He Never Called Again
A humorous haiku11 total reviews
Comment from karenina
LOL! Easy peasy to see why this was the contest winner! Talk about "something magic in the air" when two lovers kiss! I pretty much managed not to spit out my tea! So funny!
Karenina
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2022
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LOL! Easy peasy to see why this was the contest winner! Talk about "something magic in the air" when two lovers kiss! I pretty much managed not to spit out my tea! So funny!
Karenina
Comment Written 07-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2022
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I'm glad you got a laugh from this silly poem. Thank you for your kind review!
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"Silly" is sometimes just what the doctor ordered!
:)
Comment from juliaSjames
I have to say I'm not much for this kind of humour ( although I hear it every day from my grandkids LOL)..But this is an absolutely brilliant example of a senyru with its amusing contrast between high romance and the basic earthiness of our human nature. Do google Prune Juice because you might like to join that community that specializes in writing senryu.
Congratulations on your contest win.
Stay safe and blessed
Julia
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2021
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I have to say I'm not much for this kind of humour ( although I hear it every day from my grandkids LOL)..But this is an absolutely brilliant example of a senyru with its amusing contrast between high romance and the basic earthiness of our human nature. Do google Prune Juice because you might like to join that community that specializes in writing senryu.
Congratulations on your contest win.
Stay safe and blessed
Julia
Comment Written 10-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2021
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Thank you very much for the exceptional rating and the kind review! I will definitely take your advice and look up Prune Juice...sounds like my type of community. :) I hope your holidays are happy.
Warm wishes!
Comment from dragonpoet
This is a witty poem. But I don't think farting in response to a kiss is a reason not to continue a relationship. You can't control when your body decides to release extra gas. Though it is embarrassing for both parties.
Keep writng and stay healthy
Happy Holidays.
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2021
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This is a witty poem. But I don't think farting in response to a kiss is a reason not to continue a relationship. You can't control when your body decides to release extra gas. Though it is embarrassing for both parties.
Keep writng and stay healthy
Happy Holidays.
dragonpoet
Comment Written 10-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2021
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I appreciate your review and excellent rating! I agree that farting is no reason to discontinue a relationship. Thank you again, and have a pleasant holiday season!
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You are most kindly welcome, Jenifer.
Joan
Comment from LisaMay
Congratulations! I love the unexpected humour of your poem.
He's not husband material if he can't tolerate a fart. It should be the kiss he notices, not the fart. Who doesn't love a good fart now and then??
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2021
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Congratulations! I love the unexpected humour of your poem.
He's not husband material if he can't tolerate a fart. It should be the kiss he notices, not the fart. Who doesn't love a good fart now and then??
Comment Written 10-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and excellent rating! I agree the character in the poem isn't husband material. My husband and I are comfortable enough with one another not to let silly things like that bother us. <3 I hope your holidays are bright and merry!
Comment from Contests
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2021
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 A contest winning entry! A seven star rating from the Contest Committee for posting the winning contest entry. |
Comment Written 10-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2021
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Thank you to everyone who took the time to read and rate my poem. This was my first time submitting a poem in a contest, and I didn't know what to expect from this website or the reviewing process. I was pleased to receive helpful and valuable feedback, and I fell in love with this community's kindness and developmental mindset. I appreciate all of you, and I look forward to returning the gift of meaningful feedback to you.
Warm wishes,
Jeni
Comment from Lloyd T. Okoko
You succeeded in making me laugh at the mention of the word "farted."
The objective correlative of your work reminisces a stalemated love affair occasioned by the farting of the female partner in the duo.
The work highlights how pleasurable it all went until the farting came to spoil it all.
The work earns its texture through its strict compliance of the 5-7-5 syllables count specified for the contest. And more so, its humorous ending.
Excellent work. Bravo.
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2021
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You succeeded in making me laugh at the mention of the word "farted."
The objective correlative of your work reminisces a stalemated love affair occasioned by the farting of the female partner in the duo.
The work highlights how pleasurable it all went until the farting came to spoil it all.
The work earns its texture through its strict compliance of the 5-7-5 syllables count specified for the contest. And more so, its humorous ending.
Excellent work. Bravo.
Comment Written 30-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2021
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Thank you very much! I appreciate the feedback.
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Remain Blessed.
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Thank you very much for your review!
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Remain Blessed.
Comment from Earl Corp
I'm not a haiku fan but this one is hilarious. I hope it's not biographical. Very nice job. Good luck in the contest. Have a blessed holiday season. Stay safe and stay healthy.
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2021
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I'm not a haiku fan but this one is hilarious. I hope it's not biographical. Very nice job. Good luck in the contest. Have a blessed holiday season. Stay safe and stay healthy.
Comment Written 30-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2021
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Thank you! Fortunately, it is not biographical--just a fear I used to have when dating my husband. Take care!
Comment from Terry Broxson
I believe this is the first funny haiku I have read. If it is not then surely it is the funniest. No way I saw the last line coming. An excellent entry into this contest, good luck. Good job.
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2021
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I believe this is the first funny haiku I have read. If it is not then surely it is the funniest. No way I saw the last line coming. An excellent entry into this contest, good luck. Good job.
Comment Written 30-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2021
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Thank you very much!
Comment from Sherry Asbury
Oh, you people will do anything to win, LOL - this is funny as can be and written well within the parameters of the contest. Good luck to you!!
I will laugh all night and tell everyone I know.
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reply by the author on 30-Nov-2021
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Oh, you people will do anything to win, LOL - this is funny as can be and written well within the parameters of the contest. Good luck to you!!
I will laugh all night and tell everyone I know.
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 30-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2021
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Thank you! I've always been a sucker for fart jokes.
Comment from Taminang Therese N
Hahaha! The farting just spoiled the show. If there was true love I think that would have just been fun. Thanks for saying much in a few words. I love the fun. Success in the contest.
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2021
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Hahaha! The farting just spoiled the show. If there was true love I think that would have just been fun. Thanks for saying much in a few words. I love the fun. Success in the contest.
Comment Written 30-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2021
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Thank you! I agree that a true love scenario would have had a happy ending. As much as we want to, we can't always control our bodies. :D
