A Night at the Lake
First time more than a kiss so long ago.7 total reviews
Comment from Melodie Michelle
Nice entry for the Write a (((soft))) Erotica Poem contest and best of wishes with the contest my friend! It was sorry and to the point and soft erotica entails feelings, the emotions of the people in the poem, the relationship and all that and I didn't get that from your poem. Read the four different kinds of EROTICA in the contest page!
Thanks so much for sharing and many blessings to you and your family this New Year;-)
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2022
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Nice entry for the Write a (((soft))) Erotica Poem contest and best of wishes with the contest my friend! It was sorry and to the point and soft erotica entails feelings, the emotions of the people in the poem, the relationship and all that and I didn't get that from your poem. Read the four different kinds of EROTICA in the contest page!
Thanks so much for sharing and many blessings to you and your family this New Year;-)
Comment Written 16-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2022
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Thanks for your feedback. I will follow your suggestion and edit if I have time.
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*it was short and to the point
Comment from Eunice Amero
Okay l get cha' it happens we all do things that's not right and it doesn't mean it's ok. The poem was written well. Thank you for sharing. You wrote it well. Good work good luck.
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2022
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Okay l get cha' it happens we all do things that's not right and it doesn't mean it's ok. The poem was written well. Thank you for sharing. You wrote it well. Good work good luck.
Comment Written 14-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2022
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Thank you, again.
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Welcome take care
Comment from GeraldShuler
My favorite line was "We spilled our babies." I'm not a fan of erotica but your writing is high quality. You deserve a good rating for your writing skill.
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2022
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My favorite line was "We spilled our babies." I'm not a fan of erotica but your writing is high quality. You deserve a good rating for your writing skill.
Comment Written 14-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2022
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Thanks much for taking the time to read and review. Appreciate your thoughts.
Comment from pookietoo
Very nice erotica poem. Keep up the great work. I hope this finds you well . Good luck in all of your contest entries. Keep smiling and enjoy the little things.
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2022
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Very nice erotica poem. Keep up the great work. I hope this finds you well . Good luck in all of your contest entries. Keep smiling and enjoy the little things.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2022
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Great advice, thanks for the read and review.
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Youare welcome. I hope you take time to read my poems
Comment from LisaMay
I have to say your poem builds to its climax quite well. I guess the 'soft' erotica part of this poem happened after you ejaculated. I like Susie's humorous comment when she'd finished your request (she was clearly not a swallower).
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2022
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I have to say your poem builds to its climax quite well. I guess the 'soft' erotica part of this poem happened after you ejaculated. I like Susie's humorous comment when she'd finished your request (she was clearly not a swallower).
Comment Written 11-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2022
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You got that right LisaMay. It happened so quick I don't think she had time to swallow. Thanks for the read and review.
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Haha... oh you are awful. I hope it got better in time, for both of you.
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Sure did.
Comment from The_Boy_Whodunnit
I really like the first stanza - it's very descriptive and sets a really good scene. I found the last line didn't really fit the tone of the rest of the poem, I'm not sure if this is intended for humour...
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2022
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I really like the first stanza - it's very descriptive and sets a really good scene. I found the last line didn't really fit the tone of the rest of the poem, I'm not sure if this is intended for humour...
Comment Written 11-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2022
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Not humor, it was really said. Thanks for your read and feedback.
Comment from Terry Broxson
Oh my, spilled those babies that is a great visual. This is a very good poem for this contest, good luck. l had a '55 chevy, but you guys in the '57's did much better with the ladies. Good job.
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2022
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Oh my, spilled those babies that is a great visual. This is a very good poem for this contest, good luck. l had a '55 chevy, but you guys in the '57's did much better with the ladies. Good job.
Comment Written 11-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2022
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Yeah, I agree. Too bad I ever traded that baby. Thanks for the read and the review.
