Pleased to Reminisce
They were years of worry and years of fun worth remembering.4 total reviews
Comment from Ramona Scarborough
Liked the memories, and the picture went along with your poem. You might want to read your poem aloud, to see that some lines don't meter and some words didn't rhyme. Some commas on certain lines were missing.
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2021
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Liked the memories, and the picture went along with your poem. You might want to read your poem aloud, to see that some lines don't meter and some words didn't rhyme. Some commas on certain lines were missing.
Comment Written 16-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2021
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Haiku does not require meter or rhyme, only proper syllable count.
Thanks for commenting. Rules for Traditional Haiku Structure:
"The second line is 7 syllables. The third line is 5 syllables like the first. Punctuation and capitalization are up to the poet, and need not follow the rigid rules used in structuring sentences. A haiku does not have to rhyme, in fact usually it does not rhyme at all."
Comment from Lloyd T. Okoko
The objective correlative of the work reminisces the protagonist's High School Days.
The work highlights his doggedness with his studies as well as his manoeuvres in a love affair.
The work earns its texture through the effective use of flashbacks that reminisce his experience.
Excellent work. Bravo.
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2021
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The objective correlative of the work reminisces the protagonist's High School Days.
The work highlights his doggedness with his studies as well as his manoeuvres in a love affair.
The work earns its texture through the effective use of flashbacks that reminisce his experience.
Excellent work. Bravo.
Comment Written 15-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2021
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Thank you much for your read and encouraging review.
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Remain Blessed.
Comment from Susan Newell
You have managed to tell a complete story of high school years, and included the value of enduring friendships. Remembering and talking about earlier times with someone with whom they were shared is very rewarding. Good job.
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2021
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You have managed to tell a complete story of high school years, and included the value of enduring friendships. Remembering and talking about earlier times with someone with whom they were shared is very rewarding. Good job.
Comment Written 15-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2021
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Thank you for the read and encouraging feedback.
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You are welcome.
Comment from VJWild
This is such a cool piece! It's amazing how in only 12 lines you summed up being an adolescent, or at least the most important time in an adolescent's life. I mean, you basically told my life story, and no doubt, stories of many others. I'm impressed with how you got the rhyme scheme to work while not compromising the rest of the poem. While reading, I debated on if the lines were too long, but I think they have to be for it to work. Well done and good luck!
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2021
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This is such a cool piece! It's amazing how in only 12 lines you summed up being an adolescent, or at least the most important time in an adolescent's life. I mean, you basically told my life story, and no doubt, stories of many others. I'm impressed with how you got the rhyme scheme to work while not compromising the rest of the poem. While reading, I debated on if the lines were too long, but I think they have to be for it to work. Well done and good luck!
Comment Written 15-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2021
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Thank you for the read and encouraging feedback. Much appreciated.
