Not Fair!
Winter can be unfair.27 total reviews
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a grim scene and there is nothing romantic about cold and ice except when the sun shines on the scene to make it sparkle, a fine six line poem, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2021
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This is a grim scene and there is nothing romantic about cold and ice except when the sun shines on the scene to make it sparkle, a fine six line poem, love Dolly x
Comment Written 14-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2021
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Winter officially begins in a week, but for many, it already is grim outside. Many thanks for sharing my poem, Dolly.
Comment from Paul McFarland
Interesting rhyme scheme. That's a new one for me. Nature is capable of being nice, but she wasn't very nice to the people of Kentucky just the other day.
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2021
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Interesting rhyme scheme. That's a new one for me. Nature is capable of being nice, but she wasn't very nice to the people of Kentucky just the other day.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2021
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I am pleased I could introduce you too new rhyme scheme, Paul. Browning?s is fun to play with. Yes, Nature was horrible to those people in Kentucky.
Comment from Jasmine Girl
I thought I heard the meters at work when I was reading it. I also like the Browning rhyming scheme. I recently wrote many poems about happiness of seeing snow coming so my husband and I can go and do some cross country skiing. Our prayer has been answered. We had one foot of snow last Friday and we have gone skiing three times so far. We will tomorrow again before it all melts away on Wednesday.
Well done.
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2021
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I thought I heard the meters at work when I was reading it. I also like the Browning rhyming scheme. I recently wrote many poems about happiness of seeing snow coming so my husband and I can go and do some cross country skiing. Our prayer has been answered. We had one foot of snow last Friday and we have gone skiing three times so far. We will tomorrow again before it all melts away on Wednesday.
Well done.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2021
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I am delighted you enjoyed my poem?s rhythm and rhyme. Maybe if I skied I?d like Winter as you do. Have fun on the slopes.
Comment from Ben Colder
It is all how a person looks at it. Destructive, beauty, pleasure. All in the eyes of the beholder. Well done. Best to you in the contest. Thanks for sharing
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2021
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It is all how a person looks at it. Destructive, beauty, pleasure. All in the eyes of the beholder. Well done. Best to you in the contest. Thanks for sharing
Comment Written 13-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2021
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Thank you, Ben, for sharing my poem. Yes, we all see Winter differently.
Comment from Mary Shifman
This is an interesting philosophical question. I don't know about fair, but it sure is beautiful to see. I admit, I don't like being cold and all that, and I did like it more when I wasn't alone. Saturday we had freezing rain and ice coated everything. Sunday it warm, the ice had melted and it was 50 degrees. So you're right. Winter can be nice, if not fair Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2021
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This is an interesting philosophical question. I don't know about fair, but it sure is beautiful to see. I admit, I don't like being cold and all that, and I did like it more when I wasn't alone. Saturday we had freezing rain and ice coated everything. Sunday it warm, the ice had melted and it was 50 degrees. So you're right. Winter can be nice, if not fair Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2021
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Thank you for sharing and praising my poem, Mary. You are more open-minded about Winter than I am. If we had an ice storm this early, I would still be cursing.
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You are welcome. I don't enjoy it as much now that I have no one to help with the outside duties. I'm afraid of falling again, but it's still beautiful.
Comment from Tina Crute
This poem is severe but leaves some room at the end for the reader to consider if nature really is nice, even though severe at times. Good poetry makes you think, as this one does. You remind me that I do not need to close a poem off perfectly and neatly. Sometimes, it's better to suggest or invite the reader to consider a response. Well done and good luck!
Tina
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2021
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This poem is severe but leaves some room at the end for the reader to consider if nature really is nice, even though severe at times. Good poetry makes you think, as this one does. You remind me that I do not need to close a poem off perfectly and neatly. Sometimes, it's better to suggest or invite the reader to consider a response. Well done and good luck!
Tina
Comment Written 13-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2021
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Many thanks for sharing my poem and your comments. I agree that often it is wise to invite the reader to consider a response. Many reviewers think I should be more "nice" in my thoughts about Winter.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Winter can be unfair.
Not Fair!
Great entry for the Six Line Poem writing prompt contest. I like the nature theme. Nice flow with your rhyme in iambic meter good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2021
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Winter can be unfair.
Not Fair!
Great entry for the Six Line Poem writing prompt contest. I like the nature theme. Nice flow with your rhyme in iambic meter good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2021
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Thank you so much, Gypsy, for your praise of my poem. I am very pleased you like my nature theme.
Comment from LisaMay
I like the unusual rhyme scheme in this and the metre sets out a nice rhythm. I also enjoyed the gentle humour in your complaint. Nature can play nice, but she sure shows her mean streak in winter.
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2021
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I like the unusual rhyme scheme in this and the metre sets out a nice rhythm. I also enjoyed the gentle humour in your complaint. Nature can play nice, but she sure shows her mean streak in winter.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2021
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Hi, Lisa. Many thanks for sharing my poem and your kind praise. I really like Browning's six-line stanza and the unique rhyme pattern. It is fun to play with.
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Comment from Terry Broxson
A very good poem for a six-line contest, good luck. I will not try to convince you nature is nice. She is not. She has no remorse. I think when nature is nice, it's just an oversight on her part. Good job. Gets my vote.
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2021
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A very good poem for a six-line contest, good luck. I will not try to convince you nature is nice. She is not. She has no remorse. I think when nature is nice, it's just an oversight on her part. Good job. Gets my vote.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2021
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You would not convince me Winter is nice even if you tried. I am thinking of those poor people who live in Kentucky and just had their homes destroyed by a rare December tornado.
Comment from Anne Johnston
"What's fair about deep snow and ice,"
That's quite a question you ask in your well written poem. We may not like the cold and ice, but it is part of nature's plan to give the plants a time to rest and be ready for spring.
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2021
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"What's fair about deep snow and ice,"
That's quite a question you ask in your well written poem. We may not like the cold and ice, but it is part of nature's plan to give the plants a time to rest and be ready for spring.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2021
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I admire your optimistic attitude, Anne. Indeed Winter is part of "nature's plan." Many thanks for sharing my poem and your comments.
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You are welcome. I am glad I can just stay in out of the cold most of the time.
