Comment from Richard Montfort Cary

Excellent

By God, I love it!!! Might be a tad longer than it needs to be, but I stayed with it and enjoyed it all. Congratulations on squeezing past being sacrilegious (no harm done-- God has an untapped sense of humor!!!), and congrats on the pleasurable rhyming (hard to do, and you did it!!!). Fun. Saucy. Silly (but somehow close to the truth of us idiots running around ruling the world and mucking it up!!!). Thanks for the poem.

 Comment Written 19-Nov-2021

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reply by the author on 20-Nov-2021

Thanks, Richard. I did talk to God about this.

Comment from Raul1

Exceptional

This is very good poetry I have read and it is very creative. I like how you structured. A well done job! Exceptional work! No mistakes found. Good luck in the contest!

 Comment Written 19-Nov-2021

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reply by the author on 20-Nov-2021

Thanks, Raul. I appreciate your scrutiny and kind words.

Comment from Mary Shifman

Excellent

I really like this clever poem. It rhymes well and has an excellent rhythm. I get a sense of the devil's frustration. You did a great job and made me laugh. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 19-Nov-2021

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reply by the author on 20-Nov-2021

Thanks, Mary. I knew you needed a good laugh.

reply by Mary Shifman on 20-Nov-2021

You are welcome and thank you!

Comment from nomi338

Excellent

I really wish that I had six stars, but sadly I do not. This is by far one of the most amusing posts about Mr. McKee that I have read to date. Some of my religious beliefs conflict with certain things mentioned in the poem, but happily I was able to put them aside so that I could read the tongue in cheek laugh out loud funny lines. Thank you so much for this breath of fresh air.

 Comment Written 19-Nov-2021

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reply by the author on 20-Nov-2021

Thanks. I had to put a few things aside, myself.

Comment from bob cullen

Exceptional

A brilliant piece of verse. Long, but wonderfully maintained a light-hearted pace throughout the entire piece. Your humour slides nicely off the page and produces a lovely image of my missing teeth.
You really have enormous talent and I look forward to reading more of your work. Is there anyway I can purchase a copy of your book?
By the way, Fantastic congratulations to you and your wife on 56 years. She must be a saintly woman.

 Comment Written 19-Nov-2021

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reply by the author on 20-Nov-2021

Thanks, Bob. That's a great smile. If you send me twenty dollars, I will send you the book and a buffalo nickel change. My address is

Paul McFarland
448 Youngtown Road
Lincolnville, ME 04849

reply by bob cullen on 21-Nov-2021

Does that include postage, to Australia, I wouldn't want to short change you. Would you accept a bank cheque made out to you in US dollars. By the way my address is:
Robert Cullen
7 Ridge Street
Junee NSW 2663
Australia

reply by the author on 21-Nov-2021

Let me check on the postage to Australia. I'll get back to you.

Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Excellent

The Devil's Dilemma
by Paul McFarland


Hello, Paul,

Interesting humorous rhyming poem. Good entry for the Rhyming Poem contest. The rhymes do not seem forced. Your poem flows well. It presents strong images.

 Comment Written 19-Nov-2021

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reply by the author on 20-Nov-2021

Thanks Gypsy. I thought it might be a little long for you.

Comment from Terry Broxson

Excellent

A very creative poem for this contest, good luck. Give the devil his due, he is trying to make a deal. It would put a whole spin on "A deal with the Devil." I am thinking God was too smart for that or you have a follow up poem in your future. Good job.

 Comment Written 19-Nov-2021

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reply by the author on 20-Nov-2021

Thanks, Terry. I'm working on another one. Don't know how long it will take.

Comment from royowen

Excellent

Poor Satan, he obviously has other plans besides looking after a miscreant drunk and part time gambling philanderer and general sleaze, as if the devil hasn't got enough to with the worlds rulers and weather patterns to keep him amused, and occasionally free to play golf with the saints. Beautifully written, as always a fabulous post a imagination. Well done, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 19-Nov-2021

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reply by the author on 20-Nov-2021

Thanks, Roy. You got that right. The devil is usually pretty busy.

reply by royowen on 20-Nov-2021

Well done

Comment from SimianSavant

Excellent

This is fantastic.

A couple small edits:

One afternoon in Heaven;
**usually I am telling people to use a comma or a semicolon, but in your case, this should be a comma. A semicolon breaks a sentence into two adjoined sentences which must each have a verb, and a noun serving as its direct object. Your sentence here does not have these two pairs, so it must stay connected, with a comma.

*With that evil spawn* is a bit short on syllables. You might wish to extend it to match your meter. But better short than too long.

Thank you for the entertaining read!

 Comment Written 19-Nov-2021

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reply by the author on 20-Nov-2021

Thanks for the review. You are right about the semicolon. The meter that you are referring to is a continuation from the previous line. The poem is written in iambic heptameter with the seven feet being written in two lines.

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

This is an epic and funny story Paul and you amused me with your imaginative write about Pat McKee who seems to have unsettled the Devil with his good deeds. Fun clever near rhymes and a cheeky dialogue made this write very enjoyable, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 19-Nov-2021

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reply by the author on 20-Nov-2021

Thanks, Dolly. Always good to hear from you. I don't know if you will get this response. You've got me muted. I really don't mean to offend you in my reviews. Anything I say is only meant to help.

reply by Dolly'sPoems on 20-Nov-2021

Thank you for your response Paul, you are a bit of a loose cannon, ha ha ha x x x