Camping By The Billabong
Too much curiosity can have consequences. (359 words)15 total reviews
Comment from RodG
I thoroughly enjoyed your ghost story, Lisa, and especially your notes. You set the scene well with the curious Janet who'd love to see a ghost listening to fellow campers explain the meaning of "Waltzing Matilda." Her death is not surprising as she defied taboo. Many years ago during the Vietnam War I listened to Australian sailors singing WM during Happy Hour at a naval base. I joined in! Rod
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I thoroughly enjoyed your ghost story, Lisa, and especially your notes. You set the scene well with the curious Janet who'd love to see a ghost listening to fellow campers explain the meaning of "Waltzing Matilda." Her death is not surprising as she defied taboo. Many years ago during the Vietnam War I listened to Australian sailors singing WM during Happy Hour at a naval base. I joined in! Rod
Comment Written 15-Jan-2022
Comment from Jesse James Doty
I apologize for commenting on the requirements for this contest but the main character getting eaten by a crocodile sounds pretty horrific to me. I do not like to read when bad things happen and I avoid those in particular so I would appreciate a heads up when a story of yours is going to be horrific.
This is still an excellent story and other than the ending I would say it was top-notch.
Well told I just don't like the gruesome details if you don't mind.
This offers an ironic twist that is a clever way to tell a supernatural story. As always, you are a prolific and wonderful writer.
Have a good weekend,
Jesse
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2022
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I apologize for commenting on the requirements for this contest but the main character getting eaten by a crocodile sounds pretty horrific to me. I do not like to read when bad things happen and I avoid those in particular so I would appreciate a heads up when a story of yours is going to be horrific.
This is still an excellent story and other than the ending I would say it was top-notch.
Well told I just don't like the gruesome details if you don't mind.
This offers an ironic twist that is a clever way to tell a supernatural story. As always, you are a prolific and wonderful writer.
Have a good weekend,
Jesse
Comment Written 15-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2022
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But you have got it wrong Jesse! I would never have a crocodile kill someone! The story prompt said it had to be about a person, not an animal, so it was the Swagman's Ghost who was responsible. Read what Barnaby said in the last paragraph again, or maybe you topped reding when you thought it was a crocodile that grabbed her, based on my introduction of the Aboriginal legend.
Comment from Wendy G
Oh, Well done!! I love this one, and I wish you every success in the contest. It made me smile (a lot) and i thoroughly enjoyed the story as well as the comprehensive notes, words to the song - all complete!
Wendy
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2022
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Oh, Well done!! I love this one, and I wish you every success in the contest. It made me smile (a lot) and i thoroughly enjoyed the story as well as the comprehensive notes, words to the song - all complete!
Wendy
Comment Written 15-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2022
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Tee hee, thanks for your sympatico review.
Comment from royowen
An excellent short story. Yes there's enough legends and dangers, particularly the wildlife in the northern part of Australia, mind after a week in the Northern Territory, a couple of years ago, we never actually saw a croc. Beautifully written Jenny, blessings Roy
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An excellent short story. Yes there's enough legends and dangers, particularly the wildlife in the northern part of Australia, mind after a week in the Northern Territory, a couple of years ago, we never actually saw a croc. Beautifully written Jenny, blessings Roy
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Comment Written 15-Jan-2022
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Baaaa. Intriguing story--quite a punchline. As to your notes--I commend you for meticulous citations, such as some people continually "forget" to include.
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reply by the author on 15-Jan-2022
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Baaaa. Intriguing story--quite a punchline. As to your notes--I commend you for meticulous citations, such as some people continually "forget" to include.
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Comment Written 15-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2022
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I could have been more scrupulous, but the notes were cobbled together from a few websites and i couldn't be bothered listing them all!
