A Request
Asking God for an extension44 total reviews
Comment from Alma Barkman
Beautifully written! Your rhyme scheme and meter are flawless. It seems meter is tricky for some poets.
You express the hope of many of us for having time to right our wrongs.
Thank you.
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2021
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Beautifully written! Your rhyme scheme and meter are flawless. It seems meter is tricky for some poets.
You express the hope of many of us for having time to right our wrongs.
Thank you.
Comment Written 05-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2021
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Thanks, Alma. Most of us need quite a bit more time.
Comment from Bill Schott
This spiritual poem, A Request, has a good set up and finds that the soul saved by grace realizes that there were more days lost than left. Time is now of the essence for all those with whom this man may come in contact.
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2021
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This spiritual poem, A Request, has a good set up and finds that the soul saved by grace realizes that there were more days lost than left. Time is now of the essence for all those with whom this man may come in contact.
Comment Written 05-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2021
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Thanks, Bill. I've got my request in.
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Paul Mcfarland,
Nice piece of poetry having smooth flow throughout from the beginning to the end with lovely rhyming scheme, and beautifully depicting your humanitarian appeal to God with the hope that it will be granted. .
The last stanza is particularly noteworthy.
Good Luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2021
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Hello Paul Mcfarland,
Nice piece of poetry having smooth flow throughout from the beginning to the end with lovely rhyming scheme, and beautifully depicting your humanitarian appeal to God with the hope that it will be granted. .
The last stanza is particularly noteworthy.
Good Luck in the contest.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2021
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Thanks for the review. I'm waiting on my appeal.
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Hi Friend, Most Welcome!
With best wishes,
~ RP
Comment from Michele Harber
What a lovely poem, and what a worthy entry in the "My Faith Poetry" contest. The requests you make in the poem sound very genuine and heartfelt. I particularly enjoyed the last verse, where you allowed for the possibility of making amends and ending your life proud of what you've accomplished.
Your poem flows beautifully, and your rhymes work very well.
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2021
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What a lovely poem, and what a worthy entry in the "My Faith Poetry" contest. The requests you make in the poem sound very genuine and heartfelt. I particularly enjoyed the last verse, where you allowed for the possibility of making amends and ending your life proud of what you've accomplished.
Your poem flows beautifully, and your rhymes work very well.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2021
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Thanks, Michele. I don't know if I will ever have a clear conscience.
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I suspect we?re given a pass on a few mistakes as long as we learn from them.
Comment from lyenochka
Loved your humble, earnest prayer. It contains a confession that we all have - that we could have done some wrong to Him and others and the asking to make amends during this life is a great one. Thanks for sharing and best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2021
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Loved your humble, earnest prayer. It contains a confession that we all have - that we could have done some wrong to Him and others and the asking to make amends during this life is a great one. Thanks for sharing and best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 01-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2021
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Thanks, Helen. Good to hear from you.
Comment from Sugarray77
I loved reading this verse with its theme that we all can readily relate to and understand. Thanks for sharing this verse that has so much meaning. So well done, good luck in the contest.
Melissa
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2021
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I loved reading this verse with its theme that we all can readily relate to and understand. Thanks for sharing this verse that has so much meaning. So well done, good luck in the contest.
Melissa
Comment Written 01-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2021
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Thanks, Melissa. Always love to share.
Comment from phil nelson
Although I am not a fan of most spiritual poetry, this struck a great resonance with me. The message is succinct without being maudlin, and your rhyme and rhythm are excellent. I'm not sure that you really need to capitalize each line, but it certainly does no harm. A most enjoyable entry and good luck in the contest!
All the Best!
Phil
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2021
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Although I am not a fan of most spiritual poetry, this struck a great resonance with me. The message is succinct without being maudlin, and your rhyme and rhythm are excellent. I'm not sure that you really need to capitalize each line, but it certainly does no harm. A most enjoyable entry and good luck in the contest!
All the Best!
Phil
Comment Written 01-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2021
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Thanks, Phil. Glad it grabbed you.
Comment from Patty Palmer
I feel this poem deserves a six star review because the feelings you convey to the Lord are the same feelings that many ask the Lord for. The problem is that we know when we are disobeying that our number could come up at any minute. It can happen in the blink of an eye when so we really should be ready for when it happens. When the rapture comes, no one will get a second chance.
Patty
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2021
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I feel this poem deserves a six star review because the feelings you convey to the Lord are the same feelings that many ask the Lord for. The problem is that we know when we are disobeying that our number could come up at any minute. It can happen in the blink of an eye when so we really should be ready for when it happens. When the rapture comes, no one will get a second chance.
Patty
Comment Written 01-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2021
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Thanks, Patty. One of the hazards of being human.
Comment from Boogienights
This is very beautiful and genuine, I really feel the passion in your words. I hope you live for many years more, to accomplish your goal, and then ascend to heaven with a peaceful heart. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2021
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This is very beautiful and genuine, I really feel the passion in your words. I hope you live for many years more, to accomplish your goal, and then ascend to heaven with a peaceful heart. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 01-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2021
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Thanks for the review. I'll need to live quite a few years to take care of all my misdeeds.
Comment from Aprelle Johnson
This was very interesting I found the writing to be great and it drove me deeper into the poem. like all good poems this incited emotion and thought and I really did enjoy reading it
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2021
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This was very interesting I found the writing to be great and it drove me deeper into the poem. like all good poems this incited emotion and thought and I really did enjoy reading it
Comment Written 01-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2021
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Thanks, Aprelle. It's good to get deep into a poem, as long as it doesn't get over your head.
