Picnics
Who doesn't love them?9 total reviews
Comment from Karen Estep
I would call this poem..fun. Your graphic choice was excellent as it created a picture of a true summer picnic. Your rhyme scheme is catchy, and I really enjoyed reading this work. Good luck and keep writing!
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2022
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I would call this poem..fun. Your graphic choice was excellent as it created a picture of a true summer picnic. Your rhyme scheme is catchy, and I really enjoyed reading this work. Good luck and keep writing!
Comment Written 16-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2022
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Thank you for this terrific review. :)
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Excellent entry for the Summer Fun writing prompt contest.
Your poem reminded me of vacations at the beach..so much fun.
Good luck in the contest.
Gypsy
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2022
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Excellent entry for the Summer Fun writing prompt contest.
Your poem reminded me of vacations at the beach..so much fun.
Good luck in the contest.
Gypsy
Comment Written 15-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2022
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Thank you for this nice review, it's very appreciated. :)
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
a fun poem about going on a picnic. Hot dogs are always a treat for a summer day; also, potato salad and potato chips, a can of beans and some Kool aide, too.
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2022
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a fun poem about going on a picnic. Hot dogs are always a treat for a summer day; also, potato salad and potato chips, a can of beans and some Kool aide, too.
Comment Written 15-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2022
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Beans...yes! I forgot about those. Kool-aid sounds great too. Thanks for this nice review. :)
Comment from WriterHeather
Picnics are one of my favorite summer activities as well! It has to be at a lake though. I really can't imagine anything more pleasant or fun. What a lovely poem! Thanks for sharing
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2022
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Picnics are one of my favorite summer activities as well! It has to be at a lake though. I really can't imagine anything more pleasant or fun. What a lovely poem! Thanks for sharing
Comment Written 15-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2022
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Thank you for being a kindred spirit. Picnics are the best! Of course, I love food. I appreciate you reading my poem. :)
Comment from Gee
Very nice sentiment, to share your picnic.
I see this is for the summer fun competition. I hope you do well.
Good Luck and thanks for sharing. we appreciate it
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2022
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Very nice sentiment, to share your picnic.
I see this is for the summer fun competition. I hope you do well.
Good Luck and thanks for sharing. we appreciate it
Comment Written 14-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2022
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Thanks for reading my poem. It's fun to think about summer, even though it's far off. :)
Comment from Nadége AZiati
Ce poésie Nous fais savoir l'avantage des pique nique....
Et comment sa doit être ....le pique nique est évènements important qui se fait en famille ,entre amis et autre ... Sa renforce aussi les liens ....et sa sert aussi a changé d'air ....moi je trouve que c'est une bonne chose
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2022
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Ce poésie Nous fais savoir l'avantage des pique nique....
Et comment sa doit être ....le pique nique est évènements important qui se fait en famille ,entre amis et autre ... Sa renforce aussi les liens ....et sa sert aussi a changé d'air ....moi je trouve que c'est une bonne chose
Comment Written 14-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2022
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Thank you for reading and reviewing my poem. It's always appreciated. :)
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I adore picnics and often take a picnic to the park if I am meeting a friend, I had several picnics last year and you brought back those memories here, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2022
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I adore picnics and often take a picnic to the park if I am meeting a friend, I had several picnics last year and you brought back those memories here, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 14-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2022
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Thank you for this nice review, it's very appreciated. :)
Comment from Cass Carlton
Yes, I like picnics too. There is nothing quite like a basket full of food, accompanied by a crowd of children, under trees and near a creek. I prefer tree changes to sea changes, 'cos there's not so much mess at the end of the day. Potato salad is one of my favourite things to take on a picnic, so your poem about picnicking gets a full vote from me.cheers Cass
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2022
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Yes, I like picnics too. There is nothing quite like a basket full of food, accompanied by a crowd of children, under trees and near a creek. I prefer tree changes to sea changes, 'cos there's not so much mess at the end of the day. Potato salad is one of my favourite things to take on a picnic, so your poem about picnicking gets a full vote from me.cheers Cass
Comment Written 14-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2022
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I like coleslaw too! Thanks for this nice review, it makes my day. :)
Comment from PoemsOfDD
This is a good entry for the - Summer Fun writing prompt contest.
I enjoyed the fun loving feel of this piece. The joys of gathering
with friends and family, eating a smorgasbord of food and having
playful times of games and lounging.
Just a couple of suggestions, if I may, as shown in ( ).
(By) some nice lake or ocean shore,
The lines below are similar and use the word - sun - more than once.
with trees to shade us from the sun,
while we nap after all our fun.
Then eat some more, sit in the sun,
then languish there till day is done.
An example for change could be:
Then eat some (apples one by one,)
(and) languish there till day is done.
Thank you for sharing and best of luck in the competition.
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2022
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This is a good entry for the - Summer Fun writing prompt contest.
I enjoyed the fun loving feel of this piece. The joys of gathering
with friends and family, eating a smorgasbord of food and having
playful times of games and lounging.
Just a couple of suggestions, if I may, as shown in ( ).
(By) some nice lake or ocean shore,
The lines below are similar and use the word - sun - more than once.
with trees to shade us from the sun,
while we nap after all our fun.
Then eat some more, sit in the sun,
then languish there till day is done.
An example for change could be:
Then eat some (apples one by one,)
(and) languish there till day is done.
Thank you for sharing and best of luck in the competition.
Comment Written 13-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2022
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Thanks for this great review and the helpful suggestions. I've already made one correction and I'm trying to figure out how to correct the others. Thank you so much for your help. :)
