Pondering
A Barbee poem25 total reviews
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this club entry with us. It make one wondering. I have a habit of spending too much on clothes. Now, that I retired I'm trying not to do it, because I really don't need any more clothes. LOL I enjoyed reading.
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2021
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Thank you for sharing this club entry with us. It make one wondering. I have a habit of spending too much on clothes. Now, that I retired I'm trying not to do it, because I really don't need any more clothes. LOL I enjoyed reading.
Comment Written 26-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2021
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Thank you, Barbara. Fortunately for my budget, I hate to shop. lol. As you said, I really have all the clothes I need now.
Comment from Pantygynt
You have caught the double rhyme scheme really well and the 'E' shape of the whole though once again the description of the form is incorrect, but this. of course is not your fault. It is true the form is designed fir iambic metre but there are are longer and shorter lines so it is incorrectly described as being designed for IAMBIC PENTAMETER because there are those four shorter lines of iambic trimeter.
I presume you are working from an example when you put those trimetric lines in.
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2021
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You have caught the double rhyme scheme really well and the 'E' shape of the whole though once again the description of the form is incorrect, but this. of course is not your fault. It is true the form is designed fir iambic metre but there are are longer and shorter lines so it is incorrectly described as being designed for IAMBIC PENTAMETER because there are those four shorter lines of iambic trimeter.
I presume you are working from an example when you put those trimetric lines in.
Comment Written 26-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2021
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Yep, that's what I did. I went by the instructions and the example. Thanks for reviewing.
Comment from Dawn Munro
What a marvelous format for poetry my friend, and how beautifully you have used it! This one has to be added to my (crowded) bookcase Yvonne, although I can't imagine doing more than reading it many times for pure pleasure. The alliteration is so unforced, the imagery so real... *sigh* A true delight!
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2021
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What a marvelous format for poetry my friend, and how beautifully you have used it! This one has to be added to my (crowded) bookcase Yvonne, although I can't imagine doing more than reading it many times for pure pleasure. The alliteration is so unforced, the imagery so real... *sigh* A true delight!
Comment Written 26-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2021
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Oh, wow, Dawn. Thank you so much.
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My pleasure!
Comment from Janice Canerdy
This is my first time to hear of this creative style of poetry. I like the way the poem flows from the breeze coming through the window to the dress.
The rationalizing of the buying of the new dress is amusing and lighthearted.
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2021
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This is my first time to hear of this creative style of poetry. I like the way the poem flows from the breeze coming through the window to the dress.
The rationalizing of the buying of the new dress is amusing and lighthearted.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2021
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Thank you. This form was quite a challenge for the old gray matter. lol.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a great job with this complex style, Yvonne. I enjoyed reading it. Your image choice is perfect for someone, anyone who is pondering anything. Your words are well chosen and create great imagery. I could see one sitting in a chair after looking through her closet. While she is pondering the choices for the black dress, the breeze blows through the open window. I believe too many but on the spur of the moment without really pondering if or how they will or will not need what they end up buying. You did a great job with your internal rhymes esp with bequeathing and wreath.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2021
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You did a great job with this complex style, Yvonne. I enjoyed reading it. Your image choice is perfect for someone, anyone who is pondering anything. Your words are well chosen and create great imagery. I could see one sitting in a chair after looking through her closet. While she is pondering the choices for the black dress, the breeze blows through the open window. I believe too many but on the spur of the moment without really pondering if or how they will or will not need what they end up buying. You did a great job with your internal rhymes esp with bequeathing and wreath.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 25-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2021
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Wow! Thank you so much. This was quite a challenge for this old tired brain, but it was fun! Thank you for the lovely comments.
Comment from LateBloomer
Hello Yvonne, Pondering ... if we were to really stop and "ponder" why we buy what we buy, the reasons would be vast and wide. Y, I enjoyed reading your poem. You are very talented. I especially liked:
The frilly curtains flutter on the sill,
(good imagery--I can see it.)
Also:
few kings spend what you do on shopping flings.
(Good twist at the end)
This poem made me smile. Silky rhyming. Good sillhouette artwork.
Keep the blue waters flowing. LateBloomer
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2021
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Hello Yvonne, Pondering ... if we were to really stop and "ponder" why we buy what we buy, the reasons would be vast and wide. Y, I enjoyed reading your poem. You are very talented. I especially liked:
The frilly curtains flutter on the sill,
(good imagery--I can see it.)
Also:
few kings spend what you do on shopping flings.
(Good twist at the end)
This poem made me smile. Silky rhyming. Good sillhouette artwork.
Keep the blue waters flowing. LateBloomer
Comment Written 25-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2021
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Thank you. I'm so glad you like those lines. Thank you for the compliment, too.
I'm not much of a shopper myself. I hate shopping for clothes. I bring them home to try them on. lol.
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
' Pondering ' , is an extremely well-written and delightfully descriptive piece. Penned with craft and skill. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. I look forward to seeing your next post.
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2021
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' Pondering ' , is an extremely well-written and delightfully descriptive piece. Penned with craft and skill. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. I look forward to seeing your next post.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2021
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Thank you.
Comment from Paul McFarland
You guys are killing me with all these new forms. I thought things started out on a serious note, but the last line brought in the humor. Well done as usual.
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2021
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You guys are killing me with all these new forms. I thought things started out on a serious note, but the last line brought in the humor. Well done as usual.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2021
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Thank you. This was a tricky form, and certainly challenging for the old gray matter. lol.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice artwork and
presentation.
-I recall seeing this form
when I was browsing one day.
-You did a good job with it,
and I like your topic.
-Effective imagery and rhyme.
-I like the nature imagery in
the opening lines, and they
seem to lead you to pondering.
-I like how you conclude the poem
thinking about "buying what you
don't need," and a very good
point in the last line.
-Well done.
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2021
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-Nice artwork and
presentation.
-I recall seeing this form
when I was browsing one day.
-You did a good job with it,
and I like your topic.
-Effective imagery and rhyme.
-I like the nature imagery in
the opening lines, and they
seem to lead you to pondering.
-I like how you conclude the poem
thinking about "buying what you
don't need," and a very good
point in the last line.
-Well done.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2021
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Thank you. This form was quite a workout for the old gray matter. lol.
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You are welcome. It did seem complicated!
Comment from judiverse
Keep the black sheath if it fits. You can do so much with it--add on jewelry, scarves, jackets. Yes, we can spend a lot on clothes. Mine are gently worn, so they last for a long time, but I get tired of them and buy new stuff. I lve the atmosphere in this. It appears the weather is changing, which indicates a new season. Naturally, new clothes are indicated. Great work with your rhyme in this. Sounds pretty tricky to accomplish. judi
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2021
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Keep the black sheath if it fits. You can do so much with it--add on jewelry, scarves, jackets. Yes, we can spend a lot on clothes. Mine are gently worn, so they last for a long time, but I get tired of them and buy new stuff. I lve the atmosphere in this. It appears the weather is changing, which indicates a new season. Naturally, new clothes are indicated. Great work with your rhyme in this. Sounds pretty tricky to accomplish. judi
Comment Written 25-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2021
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Thank you. My clothes last a long time, too, and I don't go as much as I used to, either. This form was a real workout for my brain, I can tell you.
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You're welcome. You did a great job with the form. I go off in various directions so don't spend so much time on these new poetry forms I'm seeing. judi
