The Day of Infamy
Commemorating Pearl Harbor44 total reviews
Comment from Sherry Asbury
This is a beautiful tribute to those who gave us freedom we should cherish. Every Friday I watch Hawaii 5 0 and see the Arizona...wondering what we can do to stop war and achieve world peace. In the meantime I believe we should salute our flag every day and bow our heads in prayer as we pray for the souls of all brave men and women who sacrifice. You have done a splendid job in reminding us of this horrific plague called war!
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2021
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This is a beautiful tribute to those who gave us freedom we should cherish. Every Friday I watch Hawaii 5 0 and see the Arizona...wondering what we can do to stop war and achieve world peace. In the meantime I believe we should salute our flag every day and bow our heads in prayer as we pray for the souls of all brave men and women who sacrifice. You have done a splendid job in reminding us of this horrific plague called war!
Comment Written 06-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2021
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Thank you, Sherry, for a wonderful review.
Comment from Pantygynt
A few evenings ago our BBC ran a three night mini-series on the 'Day of Infamy', though as far as we Brits were concerned it was the single most important cause of ultimate victory since it brought the USA into the war and from that moment our ultimate victory became inevitable. I enjoyed reading your own common metre tribute to the event here - a very well-penned piece.
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A few evenings ago our BBC ran a three night mini-series on the 'Day of Infamy', though as far as we Brits were concerned it was the single most important cause of ultimate victory since it brought the USA into the war and from that moment our ultimate victory became inevitable. I enjoyed reading your own common metre tribute to the event here - a very well-penned piece.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2021
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As I've said numerous times, if the English had not held Hitler off and sent it running, he would have been over here. Thanks, Jim.
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and between him and Tojo...
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It doesn't bear thinking.
Comment from Seshadri_Sreenivasan
A very well penned poem as a tribute in commemoration of all who were k who sacrificed their lives for the sake of freedom. Being in India, I have had the horror of watching this s war episode on the screen. In war, there is no winner. All are losers. So sad. Thanks for sharing!
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2021
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A very well penned poem as a tribute in commemoration of all who were k who sacrificed their lives for the sake of freedom. Being in India, I have had the horror of watching this s war episode on the screen. In war, there is no winner. All are losers. So sad. Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 06-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2021
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Thank you for reviewing.
Comment from dragonpoet
This is a good rembrance of the day at its cost to us all. It is sad that we don't have many left who lived through it. But that was a long time ago.
But these things should never be forgotten or not honored.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Happy Holidays.
Joan
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2021
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This is a good rembrance of the day at its cost to us all. It is sad that we don't have many left who lived through it. But that was a long time ago.
But these things should never be forgotten or not honored.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Happy Holidays.
Joan
Comment Written 06-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2021
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Sadly, it's being forgotten already as the new generations come along. Thanks, Joan.
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That is sad.
You're welcome, Yvonne.
Joan
Comment from Pam (respa)
-A very good image
and nice presentation.
-You did a good job
with the poem capturing
the nature of the events
that brought us into this war.
-The imagery is excellent,
as you depict the soldiers
"brown or blue,
well trained, well armed, well shod."
-The verse about the Arizona is compelling.
-The concluding verse is very good, too,
and serves as a reminder.
-Thank you for sharing this.
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2021
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-A very good image
and nice presentation.
-You did a good job
with the poem capturing
the nature of the events
that brought us into this war.
-The imagery is excellent,
as you depict the soldiers
"brown or blue,
well trained, well armed, well shod."
-The verse about the Arizona is compelling.
-The concluding verse is very good, too,
and serves as a reminder.
-Thank you for sharing this.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2021
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Thank you so much. I wrote the review before but forgot to save it, so you got a thank you for the stars first. lol. I'm so happy you like this.
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You are very welcome and deserved the stars and review.
Comment from R. Hiland
good work as a poem--meter, rhyme, sentiment. But after all the conflict(s) in the intervening 80 years, even that war, which seemed so righteous, leaves a bad taste in my mouth.
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2021
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good work as a poem--meter, rhyme, sentiment. But after all the conflict(s) in the intervening 80 years, even that war, which seemed so righteous, leaves a bad taste in my mouth.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2021
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They are all terrible. Thank you so much.
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Damommy,
Nice piece of War and History Poetry beautifully commemorating those who laid their lives for the sake of their country's honor.
Impressive phraseology; Smooth flow throughout from the beginning to the end with lovely rhyming scheme, barring in the last stanza - catalyst/head. It's my opinion, and hope you won't mind.
The last but one stanza is particularly noteworthy.
Picture enhances depth of the poem.
Laudable Presentation!
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2021
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Hello Damommy,
Nice piece of War and History Poetry beautifully commemorating those who laid their lives for the sake of their country's honor.
Impressive phraseology; Smooth flow throughout from the beginning to the end with lovely rhyming scheme, barring in the last stanza - catalyst/head. It's my opinion, and hope you won't mind.
The last but one stanza is particularly noteworthy.
Picture enhances depth of the poem.
Laudable Presentation!
Comment Written 06-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2021
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Thank you for the lovely review.
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Most Welcome!
With best wishes,
~ RP
Comment from SimianSavant
I hate giving this less than five stars but you are a great writer and I bet you can do even better. The main body of the piece is well written and well metered, with perfectly matching artwork and color scheme. The primary room I see for improvement is with the first word: in order for it to align correctly with the first beat and keep your first line in duples, it has to be: al-MOST, which is incompatible with the natural accent on the word. In order to avoid that, the reader is going to read it as AL-most and then read the next beat as a triplet: TWO years be-FORE. It's not a huge deal, but I think *almost* is rather a dull word to start this and receive so much emphasis. What if it was something like: 10am on Sunday morn / this day of days was done - this is much more exciting, and you will have to rearrange your other content, but it will give this piece more energy. You can still end the stanza with the word "born".
Give me a shout if you revise this so I can revise up the rating!
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reply by the author on 06-Dec-2021
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I hate giving this less than five stars but you are a great writer and I bet you can do even better. The main body of the piece is well written and well metered, with perfectly matching artwork and color scheme. The primary room I see for improvement is with the first word: in order for it to align correctly with the first beat and keep your first line in duples, it has to be: al-MOST, which is incompatible with the natural accent on the word. In order to avoid that, the reader is going to read it as AL-most and then read the next beat as a triplet: TWO years be-FORE. It's not a huge deal, but I think *almost* is rather a dull word to start this and receive so much emphasis. What if it was something like: 10am on Sunday morn / this day of days was done - this is much more exciting, and you will have to rearrange your other content, but it will give this piece more energy. You can still end the stanza with the word "born".
Give me a shout if you revise this so I can revise up the rating!
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2021
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Thank you for reviewing, and for the suggestions. I'm always open for advice and critique, but this time, I think I'll leave it as is. 8-)
Comment from Wendy G
A moving tribute in commemoration of all who were killed or who sacrificed their lives for the sake of freedom, and keeping Hitler at bay. Your poem is beautifully composed and presented.
Wendy
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A moving tribute in commemoration of all who were killed or who sacrificed their lives for the sake of freedom, and keeping Hitler at bay. Your poem is beautifully composed and presented.
Wendy
Comment Written 06-Dec-2021
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It was the English who stopped them from coming over here. Thanks for reviewing, Wendy. Always appreciated.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This event is world famous and we know it so well because we gained the might of the US in our fight against a tyrant in Europe as troops from America helped us with the war effort. A tragic and shocking event as Pearl harbour was attacked and from then on decisions were made to end the conflicts. Churchill had asked the US several times for support in the second World War and after Pearl Harbour, we were assisted in fighting against a common enemy. A fascinating poem in a story here, and an event that should never be forgotten as we mourn those who died, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2021
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This event is world famous and we know it so well because we gained the might of the US in our fight against a tyrant in Europe as troops from America helped us with the war effort. A tragic and shocking event as Pearl harbour was attacked and from then on decisions were made to end the conflicts. Churchill had asked the US several times for support in the second World War and after Pearl Harbour, we were assisted in fighting against a common enemy. A fascinating poem in a story here, and an event that should never be forgotten as we mourn those who died, love Dolly x
Comment Written 05-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2021
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If England had not held Hitler off, he would have been over here in a flash. We owe England a lot.
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I never thought of it that way x x x
