The Condition
change as good as a rest?20 total reviews
Comment from cat frenette
Wow! I love your style of writing!
It paints a very clear picture, but also allows me to let my imagination run wild.
I always believed that the best stories aren't the ones you read or hear, they're the ones that play out in your head as you read the words, and the best storytellers are the ones who make those images come alive.
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2022
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Wow! I love your style of writing!
It paints a very clear picture, but also allows me to let my imagination run wild.
I always believed that the best stories aren't the ones you read or hear, they're the ones that play out in your head as you read the words, and the best storytellers are the ones who make those images come alive.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2022
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Many thanks for checking this one out. GMG
Comment from BLACKTITANIUM86
Wow!!! That must be a serious phobia!!! And this is a great
write, with a vast amount of creativity. You paint a very vivid
picture, While being able to hold the readers attention. And
I like that. Keep Writing. And I hope to see you stop by, and
enjoy some of my poetry. Either way, Stay Connected
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2022
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Wow!!! That must be a serious phobia!!! And this is a great
write, with a vast amount of creativity. You paint a very vivid
picture, While being able to hold the readers attention. And
I like that. Keep Writing. And I hope to see you stop by, and
enjoy some of my poetry. Either way, Stay Connected
Comment Written 05-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2022
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Many thanks once again, my friend. G
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Ha, ha, ha what an unexpected ending and story better run that endure the torture of a full elevator. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2022
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Ha, ha, ha what an unexpected ending and story better run that endure the torture of a full elevator. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2022
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Hate elevators... but not for these reasons. lol Cheers GMG
Comment from Judy Lawless
This is an interesting piece of fiction for sure. It all began so innocently, and then bam, you had me rattled. I never imagined it would be a story about a vampire, or maybe a wolf. Hmm. Well done.
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2022
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This is an interesting piece of fiction for sure. It all began so innocently, and then bam, you had me rattled. I never imagined it would be a story about a vampire, or maybe a wolf. Hmm. Well done.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2022
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Many thanks. I wanted to take something innocent and try to twist it a little. Just coming at things from a different direction.
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You're welcome. You did a good job.
Comment from The_Boy_Whodunnit
I really like the first paragraph, it's almost a foreshadowing of what is likely to happen in the story. It had enough in the story to keep it interesting throughout and keep you wondering. A story well told.
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2022
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I really like the first paragraph, it's almost a foreshadowing of what is likely to happen in the story. It had enough in the story to keep it interesting throughout and keep you wondering. A story well told.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2022
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Many thanks for checking this one out. GMG
Comment from Begin Again
Wow! That was quite a journey and an unbelievable transformation. I wasn't expecting it and that's what makes it so enjoyable. Great job and I am happy to have discovered your writing.
Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2022
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Wow! That was quite a journey and an unbelievable transformation. I wasn't expecting it and that's what makes it so enjoyable. Great job and I am happy to have discovered your writing.
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 03-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2022
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I wanted to play around with something that may have been somewhat familiar and take it somewhere else. Many thanks. G
Comment from aryr
Wow, this one was amazing, G. It was rather creative. I would never believed that I was reading a werewolf story as I started. This was done very well, the story was initially about a man with claustrophobia but easily changed to the werewolf concept. It was greatly enjoyed. I loved the picture.
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2022
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Wow, this one was amazing, G. It was rather creative. I would never believed that I was reading a werewolf story as I started. This was done very well, the story was initially about a man with claustrophobia but easily changed to the werewolf concept. It was greatly enjoyed. I loved the picture.
Comment Written 02-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2022
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I liked the similarities between the conditions and thought I could have some fun with it! lol
Much appreciated
G
Comment from Spitfire
What happens when a man with claustrophobia gets bullied by his boss and walks into an elevator? It's not a joke, of course. Turning into a werewolf must be tough when there's a crowd around. Some humorous moments in this story as in the man who decided to wait for the next elevator and "it's hard to laugh with no throat." Love the use of three gerunds that start with 's' to describe his getaway.
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2022
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What happens when a man with claustrophobia gets bullied by his boss and walks into an elevator? It's not a joke, of course. Turning into a werewolf must be tough when there's a crowd around. Some humorous moments in this story as in the man who decided to wait for the next elevator and "it's hard to laugh with no throat." Love the use of three gerunds that start with 's' to describe his getaway.
Comment Written 02-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2022
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Much appreciated once again. G
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
As a lift-o-phobe, I felt great sympathy and empathy for the narrator... for about seven floors. Then I just began to feel relief that in fact there are significant differences between us - I have hairs on the palms of my hands, not bloodshot eyes.
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2022
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As a lift-o-phobe, I felt great sympathy and empathy for the narrator... for about seven floors. Then I just began to feel relief that in fact there are significant differences between us - I have hairs on the palms of my hands, not bloodshot eyes.
Comment Written 02-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2022
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I hate lifts. i always use the stairs myself, no matter how far up I have to go. All the best G
Comment from Earl Corp
This should have been a horror contest entry, though I have seen violence warnings used for much less. Is it a werewolf? Very nice job. Stay safe and stay healthy in the new year.
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2022
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This should have been a horror contest entry, though I have seen violence warnings used for much less. Is it a werewolf? Very nice job. Stay safe and stay healthy in the new year.
Comment Written 02-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2022
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Yep, werewolf. The descriptions aren't extreme hence no warning. Much appreciated. G
