Tanka (Vastness)
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Comment from Janice Canerdy
We should ALL feel in awe of this grand, majestic creation, and small, when we gaze upon it, especially the mountains and oceans. Your tanka is
lovely and descriptive.
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We should ALL feel in awe of this grand, majestic creation, and small, when we gaze upon it, especially the mountains and oceans. Your tanka is
lovely and descriptive.
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Hello Janice. Thanks so much for your wonderful review. I am enjoying writing Tankas lately and I struggle to get the middle satori just write, but it is tricky sometimes. So glad you liked it. Thanks again.
Melissa
Comment from June Sargent
I know the feeling. I felt it when we were dangling in a tram over the Swiss Alps years ago. We are but specks in the grand scheme of things. Beautiful sentiments expressed in your tanka.
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I know the feeling. I felt it when we were dangling in a tram over the Swiss Alps years ago. We are but specks in the grand scheme of things. Beautiful sentiments expressed in your tanka.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2022
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Hello June. Thanks so much for your wonderful review. I am enjoying writing Tankas lately and I struggle to get the middle satori just write, but it is tricky sometimes. So glad you liked it. Thanks again.
Melissa
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
I am not very familiar with the tanka form of poetry, so can't comment on that side of things. But in terms of content, this poem is a delight. I really did feel small and insignificant when I finished reading it, surrounded by majesty.
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I am not very familiar with the tanka form of poetry, so can't comment on that side of things. But in terms of content, this poem is a delight. I really did feel small and insignificant when I finished reading it, surrounded by majesty.
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Hello Kate. Thanks so much for your wonderful review. I am enjoying writing Tankas lately and I struggle to get the middle satori just write, but it is tricky sometimes. So glad you liked it. Thanks again.
Melissa
Comment from Sally Law
Another beautiful tanka poem. A vista like you have penned here and illustrated, reduces me too. Sending you my best today as always and best wishes for your writing day,
Sal XOs
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Another beautiful tanka poem. A vista like you have penned here and illustrated, reduces me too. Sending you my best today as always and best wishes for your writing day,
Sal XOs
Comment Written 04-Jan-2022
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Hello Sally. Thanks so much for your wonderful review. I am enjoying writing Tankas lately and I struggle to get the middle satori just write, but it is tricky sometimes. So glad you liked it. Thanks again.
Melissa
Comment from royowen
That would have to be a scene from the American west, very distinctive my friend, you're getting very clever at these my friend, even though you're small than this landscape Melissa, you still have far more significance my friend, well done, blessings Roy
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That would have to be a scene from the American west, very distinctive my friend, you're getting very clever at these my friend, even though you're small than this landscape Melissa, you still have far more significance my friend, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 04-Jan-2022
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Hello Roy. Thanks so much for your wonderful review. I am enjoying writing Tankas lately and I struggle to get the middle satori just write, but it is tricky sometimes. So glad you liked it. Thanks again.
Melissa
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You?re doing well
Comment from damommy
There is no feeling in the world like seeing the Grand Canyon, especially the first time. I felt the same way. It's like when we look at the night sky and feel so small. The Grand Canyon made me feel that way. It's awesome in the true meaning of the word.
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There is no feeling in the world like seeing the Grand Canyon, especially the first time. I felt the same way. It's like when we look at the night sky and feel so small. The Grand Canyon made me feel that way. It's awesome in the true meaning of the word.
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Hello Yvonne. Thanks so much for your wonderful review. I am enjoying writing Tankas lately and I struggle to get the middle satori just write, but it is tricky sometimes. So glad you liked it. Thanks again.
Melissa
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice image, Melissa.
-Your note is appreciated.
-You wrote a good tanka with a good topic.
-Good opening lines show your reaction to
seeing this vision, followed by a good pivot line.
-The concluding lines show the impact it made on you.
-A good entry; good luck.
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-Nice image, Melissa.
-Your note is appreciated.
-You wrote a good tanka with a good topic.
-Good opening lines show your reaction to
seeing this vision, followed by a good pivot line.
-The concluding lines show the impact it made on you.
-A good entry; good luck.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2022
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Hello Pam. Thanks so much for your wonderful review. I am enjoying writing Tankas lately and I struggle to get the middle satori just write, but it is tricky sometimes. So glad you liked it. Thanks again.
Melissa
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You are welcome, Melissa. The middle line can be tricky, but you are doing a good job with it.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Tanka (Vastness)
by Sugarray77
It's funny, yesterday a friend and I were talking about feeling insignificant compared to nature.
Good syllables count and connection between lines. Excellent imagery.
Well done, Melissa.
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Tanka (Vastness)
by Sugarray77
It's funny, yesterday a friend and I were talking about feeling insignificant compared to nature.
Good syllables count and connection between lines. Excellent imagery.
Well done, Melissa.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2022
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Hello Gypsy. Thanks so much for your wonderful review. I am enjoying writing Tankas lately and I struggle to get the middle satori just write, but it is tricky sometimes. It is funny when we talk about something and it comes up again in a totally unexpected way... So glad you liked it. Thanks again.
Melissa
Comment from Jasmine Girl
I like this Tanka to express how small we are comparing with our vast earth and universe. I like the rhyming of vastness, awareness and smallness.
The picture might not be Grand Canyon. I just visited Utah this summer and this picture looks like a park in Colorado. Nevertheless it is very grand.
Well done.
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I like this Tanka to express how small we are comparing with our vast earth and universe. I like the rhyming of vastness, awareness and smallness.
The picture might not be Grand Canyon. I just visited Utah this summer and this picture looks like a park in Colorado. Nevertheless it is very grand.
Well done.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2022
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Hello Lisa. Thanks so much for your wonderful review. I am enjoying writing Tankas lately and I struggle to get the middle satori just write, but it is tricky sometimes. So glad you liked it. Thanks again.
Melissa
Comment from robyn corum
Mel,
You know I adore your poetry and your skill. I completely understand your wonder at the Grand Canyon and this reminds me of the people talking about their experiences after their journies on Blue Horizon or whatever the space rockets are called.
The last three lines are awesome. The first two lines are fab. My problem is how the middle line works with the first two. Just a thought. Yours to ignore, of course. Hugs-
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Mel,
You know I adore your poetry and your skill. I completely understand your wonder at the Grand Canyon and this reminds me of the people talking about their experiences after their journies on Blue Horizon or whatever the space rockets are called.
The last three lines are awesome. The first two lines are fab. My problem is how the middle line works with the first two. Just a thought. Yours to ignore, of course. Hugs-
Comment Written 04-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2022
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Hello Robyn. Thanks so much for your wonderful review. I am enjoying writing Tankas lately and I struggle to get the middle satori just write, but it is tricky sometimes. So glad you liked it. Thanks again.
Melissa
