Drifting Snow
Rondeau34 total reviews
Comment from estory
This reminded me of Frost in style and construction. You had nice echoing effect in the rhymes, the easy gait, the pastoral romantic imagery. It's like this quiet moment when you watch the snow from your window and it brings back memories of childhood and this innocent appreciation of the world. Very much like Stopping by Woods On a Snowy Evening. estory
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2022
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This reminded me of Frost in style and construction. You had nice echoing effect in the rhymes, the easy gait, the pastoral romantic imagery. It's like this quiet moment when you watch the snow from your window and it brings back memories of childhood and this innocent appreciation of the world. Very much like Stopping by Woods On a Snowy Evening. estory
Comment Written 03-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2022
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Hello estory. Thank you. I really appreciate your insightful review and comparison to Frost. I am delighted you liked it :)
Melissa
Comment from Boogienights
This is such a beautiful form of poetry that I really enjoy reading. Your poem in particular sets a lovely serene scene that makes me wish I were there. Thanks so much for sharing this. :)
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2022
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This is such a beautiful form of poetry that I really enjoy reading. Your poem in particular sets a lovely serene scene that makes me wish I were there. Thanks so much for sharing this. :)
Comment Written 03-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2022
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Hi Sharon. I am delighted that you liked this rondeau. Thank you for the lovely review on it. :)
Melissa
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
'Drifting Snow ', is an extremely well-written and deftly descriptive piece. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. I look forward to seeing your next post.
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2022
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'Drifting Snow ', is an extremely well-written and deftly descriptive piece. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. I look forward to seeing your next post.
Comment Written 02-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2022
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Hello Duchess.... thank you for your comments and words about this rondeau. Much appreciated!!
Melissa
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Hello Melissa,
You're more than welcome!!
Best wishes,
the Duchess
Comment from Gee
Nice memory poem Mrs. Melissa.
My only question for you, your refrain isn't an iambic tetrameter, it there a reason for this? Not important, I was just wondering
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2022
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Nice memory poem Mrs. Melissa.
My only question for you, your refrain isn't an iambic tetrameter, it there a reason for this? Not important, I was just wondering
Comment Written 02-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2022
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Hi Eugene. Thank you for your comments. I double checked the meter and it is in iambic... the refrain is taken from the first line and is just a portion of the line,... usually four syllables... I chose the first part of the line... as snow drifts down... Thanks again.
Melissa
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ah, okay.
I think I was little confused as to what the poetry dance site said about it.
Comment from June Sargent
I must try this format - it flows beautifully with that repeated line highlighting the imagery of drifting snow. And it compliments the passage of time that like sand in an hourglass. You are a true craftsman when it comes to poetry!
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2022
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I must try this format - it flows beautifully with that repeated line highlighting the imagery of drifting snow. And it compliments the passage of time that like sand in an hourglass. You are a true craftsman when it comes to poetry!
Comment Written 02-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2022
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June, your lovely review is so encouraging to me. I am very glad you liked this rondeau about the snow. I hope to be sitting in that chair tomorrow afternoon when it is supposed to come down here in central Virginia... perhaps, as I watch it, I will pen another Rondeau. :). Thanks so much, my friend.
Melissa
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your rondeau reads well Melissa. I like the subject, the great picture, and your well thought out words. Great job with the style of rondeau, too. Your repeated phrase fits in smoothly. I like the way the drifting snow gives the person time to think about his/her life as they watch it.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2022
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Your rondeau reads well Melissa. I like the subject, the great picture, and your well thought out words. Great job with the style of rondeau, too. Your repeated phrase fits in smoothly. I like the way the drifting snow gives the person time to think about his/her life as they watch it.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 02-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2022
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Jan, your lovely review is so encouraging to me. I am very glad you liked this rondeau about the snow. I hope to be sitting in that chair tomorrow afternoon when it is supposed to come down here in central Virginia... perhaps, as I watch it, I will pen another Rondeau. :). Thanks so much, my friend.
Melissa
Comment from zanya
It's a beautiful poetic rendition here in this Rondeau of a snow- covered reverie 'dear memories return en masse 'and a distinct sense of the passing of time
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2022
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It's a beautiful poetic rendition here in this Rondeau of a snow- covered reverie 'dear memories return en masse 'and a distinct sense of the passing of time
Comment Written 02-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2022
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Zanya, your lovely review is so encouraging to me. I am very glad you liked this rondeau about the snow. I hope to be sitting in that chair tomorrow afternoon when it is supposed to come down here in central Virginia... perhaps, as I watch it, I will pen another Rondeau. :). Thanks so much.
Melissa
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
I love the descriptive words which flow just like falling snow and invite me into this experience.
I accept and am taken into an ethereal experience and feel as though I am there too.
A fine feat for have never experienced snow falling other than on television.
Blessings
Shirley
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2022
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I love the descriptive words which flow just like falling snow and invite me into this experience.
I accept and am taken into an ethereal experience and feel as though I am there too.
A fine feat for have never experienced snow falling other than on television.
Blessings
Shirley
Comment Written 02-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2022
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Shirley, your lovely review is so encouraging to me. I am very glad you liked this rondeau about the snow. I hope to be sitting in that chair tomorrow afternoon when it is supposed to come down here in central Virginia... perhaps, as I watch it, I will pen another Rondeau. :). Thanks so much, my friend.
Melissa
Comment from Ulla
Oh, Melissa, this is absolutely lovely and so very well written. The imagery is outstanding making me shiver as I'm there in the cold. What a joy to read this is. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2022
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Oh, Melissa, this is absolutely lovely and so very well written. The imagery is outstanding making me shiver as I'm there in the cold. What a joy to read this is. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 02-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2022
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Ulla, your lovely review is so encouraging to me. I am very glad you liked this rondeau about the snow. I hope to be sitting in that chair tomorrow afternoon when it is supposed to come down here in central Virginia... perhaps, as I watch it, I will pen another Rondeau. :). Thanks so much, my friend.
Melissa
Comment from Janice Canerdy
For me the rondeau is a challenge, but once I get into the composing of one, I start enjoying it! Yours is excellent--expressive, descriptive of how some sights in nature can capture us and summon memories in addition to summoning thoughts of those hourglass sands!
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2022
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For me the rondeau is a challenge, but once I get into the composing of one, I start enjoying it! Yours is excellent--expressive, descriptive of how some sights in nature can capture us and summon memories in addition to summoning thoughts of those hourglass sands!
Comment Written 02-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2022
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Janice, your lovely review is so encouraging to me. I am very glad you liked this rondeau about the snow. I hope to be sitting in that chair tomorrow afternoon when it is supposed to come down here in central Virginia... perhaps, as I watch it, I will pen another Rondeau. :). Thanks so much, my friend.
Melissa
