My Father -a good provider
but we didn't talk6 total reviews
Comment from Frank Ball
This telling story is written with professional skills. It reminds me of my own experience; there is much in common. But that is water under the bridge, as they say.
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2022
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This telling story is written with professional skills. It reminds me of my own experience; there is much in common. But that is water under the bridge, as they say.
Comment Written 01-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2022
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Thank you very much, Frank. And you're right. It is water under the bridge.
And I very much appreciate the 6!!!
Comment from Kit Nongkhlaw
Well written and well thought of. I like the rhyme and the flow all along till the end. Yes, we should try to be close to our fathers. I had a problem with my father when I was a teen but changed. He is a wise father. Thanks for sharing and all the best for the contest. Oh, wishing you a Merry Christmas and a Happy New Year, Kit.
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2021
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Well written and well thought of. I like the rhyme and the flow all along till the end. Yes, we should try to be close to our fathers. I had a problem with my father when I was a teen but changed. He is a wise father. Thanks for sharing and all the best for the contest. Oh, wishing you a Merry Christmas and a Happy New Year, Kit.
Comment Written 24-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2021
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Thank you, Kit.
And Merry Christmas to you, too!
Comment from roof35
This is an excellent entry for the My Father contest. I heard the remark about kids been seen but not heard, but my step-dad pretty much ignored it and talked to us all the time. All the dad's do their best. Thanks for sharing this well-written poem.
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2021
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This is an excellent entry for the My Father contest. I heard the remark about kids been seen but not heard, but my step-dad pretty much ignored it and talked to us all the time. All the dad's do their best. Thanks for sharing this well-written poem.
Comment Written 23-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2021
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sounds like yours sure did.
Thanks for your very nice comments.
Comment from RodG
This is a terrific entry for this contest. Your narrative poem gives us a vivid picture of what kind of father yours was. Your narrator also makes it clear how--with time--he came to understand how/why his father was the way he was. You give us enough of Dad's backstory for us to understand him and his father. There are places where your meter/rhythm falters, but otherwise this is a very good poem. Rod
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2021
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This is a terrific entry for this contest. Your narrative poem gives us a vivid picture of what kind of father yours was. Your narrator also makes it clear how--with time--he came to understand how/why his father was the way he was. You give us enough of Dad's backstory for us to understand him and his father. There are places where your meter/rhythm falters, but otherwise this is a very good poem. Rod
Comment Written 23-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2021
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hmmm, will have to check the meter, but thank you for reading and for your very nice comments.
Comment from Sally Law
This is a poignant write of the life of your father, viewed from your perspective. We see things differently as children and gain more understanding and insight as we grow. At least I have. I barely knew my father because I was forcibly removed from him as a child and his alcoholic lifestyle. I ventured back later in life and found him in places a girl should never go alone. Still, I had found Christ and wanted to share my faith, hoping for a changed life for him, and closure for me. He died shortly after I married. My father's end is my greatest sorrow. Do tell God about and ,ay it down. Only then can you move on. I know.
A beautiful entry, mystery poet. My very best in contest. I hope we get to vote on this one.
Sending you my best today as always and best wishes for the upcoming contest,
Sally :))
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2021
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This is a poignant write of the life of your father, viewed from your perspective. We see things differently as children and gain more understanding and insight as we grow. At least I have. I barely knew my father because I was forcibly removed from him as a child and his alcoholic lifestyle. I ventured back later in life and found him in places a girl should never go alone. Still, I had found Christ and wanted to share my faith, hoping for a changed life for him, and closure for me. He died shortly after I married. My father's end is my greatest sorrow. Do tell God about and ,ay it down. Only then can you move on. I know.
A beautiful entry, mystery poet. My very best in contest. I hope we get to vote on this one.
Sending you my best today as always and best wishes for the upcoming contest,
Sally :))
Comment Written 23-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2021
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Sally, you are kindness, personified.
Thank you for your insight and kind words!!
Comment from Taminang Therese N
This is a touching one. My dad wasn't really this type but was not rich and not very willing to support our education, maybe because we were many. Mom paid most of our school fees, but we loved him anyway because he loved us too. It is well written and I find no errors. I love the font size. Thanks for sharing and success in the contest.
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2021
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This is a touching one. My dad wasn't really this type but was not rich and not very willing to support our education, maybe because we were many. Mom paid most of our school fees, but we loved him anyway because he loved us too. It is well written and I find no errors. I love the font size. Thanks for sharing and success in the contest.
Comment Written 22-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2021
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thank you for reading my post and for your comments.
I think my father loved us, too, he just didn't know how to communicate with us.
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Good, we continue to pray for them.
