Monster Mortuary
Interview With the Funeral Director7 total reviews
Comment from AliMom
What a cool concept, a monster mortuary. I liked your story and the character descriptions. Poor Mrs. Kim. The circumstances of her husband's death seem altogether peculiar. The irony of Mrs. Kim going through the motions of preparing for her husband's final arrangements only to have him served up for dinner downstairs is funny. Creepy.
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2021
What a cool concept, a monster mortuary. I liked your story and the character descriptions. Poor Mrs. Kim. The circumstances of her husband's death seem altogether peculiar. The irony of Mrs. Kim going through the motions of preparing for her husband's final arrangements only to have him served up for dinner downstairs is funny. Creepy.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2021
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Thank you and I'm glad you enjoyed it! I have plans to expand the story and many more characters to introduce... and a revolving door of new clients to meet! There will certainly be an accidental turning of a human into a vampire at some point. I've truly appreciated all of the feedback will hopefully post more as I have it ready!
Have a wonderful day!
~Christine
Comment from Liz O'Neill
This is a fun metaphor: "At that, she dissolved into a new orchestra of sobs." This is a curious concept. It will get the reader wondering and definitely drawn in: " life AFTER life-" This is great tongue-in-cheek gallows humor: "gurney to table, so to speak." It's my favorite kind of humor.
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2021
This is a fun metaphor: "At that, she dissolved into a new orchestra of sobs." This is a curious concept. It will get the reader wondering and definitely drawn in: " life AFTER life-" This is great tongue-in-cheek gallows humor: "gurney to table, so to speak." It's my favorite kind of humor.
Comment Written 01-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2021
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Thank you for taking the time to read and comment! It is always so helpful to know what others specifically like or what works well, especially when it comes to humor! Hope you have a great day!
~Christine
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you are welcome
Comment from Wendy G
Creepy and gory, and plenty of tension - all just as you intended! A well written story, not too long, but with sufficient words to have some clever wit. Good entry for the contest, so sending best wishes.
Wendy
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2021
Creepy and gory, and plenty of tension - all just as you intended! A well written story, not too long, but with sufficient words to have some clever wit. Good entry for the contest, so sending best wishes.
Wendy
Comment Written 30-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2021
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Thank you so much for taking the time to read and comment! I have truly appreciated all of the feedback! :D Have a great day!
~Christine
Comment from amahra
I found this really haunting and well-written. You did the one thing great writers always do, this is to give your readers a fantastic first-line or great line in the first paragraph--like the one below.
and all he could think about was how delicious her husband was going to taste. [this line really pulled me into the story and kept me there.]
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2021
I found this really haunting and well-written. You did the one thing great writers always do, this is to give your readers a fantastic first-line or great line in the first paragraph--like the one below.
and all he could think about was how delicious her husband was going to taste. [this line really pulled me into the story and kept me there.]
Comment Written 30-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2021
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Thank you for reading and your feedback is both helpful and appreciated! I want to eventually make this into at least a short novel, so your enthusiasm is much appreciated :D
Comment from Jumbo J
Hi Crember,
firstly I loved your story and was waiting for the punchline at the end... you know about enjoying Korean food and all after so long, but I guess I may be politically incorrect?
Okay, you kept it in the realm of a decent banquet burial death which in itself is good writing.
Hope is, that you rock this contest... as I said I enjoyed your writing and style.
Considerations
work *and* he had forgotten, *and* so he ran right... Don't think you need both of these and's? Hmmmm, wondering on the deserved, opposed to the deserves?
But in all, there's nothing to work here, all the hard lifting has been completed.
With our thoughts we create...
a banquet of desire.
Kind regards,
James.
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2021
Hi Crember,
firstly I loved your story and was waiting for the punchline at the end... you know about enjoying Korean food and all after so long, but I guess I may be politically incorrect?
Okay, you kept it in the realm of a decent banquet burial death which in itself is good writing.
Hope is, that you rock this contest... as I said I enjoyed your writing and style.
Considerations
work *and* he had forgotten, *and* so he ran right... Don't think you need both of these and's? Hmmmm, wondering on the deserved, opposed to the deserves?
But in all, there's nothing to work here, all the hard lifting has been completed.
With our thoughts we create...
a banquet of desire.
Kind regards,
James.
Comment Written 29-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2021
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Hahaha! Omg, that suggestion made me laugh too hard. It never even crossed my mind XD.
Thank you so much for reading, and I actually like both of your grammatical suggestions and took them!
Have a great day!
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Enjoyed the read and story. I will be looking forward to seeing and reading what your wonderful mind concocts in your next effort. You have a great day also!
Comment from Cecil Beckett
Nice job. Your story starts off strongly with a great first paragraph. I liked the line 'dissolved into a new orchestra of sobs" . Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2021
Nice job. Your story starts off strongly with a great first paragraph. I liked the line 'dissolved into a new orchestra of sobs" . Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 29-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2021
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Thank you so much for reading and taking the time to comment. I'm glad you enjoyed that, and thank you for highlighting what you enjoyed, it's very helpful! <3
Comment from Sherry Asbury
)))hhh icky - and just in time for me to fix supper! What a great concept and the book sounds tantalizing and I have a big jar of steak sauce if you need it. Please remove teeth as they get stuck in my dentures! Crafty story - best of luck to you in the contest!! Bibs optional...
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2021
)))hhh icky - and just in time for me to fix supper! What a great concept and the book sounds tantalizing and I have a big jar of steak sauce if you need it. Please remove teeth as they get stuck in my dentures! Crafty story - best of luck to you in the contest!! Bibs optional...
Comment Written 29-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2021
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Thank you so much for reading and commenting. Your review is wonderful and refreshing, as I am a huge fan of tongue and cheek/sarcasm lol! I'll be checking out your stuff for sure because I have a feeling I'll love it!