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A Bar of Soap

Visiting Grandmother

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Comment from kiwisteveh
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Uh, oh! Sounds like Dad was hard-working and smart, but you missed out on the smarts! Nice little surprise ending essential to Flash Fiction.

Clever construction allowing the reader to read just enough between the lines.

Good luck.

Steve

 Comment Written 10-Dec-2021


reply by the author on 11-Dec-2021
    Thank you very much. Terry.
Comment from Spitfire
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Punctuation wise, I believe the two sentences in Granny's anecdote should be together with a single set of quotation marks. Other than that, the punch line is hilarious.

 Comment Written 10-Dec-2021


reply by the author on 11-Dec-2021
    Thank you very much! Terry.
Comment from estory
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What's funny about this is that you slip in the curse word the way we use them in real life; almost without thinking about it. It's like second nature. And it also illustrates where these things come from. The people around you. estory

 Comment Written 10-Dec-2021


reply by the author on 10-Dec-2021
    Thank you very much! Terry.
Comment from Paul McFarland
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Great story in a flash, Terry. You can always find out really interesting stuff from grandparents. Always wanted to know things about my father, but his father died early, and his mother lived far away.

 Comment Written 10-Dec-2021


reply by the author on 10-Dec-2021
    Thank you very much. Terry.
Comment from Sally Law
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The apple did not fall from the tree in this riotous flash fiction. My mother did this to my brothers regularly, but it didn't help. Sending you my best today as always and best wishes for the upcoming contest,
Sal :))

 Comment Written 10-Dec-2021


reply by the author on 10-Dec-2021
    Thank you so much, very kind. Terry.
Comment from Debbie Pope
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That is so funny. And so realistic. Kids make the best true flash fiction. They say random things that stand alone in their humor and insight. You lead the reader to your punchline with ease and clarity. And, I count 101 words so you are good with the word count.
This is a fine entry. Good luck.

 Comment Written 10-Dec-2021


reply by the author on 10-Dec-2021
    Thank you very much, very kind. Terry.
Comment from The Journaler
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How funny! Loved your short, well written story. It made me laugh, and that is a great way to start the day. My grandmother was also named Minnie and called Granny! And this is just what she would have done. Your picture is great and adds to the story. I hope you do well on the contest!

 Comment Written 10-Dec-2021


reply by the author on 10-Dec-2021
    Thank you so much! Terry.
reply by The Journaler on 11-Dec-2021
    You are welcome!
Comment from Jesse James Doty
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Oh, so your father didn't really get his mouth washed out with soap! You are really lucky that your granny didn't wash your mouth with soap either! This true story flash is one of the best short stories I have read in a long time! It is an excellent true tale and I have never had the experience of having anybody wash my mouth with soap!
Have a wonderful weekend,
Take good care of yourself and may you never have to wash out your children's mouths out with soap!
Jesse


 Comment Written 10-Dec-2021


reply by the author on 10-Dec-2021
    Thank you very much. Turns out Dad did get the soaping! Being the first grandson, and the fact she was laughing so hard, I did escape. Terry.
Comment from lauralumummu
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This is hilarious and so true to life. I had a chuckle reading this. Kids can come up with the funniest things. Have a terrific week, and all the best in the contest, Laura.

 Comment Written 10-Dec-2021


reply by the author on 10-Dec-2021
    Thank you so much! Terry.
Comment from Earl Corp
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Very clever twist at the end. This should do very well in the voting booth. Kudo for being able to write a complete story in 75?words. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 09-Dec-2021


reply by the author on 10-Dec-2021
    Thank you very much, appreciate it. Terry.