The other side
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Comment from duchessofdrumborg
' The Other Side ' , is an extremely well-written and delightfully descriptive piece. Penned with craft and skill. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. Good luck with the contest. Please let me know how you get on?
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2021
' The Other Side ' , is an extremely well-written and delightfully descriptive piece. Penned with craft and skill. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. Good luck with the contest. Please let me know how you get on?
Comment Written 12-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2021
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Thank you so much for reviewing - I appreciate it. Wendy
Wendy, as always you're more than welcome.
the Duchess
Comment from harmony13
The author's words have a great message! I found these words to be
strong, clever, interesting and creative. I like the way the author used
the word failure and then gives a positive statement. Changing how we see things can make a big difference! The artwork is great and compliments this poem.
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2021
The author's words have a great message! I found these words to be
strong, clever, interesting and creative. I like the way the author used
the word failure and then gives a positive statement. Changing how we see things can make a big difference! The artwork is great and compliments this poem.
Comment Written 12-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2021
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Thank you so much for your great review! I appreciate your thoughts, encouragement, and time.
Wendy
Comment from tfawcus
So much wisdom in this, Wendy. It should be pinned on every family's fridge! Measuring ourselves against the standards of others can be a dangerous direction.
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2021
So much wisdom in this, Wendy. It should be pinned on every family's fridge! Measuring ourselves against the standards of others can be a dangerous direction.
Comment Written 11-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2021
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Thank you very much for your review. I appreciate your comments a lot!
Comment from Sherry Asbury
No failure in this write! Very clever thing with the dice. We must let ourselves do the best we can and leave that failure word on the woodpile. I see you won this contest...good on you, I am proud of you!! But best of all you gave a good lesson and lots to think about!!
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2021
No failure in this write! Very clever thing with the dice. We must let ourselves do the best we can and leave that failure word on the woodpile. I see you won this contest...good on you, I am proud of you!! But best of all you gave a good lesson and lots to think about!!
Comment Written 11-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2021
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Thank you so much Sherry for a wonderful review and such lovely comments. We all need to remind ourselves of these things from time to time.
Wendy
Comment from Anne Johnston
I love your poem and your perspective on life. What may seem like a failure to some is a success to others. I especially like the verse:
"Failure to have a home like in the magazines?
Maybe successful in having a simple home filled with love!"
Every mother should take note of this.
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2021
I love your poem and your perspective on life. What may seem like a failure to some is a success to others. I especially like the verse:
"Failure to have a home like in the magazines?
Maybe successful in having a simple home filled with love!"
Every mother should take note of this.
Comment Written 11-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2021
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Thank you Anne. Yes. It is important to be realistic, and to remember that what counts, particularly for children, is a loving home with happy memories of caring adults. Many thanks for your encouragement in your review.
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You are welcome, Wendy
Comment from Seshadri_Sreenivasan
What a wonderfully penned poem, full of wisdom and inspiration. I liked every line of it. As it is said, never let success get to your head; never let failure get to your heart. Just because you fail once, doesn't mean you're gonna fail at everything. A virtual six from me.Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2021
What a wonderfully penned poem, full of wisdom and inspiration. I liked every line of it. As it is said, never let success get to your head; never let failure get to your heart. Just because you fail once, doesn't mean you're gonna fail at everything. A virtual six from me.Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 11-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2021
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Thank you so much Seshradi. I appreciate that review, and that is an excellent saying to remember!
Comment from Tina Crute
Wow, this poem packs a punch! For me personally, there may be too many questions and that made me not be able to read through the poem smoothly. I would suggest rephrasing just some of the questions so they are statements. I had to stop and consider the questions. Having said that, I still liked this for its message. The last stanza is key! Good job on giving great advice in the end. I do think this will do well in the contest. Good luck!
Know what, after taking another look...You could leave the questions in, but let each question, paired with an answer, stand alone. Put spaces between the question and answer sets. I think that will read more like an enthusiastic speech as you itemize, in a way, all the doubts we have.
Sorry this is so long and I hope you are not offended. I truly like this, obviously,lol... and I am just giving an opinion. Best of luck!
Tina
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2021
Wow, this poem packs a punch! For me personally, there may be too many questions and that made me not be able to read through the poem smoothly. I would suggest rephrasing just some of the questions so they are statements. I had to stop and consider the questions. Having said that, I still liked this for its message. The last stanza is key! Good job on giving great advice in the end. I do think this will do well in the contest. Good luck!
Know what, after taking another look...You could leave the questions in, but let each question, paired with an answer, stand alone. Put spaces between the question and answer sets. I think that will read more like an enthusiastic speech as you itemize, in a way, all the doubts we have.
Sorry this is so long and I hope you are not offended. I truly like this, obviously,lol... and I am just giving an opinion. Best of luck!
Tina
Comment Written 10-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2021
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Tina, thank you so much for such a thoughtful review! In fact I started it out with gaps between each question and answer, and then wondered if people would see it as too long. After reading your review, I think I will put the spaces back in. Many thanks for your time, and suggestion.
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Oh, good! I will go take a look at it! You are welcome. Long is okay, I think! Either way, the content is good:)
Tina
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Excellent entry for the Failure writing prompt contest. Good free verse form. I like the presentation too.
You give great advice. Most of the time we are our worst critics.
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2021
Excellent entry for the Failure writing prompt contest. Good free verse form. I like the presentation too.
You give great advice. Most of the time we are our worst critics.
Comment Written 10-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2021
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Thank you very much Gypsy. I appreciate your thoughtful review.
Comment from royowen
Of course no man (or woman or indeed child) is naturally a loser, we judge on peripheral success, giftedness, fame, fortune, good looks etc. but that's no way to value anyone, that's earthly, sensual judgement. As intrinsic worth and value belongs to all, not just some, but all. Beautifully written, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2021
Of course no man (or woman or indeed child) is naturally a loser, we judge on peripheral success, giftedness, fame, fortune, good looks etc. but that's no way to value anyone, that's earthly, sensual judgement. As intrinsic worth and value belongs to all, not just some, but all. Beautifully written, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 10-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2021
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Thank you very much Roy. You have articulated exactly my message.
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
you got that right. We have to be true to ourselves. I like your advice in your poem. You brought many thoughts to the surface. We must love ourselves before we can love others.
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2021
you got that right. We have to be true to ourselves. I like your advice in your poem. You brought many thoughts to the surface. We must love ourselves before we can love others.
Comment Written 10-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2021
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Thank you so much for your thoughtful review. Appreciated!