My Brother is Back in Town
John is Discharged from the Army15 total reviews
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Wonderful story--vivid incorporation of the assassination--as you point out, "normal" life resumes--charming depiction of your non-sentimental father and your reuinion with John. Looking forward to more!
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2021
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Wonderful story--vivid incorporation of the assassination--as you point out, "normal" life resumes--charming depiction of your non-sentimental father and your reuinion with John. Looking forward to more!
Comment Written 26-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2021
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There is more to come! Thanks so very much for your kind words and your time in reading my work. ann
Comment from lauralumummu
I wanted to hear more. I loved your story! I was 10 when Kennedy was shot but I still remember it as well. In Canada, we all felt it as well. Thanks for sharing such an interesting story. All the best, Laura.
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2021
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I wanted to hear more. I loved your story! I was 10 when Kennedy was shot but I still remember it as well. In Canada, we all felt it as well. Thanks for sharing such an interesting story. All the best, Laura.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2021
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Thank you for reading and commenting. More is coming! ann
Comment from RGstar
Once again, I really like reading your postings.
I came across today to the book side, and knew I would not be disappointed.
Down to earth and totally relaxed, it is like watching in real time, daring anyone to interrupt.
Well done.
My best wishes.
RGstar
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2021
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Once again, I really like reading your postings.
I came across today to the book side, and knew I would not be disappointed.
Down to earth and totally relaxed, it is like watching in real time, daring anyone to interrupt.
Well done.
My best wishes.
RGstar
Comment Written 25-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2021
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Thank you very much! ann
Comment from prettybluebirds
You mentioned this story to me so I thought I would read it and see what it had to say. I'm so glad your brother returned to you in one piece as so many didn't in those times. I like your stories but wish you would write some descriptive phrases about you and your brother so I can get a more complete picture of your family in my mind.
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2021
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You mentioned this story to me so I thought I would read it and see what it had to say. I'm so glad your brother returned to you in one piece as so many didn't in those times. I like your stories but wish you would write some descriptive phrases about you and your brother so I can get a more complete picture of your family in my mind.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2021
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I will do that!. I plan to begin using more photos to go along with the stories. Thanks for reading and for commenting.
ann
Comment from Soledadpaz
Yeager, like Chuck Yeager? He was one brave guy.
I was a little too young to remember Jack's death, but I do remember Bobby's. So sad, but they touched many, my mom had a picture of the two of them on our living room wall, right next to Jesus. It was the power of the Kennedy's, they made the people feel heard.
How fortuitous that your brother was discharged right at that time, before Vietnam got going. I hope he stayed home. And how lucky you were to have had him home with you for a time. The fact that you were extremely close comes shining through.
Sol
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2021
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Yeager, like Chuck Yeager? He was one brave guy.
I was a little too young to remember Jack's death, but I do remember Bobby's. So sad, but they touched many, my mom had a picture of the two of them on our living room wall, right next to Jesus. It was the power of the Kennedy's, they made the people feel heard.
How fortuitous that your brother was discharged right at that time, before Vietnam got going. I hope he stayed home. And how lucky you were to have had him home with you for a time. The fact that you were extremely close comes shining through.
Sol
Comment Written 24-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2021
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Chuck Yeager is actually my family tree, I think -- not exactly sure how or the relationship, just know I have family members who have said that for years! Thank you for reading and commenting. ann
Comment from Tpa
Excellent story. I remembered the assassination, a very dreadful time for the country. I was glad your brother made it home and got to see his niece.
Some suggestions to offer:
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brother, and
squeaking (try SKIMMING)
sort, and
afternoon, I was
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2021
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Excellent story. I remembered the assassination, a very dreadful time for the country. I was glad your brother made it home and got to see his niece.
Some suggestions to offer:
basis, and(omit)
brother, and
squeaking (try SKIMMING)
sort, and
afternoon, I was
Comment Written 23-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2021
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Thanks for the writing improvement suggestions. I appreciate them. Have a great Thanksgiving. ann
Comment from Pbeeandjay
Great cadence, good feel to the story. I felt the closeness of family and acceptance of each as they are.
I would suggest "...he tried to keep the call as short as possible. I recalled his last words to me before I left home. He handed me a railroad pass and $50 just minutes before heading to Dallas, and said..."
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2021
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Great cadence, good feel to the story. I felt the closeness of family and acceptance of each as they are.
I would suggest "...he tried to keep the call as short as possible. I recalled his last words to me before I left home. He handed me a railroad pass and $50 just minutes before heading to Dallas, and said..."
Comment Written 23-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2021
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Thank you for your kind words and for the suggestion. I really appreciate reviewers who offer corrections and/or suggestions. ann
Comment from Susan Newell
I continue to delight in your beautifully told remembrances of your life and family. I know you are a meticulous writer, so I have made a few proofing notes below. Wonderful story, well told.
in the back yard -- This is how I always wrote it, believing backyard was an adjective. However, I learned that backyard is a compound noun as well. For the life of me, I don't know why the same isn't true for front yard. The same applies to backseat and front seat.
I asked, "Kennedy who? Where?" In our neighborhood?" -- extraneous " after Where?
Remember, your name is 'Yeager'. ==> The rule is punctuation always goes inside the quotation marks. (Not what I was originally taught.)
I was about give you a call." -- missing "to"
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2021
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I continue to delight in your beautifully told remembrances of your life and family. I know you are a meticulous writer, so I have made a few proofing notes below. Wonderful story, well told.
in the back yard -- This is how I always wrote it, believing backyard was an adjective. However, I learned that backyard is a compound noun as well. For the life of me, I don't know why the same isn't true for front yard. The same applies to backseat and front seat.
I asked, "Kennedy who? Where?" In our neighborhood?" -- extraneous " after Where?
Remember, your name is 'Yeager'. ==> The rule is punctuation always goes inside the quotation marks. (Not what I was originally taught.)
I was about give you a call." -- missing "to"
Comment Written 23-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2021
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I look forward to your reviews because they are always helpful in improving work. thank you. ann
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You are welcome.
Comment from Wendy G
I think everyone throughout the western world remembers the moment they heard about Kennedy's assassination! World-changing event. The story of your life and your brother's home-coming is interesting, and brings back memories of those long-distance calls (and their expense!) ...
Wendy
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2021
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I think everyone throughout the western world remembers the moment they heard about Kennedy's assassination! World-changing event. The story of your life and your brother's home-coming is interesting, and brings back memories of those long-distance calls (and their expense!) ...
Wendy
Comment Written 23-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2021
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Thank you, Wendy for reading and commenting. ann
Comment from Judy Lawless
This is another great story from your life, Ann. Even in Canada time stopped when we heard the news about JFK. I was in elementary school then at the age of thirteen. I also recall the times for discounted long-distance calls. I look forward to hearing what happened when your brother went to visit you.
A couple of things in these two paragraphs:
"I recalled his last words to me when I caught the train to move (to) Dallas."
"He handed//me a railroad pass and $50 just minutes before I caught the train (to leave) there in Alexandria to leave for Dallas.." - remove these words and keep the ones before "for Dallas)
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2021
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This is another great story from your life, Ann. Even in Canada time stopped when we heard the news about JFK. I was in elementary school then at the age of thirteen. I also recall the times for discounted long-distance calls. I look forward to hearing what happened when your brother went to visit you.
A couple of things in these two paragraphs:
"I recalled his last words to me when I caught the train to move (to) Dallas."
"He handed//me a railroad pass and $50 just minutes before I caught the train (to leave) there in Alexandria to leave for Dallas.." - remove these words and keep the ones before "for Dallas)
Comment Written 22-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2021
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Corrections have been made as indicated. Thank you so much for your help and direction. ann
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You?re most welcome
