ability to create longer verses or sonnets. I try whenever to use FanArt illustrations to pair with my posts.

Comment from PoemsOfDD

Excellent

I had to read this a couple of times but it got better as I did so.
Initially, I was dubious on the word - serpent - but then it played
nicely into the word shedding. I liked that this piece made me think
and appreciate the cleverness behind it.

 Comment Written 19-Jan-2022

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reply by the author on 19-Jan-2022

DD,

Thanks for re-reviewing my post so you saw my allusions to the snake.

Comment from Versch

Excellent

Indeed, when there's a volcanic eruption, that red hot lava looks like a snake slithering down the mountain. This short poem describes it well. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 19-Jan-2022

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reply by the author on 19-Jan-2022

Thanks Versch for your comments. My typical writing format is this 5-7-5 format. If you like this style, stop by after the contest voting is completed and sample my poems. Longer verses are not in my bailiwick.

Comment from Wendy G

Excellent

A vivid image to accompany your words which are also startling. I like the image of a serpent of red lava slithering, shedding not its skin but molten lava. Very well expressed. Best wishes in the contest.
Wendy

 Comment Written 18-Jan-2022

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reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022

Thanks Wendy! Pleased you liked my selected artwork and wording for this contest entry.

Comment from Theodore McDowell

Excellent

Great poem for the prompt. First, I love Cleo's work as an artist, so great choice on the pic. You also created a vivid picture of the lava as a serpent, nice metaphor. The word shedding seals this poem as a great one.

 Comment Written 18-Jan-2022

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reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022

Thanks Theodore,

I often use Cleo for my art choices. She as even thanked me more than once for using her illustrations to pair with my poems. She is a gem.

Pleased you liked my metaphorical touches and word choices for this contest.

I favor the 5-7-5 format for almost all my poems. Longer verses are not within my bailiwick or ability, and I rarely review the same.