My Brother is Back in Town
John is Discharged from the Army15 total reviews
Comment from Alaskastory
My Brother is Back in Town is a fun on-going with brother John. You have a special way of having his personality (and father's) come out in conversation and their reactions.
error: "....caught the train to move(to) Dallas."
space: "He handed()me a railroad pass..."
word: "...and I was about (to)give you a call."
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2021
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My Brother is Back in Town is a fun on-going with brother John. You have a special way of having his personality (and father's) come out in conversation and their reactions.
error: "....caught the train to move(to) Dallas."
space: "He handed()me a railroad pass..."
word: "...and I was about (to)give you a call."
Comment Written 22-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2021
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Corrections have been made!!! Thank you so much for taking the time to point them out. Have a great Holiday. ann
Comment from lancellot
This is a well written. Nice travel down memory lane in the past.
notes:
I asked, "Kennedy who? Where?(") In our neighborhood?"
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"They have taken him to Parkland. No, he's not okay. You don't have a TV?" {She asked} incredulously.
- she asked
He handed {a} a railroad pass and $50 just minutes before the train was to leave the station there in Alexandria.
- me
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2021
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This is a well written. Nice travel down memory lane in the past.
notes:
I asked, "Kennedy who? Where?(") In our neighborhood?"
-remove
"They have taken him to Parkland. No, he's not okay. You don't have a TV?" {She asked} incredulously.
- she asked
He handed {a} a railroad pass and $50 just minutes before the train was to leave the station there in Alexandria.
- me
Comment Written 22-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2021
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As always, I appreciate the notes and time given to my work. Thanks. ann
Comment from royowen
It's funny reading your story, it's funny how you remember things from when one was younger, my dad's been long gone, and your story reminds me of him. I've been to Dallas, in transit to New York, and I remember the shocking Kennedy assassination, optimism died that day. Beautifully written, blessings Roy
Typo: I caught the train to move (to) Dallas. 2: He handed (me a) a railroad pass
3 : hey boy, didn't know you were (in) town.
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2021
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It's funny reading your story, it's funny how you remember things from when one was younger, my dad's been long gone, and your story reminds me of him. I've been to Dallas, in transit to New York, and I remember the shocking Kennedy assassination, optimism died that day. Beautifully written, blessings Roy
Typo: I caught the train to move (to) Dallas. 2: He handed (me a) a railroad pass
3 : hey boy, didn't know you were (in) town.
Comment Written 22-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2021
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i really, really appreciate the spag corrections. I am so bad at that! I can read it a half-dozen times and not see them all. thanks. ann
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Comment from Terry Broxson
You posted this on the 58th anniversary of the Kennedy Assignation. I remember it well also. I was a senior in high school, and in geometry class. Mr. Hines our principle played the radio news on the loud speakers and then dismissed classes at 2:00 pm. Oddly, our football game that night was not canceled. Another good job!
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reply by the author on 22-Nov-2021
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You posted this on the 58th anniversary of the Kennedy Assignation. I remember it well also. I was a senior in high school, and in geometry class. Mr. Hines our principle played the radio news on the loud speakers and then dismissed classes at 2:00 pm. Oddly, our football game that night was not canceled. Another good job!
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Comment Written 22-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2021
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Thanks, Terry. I have decided I am going to do the book we discussed briefly. I'll need lots of pointers. My favorite Southern writer is Rick Bragg. I enjoyed all of his books, but especially 'It's all over, but the shoutin". Do you like him?
Well, of course, they did not cancel the football. Some things are just too important! lol
Talk later. ann
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Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This Biographical Non-Fiction or Essay speaks about your brother John is discharged from the army, he is back in town, stayed your house; well said, well done, thanks 4 sharing this and nice reviewing this legible post on white background, post more, fast, time is limited, precious, rare (good) gift, I, DR, wrote 114 books, R 123300/N21. ALCREATOR
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reply by the author on 22-Nov-2021
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This Biographical Non-Fiction or Essay speaks about your brother John is discharged from the army, he is back in town, stayed your house; well said, well done, thanks 4 sharing this and nice reviewing this legible post on white background, post more, fast, time is limited, precious, rare (good) gift, I, DR, wrote 114 books, R 123300/N21. ALCREATOR
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Comment Written 22-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2021
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Did you happen to read the post prior to this one: Life is All About Change? I talked about the day John left to join the military. Thanks for your comments and your time. ann
