It Could Be You
Think about it...6 total reviews
Comment from Wendy G
A well written and compassionate post, with very smooth flow, rhythm and metre, and careful and effective rhyme. The message is excellent. I wish you great success in the contest.
Wendy
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2022
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A well written and compassionate post, with very smooth flow, rhythm and metre, and careful and effective rhyme. The message is excellent. I wish you great success in the contest.
Wendy
Comment Written 16-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2022
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Thanks for this nice review and the best wishes. :)
Comment from moongirlwriter
So very true. Nicely said and written. Just so you know though. . .not everyone looks away because they lack empathy. So many times, I have nothing in my car to share. So many times I am three lanes over in traffic and it would not be fair to put them in harms way to give them some change, or whatever I have. We can't always sit in judgement of others.
I do so appreciate your poem. Best of luck to you with this excellent writing.
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2022
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So very true. Nicely said and written. Just so you know though. . .not everyone looks away because they lack empathy. So many times, I have nothing in my car to share. So many times I am three lanes over in traffic and it would not be fair to put them in harms way to give them some change, or whatever I have. We can't always sit in judgement of others.
I do so appreciate your poem. Best of luck to you with this excellent writing.
Comment Written 15-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2022
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Many people pass by, but there are many others who stop and help. Basically people are kind and generous. I give when I can, but sadly I'm not doing well financially. We all do what we can. Thank you for this thoughtful review. :)
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If you aren't doing well financially. . .then you need to remember it's a job for someone else to learn the feeling of giving. Knowing you have helped someone else is pretty special. Like the little drummer boy, if you have no gift to give, it's a gift to let someone else help.
Comment from Anne Johnston
This is a very well-written poem, good rhyming, flows smoothly, and tells a sad story. With the cold weather we are having, those living on the streets must be suffering a lot. But for the grace of God, it could be you or me.
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2022
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This is a very well-written poem, good rhyming, flows smoothly, and tells a sad story. With the cold weather we are having, those living on the streets must be suffering a lot. But for the grace of God, it could be you or me.
Comment Written 15-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2022
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That's so true. Thank you for this kind review. :)
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You are welcome
Comment from WriterHeather
This a a very poignant piece. You follow the rhyme scheme flawlessly and I can tell you really care for the homeless. Thanks for sharing this powerful message
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2022
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This a a very poignant piece. You follow the rhyme scheme flawlessly and I can tell you really care for the homeless. Thanks for sharing this powerful message
Comment Written 15-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2022
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Thanks for this 6 star review, it's awesome. :)
Comment from Gee
Nice quatrain with a great message.
Yes, mental health issue among the poor is a big problem
I hope you do well in the competition.
Good Luck and thanks for sharing. We appreciate it.
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2022
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Nice quatrain with a great message.
Yes, mental health issue among the poor is a big problem
I hope you do well in the competition.
Good Luck and thanks for sharing. We appreciate it.
Comment Written 15-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2022
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Thank you, it seems like an insurmountable problem, but there has to be a solution. I appreciate you reading my poem. :)
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
It is sad to see people on the street in a hopeless and homeless state and many of them have mental illness and some just fall on hard times. some choose this way of life and some have it thrust upon them. We as a society have accepted them and find their life aberrant and fear being like them. Once this way of life is in their bones it is hard for them to change. A sad and poignant write, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2022
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It is sad to see people on the street in a hopeless and homeless state and many of them have mental illness and some just fall on hard times. some choose this way of life and some have it thrust upon them. We as a society have accepted them and find their life aberrant and fear being like them. Once this way of life is in their bones it is hard for them to change. A sad and poignant write, love Dolly x
Comment Written 15-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2022
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It's been a concern of mine for quite awhile. I do what I can to help but its never enough. Thank you for this thoughtful review. :)
