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Best Meal of the Day

A quick story of how life can change.

10 total reviews 
Comment from LJbutterfly
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This flash fiction story dribbles from fresh eggs, bacon and coffee in the morning, to death before the first bite. We don't know who she is, if she is a parent, wife, or child. All we know is that life has left her eyes. This story is short, but very imaginative. Best wishes in the contest.

 Comment Written 26-Nov-2021

Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
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Brilliant work in brief form. Stunning segue from the mundane to the dreaded realization. The oxymoronic closer is ingenious--the end indeed begins--life as we know it will forever be divided into before and after a momentous event. This may be a winner.

 Comment Written 26-Nov-2021

Comment from pookietoo
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A nice entry for the dribble flash entry contest. Keep up the great job writing your poetry. Good luck in the contest. Have a wonderful day after Thanksgiving.

 Comment Written 26-Nov-2021

Comment from RGstar
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This sounds so similar to one I have read before, yet the ending had a different twist. Good to read some of these. Light hearted and something to start the day with.
God luck with this.
Bets wishes.
RGstar

 Comment Written 25-Nov-2021

Comment from Judy Lawless
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You've done an excellent job of conveying how life can change so quickly and unexpectantly, Terrence. We just never know what tomorrow may bring, especially as we age. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 25-Nov-2021

Comment from prettybluebirds
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Yes, your world can change in a heartbeat. One minute things can be great and the next, pow! This is nicely done and should do well in the contest. No errors that I can see. I wish you a whole world of luck in the contest. Great work.

 Comment Written 23-Nov-2021

Comment from jwsteele
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I enter the room in time to see the last flicker of life leave her eyes

This paragraph has a lot of power. It's creates a startling image. Such a tragedy to face in the morning, or anytime. This paragraph has a lot of power.

 Comment Written 23-Nov-2021

Comment from LisaMay
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It sure will be the best meal of the day for you - you'll get a double helping! But on a more serious note - this is a highly dramatic little story, with its quick change from a scene of domestic normality and an anticipated nice breakfast together, to facing everything turned on its head with her death. Nothing will be the same again.

 Comment Written 22-Nov-2021

Comment from Linda Liu
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I think the ending is quite surprising because I was not expecting the death of someone from the title Best Meal of the Day. To be honest, I like the contrast from the start to the end. I just don't really understand why it's named Best Meal of the Day.

 Comment Written 21-Nov-2021

Comment from Bill Schott
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This dribble, Best Meal of the Day, is a quick set up for a day which will begin an entirely new reality. Days are all the same until they aren't.

Replace the first comma with a semicolon, and the second comma with a period. Capitalize 'This'.

Happy day.

 Comment Written 21-Nov-2021