The Gate
A Rispetto poem29 total reviews
Comment from June Sargent
This is a sad and touching piece that hints at what used to be. We are invited to look beyond the empty, abandoned old house to see the joy that once filled the house - the sound of children's laughter, the smell of home cooking, the roses that grew along the fence...I enjoyed the rispetto format. Must try one myself.
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2021
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This is a sad and touching piece that hints at what used to be. We are invited to look beyond the empty, abandoned old house to see the joy that once filled the house - the sound of children's laughter, the smell of home cooking, the roses that grew along the fence...I enjoyed the rispetto format. Must try one myself.
Comment Written 04-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2021
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Yes, do write one. I love to find an old, abandoned house that I can walk through.
Comment from Jesse James Doty
This is excellent, my friend I haven't had time before now to read it! The truth of the matter is that my friend thinks that unusual rhyme schemes in your poetry don't fit the bill! A Rispetto is unique and I don't care what he says I love it and its quality is top-notch!
He also loves it too though secretly so that I don't know a thing. Thank you, Yvonne you really give it your all when you are writing unique styles with poetic licence!
Take good care of yourself, my friend and don't let the buggers let you down!
Jesse
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2021
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This is excellent, my friend I haven't had time before now to read it! The truth of the matter is that my friend thinks that unusual rhyme schemes in your poetry don't fit the bill! A Rispetto is unique and I don't care what he says I love it and its quality is top-notch!
He also loves it too though secretly so that I don't know a thing. Thank you, Yvonne you really give it your all when you are writing unique styles with poetic licence!
Take good care of yourself, my friend and don't let the buggers let you down!
Jesse
Comment Written 04-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2021
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Nothing will get me down with friends like you. Thank you so much for a lovely review and comments.
Comment from AnnieDawn
I love this style and you have done it justice with this poem. The old house has wistful memories and the way you have captured those in your poem is a form of art that should be congratulated. Your gift is very much displayed in this post. Thank you for sharing it.
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2021
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I love this style and you have done it justice with this poem. The old house has wistful memories and the way you have captured those in your poem is a form of art that should be congratulated. Your gift is very much displayed in this post. Thank you for sharing it.
Comment Written 04-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2021
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Thank you for reviewing it and for the lovely comments.
Comment from Pantygynt
This holds well to the rispetto form for its rhyme scheme and metre. Its comment points up the essential sorrow of an abandoned building, particularly where that building has once been a home.
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2021
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This holds well to the rispetto form for its rhyme scheme and metre. Its comment points up the essential sorrow of an abandoned building, particularly where that building has once been a home.
Comment Written 04-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2021
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Thank you. I love to find an old, abandoned house to walk through.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I like this rhyming poem describing a derelict building succumbing to neglect with no sign of life, well metered, smooth flow and a joy to read, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2021
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I like this rhyming poem describing a derelict building succumbing to neglect with no sign of life, well metered, smooth flow and a joy to read, love Dolly x
Comment Written 04-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2021
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Thank you. I love old, abandoned houses, and even like to take a peek in them.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did an excellent job with your rispetto, Yvonne. You described the once grand ol' house well. I could see everything you mentioned, and imagine how it was before time took its toll. The color scheme adds to the feeling of dark despair, too. You used alliteration well in t, d, & s. For a relatively short poem, your words speak volumes about this once prized home alive with kids and more. The picture is great but sad.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2021
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You did an excellent job with your rispetto, Yvonne. You described the once grand ol' house well. I could see everything you mentioned, and imagine how it was before time took its toll. The color scheme adds to the feeling of dark despair, too. You used alliteration well in t, d, & s. For a relatively short poem, your words speak volumes about this once prized home alive with kids and more. The picture is great but sad.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 03-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2021
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Thank you so much for this!
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
' The Gate ' , is an extremely well-written and delightfully descriptive piece. Penned with craft and skill. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. I look forward to seeing your next post.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2021
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' The Gate ' , is an extremely well-written and delightfully descriptive piece. Penned with craft and skill. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. I look forward to seeing your next post.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2021
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Thank you.
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You're very welcome.
Comment from LateBloomer
Hello damommy, Yavonne, good descriptive writing, especially:
No children swinging on the gate,
the fence no longer standing straight,
I also liked:
and nothing left but dark despair,
but none to see. There's no one there.
(The essence of the poem.)
Great artwork choice. A pleasure to read. Keep the blue waters flowing. LateBloomer
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2021
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Hello damommy, Yavonne, good descriptive writing, especially:
No children swinging on the gate,
the fence no longer standing straight,
I also liked:
and nothing left but dark despair,
but none to see. There's no one there.
(The essence of the poem.)
Great artwork choice. A pleasure to read. Keep the blue waters flowing. LateBloomer
Comment Written 03-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2021
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Thank you. I don't know where it came from, but it just popped in my head earlier today. Whenever I get an idea, which are few and far between, I run with it. lol.
Yvonne
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Poignant. Haunting. Eerily evocative of an abandoned house in disrepair. By coincidence, just yesterday my daughter and I noted that the grossly neglected fence in front of the house up our street--in which a mentally ill recluse resides--has fallen. We're wondering if the woman died. Stunning poem.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2021
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Poignant. Haunting. Eerily evocative of an abandoned house in disrepair. By coincidence, just yesterday my daughter and I noted that the grossly neglected fence in front of the house up our street--in which a mentally ill recluse resides--has fallen. We're wondering if the woman died. Stunning poem.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2021
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Oh, dear, that is a coincidence. Spooky. I hope the resident is okay. Thanks for reviewing.
Comment from aryr
I really enjoyed the picture of the rustic, rundown house, damommy. I liked how you pressed the point that it was indeed rundown and nobody lived there anymore. Very well done and greatly enjoyed.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2021
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I really enjoyed the picture of the rustic, rundown house, damommy. I liked how you pressed the point that it was indeed rundown and nobody lived there anymore. Very well done and greatly enjoyed.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2021
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Thank you so much. I'm glad you like it. it just sort of came out of nowhere today. 8-)
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You are most welcome, Yvonne. Sometimes when things just come out of nowhere, then they are even more enjoyed.
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It seems that way. Thank you.
