Priorities
Survival Instincts7 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This thirty-three-word story, Priorities, has the proper word count and creates a scene of survival on the mean streets as the have-not tries to salvage what the 'haves' have discarded. Important.
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2022
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This thirty-three-word story, Priorities, has the proper word count and creates a scene of survival on the mean streets as the have-not tries to salvage what the 'haves' have discarded. Important.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2022
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Thank you so much for the review and understanding. I appreciate it very much.
Comment from mermaids
You have a vivid use of words that makes the reader feel empathy for this individual who is homeless. You did well to create a story with only thirty-three words. Your words also give the homeless a voice. Best wishes for the contest.
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2022
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You have a vivid use of words that makes the reader feel empathy for this individual who is homeless. You did well to create a story with only thirty-three words. Your words also give the homeless a voice. Best wishes for the contest.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2022
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Thank you for your time and kindness in reading my post.
Have a great day!
Comment from lyenochka
I can't imagine a 33-word fiction! But you did tell a story with action statements like 'Flames sizzled around the blanket-wrapped body.' I guess that Super is just heartless. Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2022
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I can't imagine a 33-word fiction! But you did tell a story with action statements like 'Flames sizzled around the blanket-wrapped body.' I guess that Super is just heartless. Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 04-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2022
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Thank you for your time and kindness in reading my post.
Have a great day!
Comment from Lloyd T. Okoko
Congratulations for a well written thirty three word fiction.
The work highlights a desperate move made by the the protagonist to embrace fire as a means of averting cold; the burning effect of the fire on him and allusions made of him as mannequin.
The work earns its texture through its effective use of humorous anecdotes.
Excellent work. Bravo.
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2022
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Congratulations for a well written thirty three word fiction.
The work highlights a desperate move made by the the protagonist to embrace fire as a means of averting cold; the burning effect of the fire on him and allusions made of him as mannequin.
The work earns its texture through its effective use of humorous anecdotes.
Excellent work. Bravo.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2022
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Thank you for your time and kindness in reading my post.
Have a great day!
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Remain Blessed.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
Survival instinct is thought of and expressed narrating a 33 word fiction, I like the plot and have enjoyed the climax; well said, well done; post more. Wish you good luck for the contest. ALCREATOR LITT DEAR (D. Ray)
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2022
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Survival instinct is thought of and expressed narrating a 33 word fiction, I like the plot and have enjoyed the climax; well said, well done; post more. Wish you good luck for the contest. ALCREATOR LITT DEAR (D. Ray)
Comment Written 04-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2022
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I am flatter and thankful that the contest creator found my thirty three words worthwhile and it's message clear and concise. i appreciate the kindness.
Have a great day!
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
You manage to tell a good story in a ridiculously small number of words. I admire you for this achievement. I especially like the intimation that your character could have been saving someone from the fire, when in fact it was the comforter he was seeking for himself. Clever!
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2022
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You manage to tell a good story in a ridiculously small number of words. I admire you for this achievement. I especially like the intimation that your character could have been saving someone from the fire, when in fact it was the comforter he was seeking for himself. Clever!
Comment Written 04-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2022
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Thank you so much for your kind review and for taking the time to read it. I am relieved to see you saw the possibilities of saving a life...even if it was his own.
Have a great day!
Comment from PoemsOfDD
I am impressed that you have written a concise story in a matter of 33 words. Well done you. A short read but one that highlights all too well the homeless population, the heartless people around and the need for more compassion. Good job and best of luck in the competition.
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2022
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I am impressed that you have written a concise story in a matter of 33 words. Well done you. A short read but one that highlights all too well the homeless population, the heartless people around and the need for more compassion. Good job and best of luck in the competition.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2022
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Thank you so much for your kind review and for taking the time to read it. It is short but I too hoped it carried a message. Thanks for the wishes.
have a great day!
