Quiet Lawyer
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30 total reviews
Comment from Jim Wile
Barbara, based on Roy's glowing birthday poem for you, I started reading this story. I can understand why you are a published author. This was very engaging right from the start, and I have an instant affinity for your main characters. I only wish you had provided just a little bit of physical description so I can picture them the way you envision them.
The writing was excellent with very realistic dialog. I plan to continue reading it. It was very enjoyable reading.
I'm currently working on my first novel, which I have also been sharing with FanStory. If I become convinced it's good enough to try to publish, I may want to consult with you in the future about your experience getting published.
Thanks for a wonderful first chapter. Jim
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2023
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Barbara, based on Roy's glowing birthday poem for you, I started reading this story. I can understand why you are a published author. This was very engaging right from the start, and I have an instant affinity for your main characters. I only wish you had provided just a little bit of physical description so I can picture them the way you envision them.
The writing was excellent with very realistic dialog. I plan to continue reading it. It was very enjoyable reading.
I'm currently working on my first novel, which I have also been sharing with FanStory. If I become convinced it's good enough to try to publish, I may want to consult with you in the future about your experience getting published.
Thanks for a wonderful first chapter. Jim
Comment Written 03-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2023
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Thank you for dropping by and reading this. I appreciate it. I don't go into a lot of descriptions because what I envision as a beautiful lady may be different from your ideas. I want my hero and heroine beautiful to whoever reads it.
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I can understand that. Often it's nice to form your own mental picture of a character. It's funny, though, when you see a movie of the book, and the actors look nothing like what you pictured. I was befuddled when Tom Cruise played the role of Jack Reacher, and refused to let his image replace my own!
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I like my own images. LOL
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Appears Alexandra developed a thing for Cord at first sight.
So, they knew each other as little kids. That explains some details that come out later in the book.
How could they know each other as little kids, then a tad later Cord said, "I know we just met?"
What a way for Alexandra to find her man. Cord is right. He is not worth crying tears over.
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2022
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Appears Alexandra developed a thing for Cord at first sight.
So, they knew each other as little kids. That explains some details that come out later in the book.
How could they know each other as little kids, then a tad later Cord said, "I know we just met?"
What a way for Alexandra to find her man. Cord is right. He is not worth crying tears over.
Comment Written 22-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2022
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Their moms knew each other since elementary school and as adults got together once a month. The moms knew Cord and Ali since they were born, but Cord and Ali just finally met. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from irishauthorme
I'm a little late getting here, but I liked the story.
It's always interesting when a situation like this occurs, and I believe almost everyone has suffered through the healing of a broken heart.
The setting is unusual, and although this appears to be a dude ranch, Alexandra is the only guest at this time.
Cordero's approach is just right, while being sympathetic, he is offering Alexandra good advice.
Good tension, with Alan desperately trying to make up, and it is too late.
Good work,
irish
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2022
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I'm a little late getting here, but I liked the story.
It's always interesting when a situation like this occurs, and I believe almost everyone has suffered through the healing of a broken heart.
The setting is unusual, and although this appears to be a dude ranch, Alexandra is the only guest at this time.
Cordero's approach is just right, while being sympathetic, he is offering Alexandra good advice.
Good tension, with Alan desperately trying to make up, and it is too late.
Good work,
irish
Comment Written 31-Oct-2022
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2022
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It's not a dude ranch. It's a working ranch. Cord's mom and Ali's mom have been friends since kindergarten. Thank you for going back to the beginning.
Comment from Sankey
Glad I found this. Was this chapter a bit long but I enjoyed reading it and look forward to more. A bit different to your other story. Maybe this is his way of speaking but it sounds a bit strange..."Yesterday after I picked her up from our city's airport,...maybe just "picked her up from the airport"
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2022
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Glad I found this. Was this chapter a bit long but I enjoyed reading it and look forward to more. A bit different to your other story. Maybe this is his way of speaking but it sounds a bit strange..."Yesterday after I picked her up from our city's airport,...maybe just "picked her up from the airport"
Comment Written 24-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2022
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I need people to know that this town is really small but has it's own airport. It will important much later. Thank you.
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OK I get your drift now.
Comment from Janetsue
This is an excellent first chapter for the contest. I haven't read a western story in a long time. It's fresh and interesting. Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022
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This is an excellent first chapter for the contest. I haven't read a western story in a long time. It's fresh and interesting. Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 17-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022
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Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from eliz100
I enjoyed reading your first chapter. You did a very good job setting the stage for the rest of your story. I wondered what happened to the other story, now I know. I look forward to the next chapter.
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2022
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I enjoyed reading your first chapter. You did a very good job setting the stage for the rest of your story. I wondered what happened to the other story, now I know. I look forward to the next chapter.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2022
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Thank you for the kind review. I am still posting Football until the end.
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Thanks, good to know.
Comment from lancellot
Your writing skills are as always 'Top Notch'. If there was no name and this was a blind contest entry I would have put money that it was one of yours. It has all your classic character signatures.
Well, if the contest committee has enjoyed your novels or the Football (not about football) one, then I have no doubt they will enjoy and vote for this one.
Good luck.
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2022
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Your writing skills are as always 'Top Notch'. If there was no name and this was a blind contest entry I would have put money that it was one of yours. It has all your classic character signatures.
Well, if the contest committee has enjoyed your novels or the Football (not about football) one, then I have no doubt they will enjoy and vote for this one.
Good luck.
Comment Written 11-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2022
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As I've many of the entries, I've figured mine would come in fourth. Yours is in the top three. Thank you. What you mentioned is exactly why I am against blind entries. If people read our work often they recognize the author's vote.
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Yes, I see what you mean. Blind entries work better for new members.
Oh, I think you have an excellent chance of winning. Your romance writings are very popular.
Comment from amahra
I'm glad to be reading this at the beginning, Barbara. I love the way you started the story with Cordero chasing Samson off the bed and finding a beautiful woman in nothing but a towel towel.
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2022
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I'm glad to be reading this at the beginning, Barbara. I love the way you started the story with Cordero chasing Samson off the bed and finding a beautiful woman in nothing but a towel towel.
Comment Written 11-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2022
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Thank you for the kind review and encouragement.
Comment from Tpa
I think you are off to a tremendous start. I like the built up up of characters. Cordero is playing it cool, laid back in a gentleman fashion while Alexandra has a leave me alone attitude, but is slowly breaking the barrier. I wish you luck in the contest and hope to read more of your book.
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2022
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I think you are off to a tremendous start. I like the built up up of characters. Cordero is playing it cool, laid back in a gentleman fashion while Alexandra has a leave me alone attitude, but is slowly breaking the barrier. I wish you luck in the contest and hope to read more of your book.
Comment Written 11-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2022
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I hope you come back again. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Sanku
The ranch life and Cordero might help to heal the broken heart .It is generally believed that time heals all wounds..
Hope you will continue "football".
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2022
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The ranch life and Cordero might help to heal the broken heart .It is generally believed that time heals all wounds..
Hope you will continue "football".
Comment Written 10-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2022
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I will continue Football until the end. I will probably be posting this one too. Thank you.
