The Devil's Dilemma
Patrick McKee is back.81 total reviews
Comment from Monica Chaddick
This was absolutely awesome! I thoroughly enjoyed reading this amazing piece of work. The flow is perfect, the rhyme is wonderful. Plus, it is so much fun to read. Best of luck to you!!!
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2021
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This was absolutely awesome! I thoroughly enjoyed reading this amazing piece of work. The flow is perfect, the rhyme is wonderful. Plus, it is so much fun to read. Best of luck to you!!!
Comment Written 21-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2021
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Thanks, Monica. Have you read the other two Patrick McKee poems?
Comment from lauralumummu
This is unique and well-written quirky and humorous as well. My view of heaven is different. If you believe in the finished work on the cross and have Jesus in your heart. you go to heaven hell is for the devil and his demons and unbelievers. No second chances. You are an interesting writer, just hope you will consider making your words a little bigger in the advanced editor, it's hard to read the small print. All the best, Laura
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2021
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This is unique and well-written quirky and humorous as well. My view of heaven is different. If you believe in the finished work on the cross and have Jesus in your heart. you go to heaven hell is for the devil and his demons and unbelievers. No second chances. You are an interesting writer, just hope you will consider making your words a little bigger in the advanced editor, it's hard to read the small print. All the best, Laura
Comment Written 20-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2021
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Thanks, Laura. I tried the advanced editor and had no luck. I'll try again.
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It can be a bit tricky but it is worth it it took we awhile to understand it.
Comment from prettybluebirds
This is terrific, I love it. It is so funny and you gave me my chuckle for the day. I enjoy these rhyming poems as they are so much easier and fun to read. I see this is a contest entry so I wish you all the luck in the world. It should do wonderful.
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2021
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This is terrific, I love it. It is so funny and you gave me my chuckle for the day. I enjoy these rhyming poems as they are so much easier and fun to read. I see this is a contest entry so I wish you all the luck in the world. It should do wonderful.
Comment Written 20-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2021
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Thanks for the review. Have you read the other two Patrick McKee poems?
Comment from Wendy G
A very clever post, a real parody, with excellent wit sprinkled throughout. Poor old Patrick, even the devil doesn't want him - I though he might be sent back to his wife. Very humorous, and well written. Smooth flow and metre, and the rhyme is great too. Best wishes for your entry. A win for Patrick would be something nice for him!
Wendy
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2021
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A very clever post, a real parody, with excellent wit sprinkled throughout. Poor old Patrick, even the devil doesn't want him - I though he might be sent back to his wife. Very humorous, and well written. Smooth flow and metre, and the rhyme is great too. Best wishes for your entry. A win for Patrick would be something nice for him!
Wendy
Comment Written 20-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2021
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Thanks, Wendy. I'm not through with Patrick yet.
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Brilliant! Wickedly witty parody on God and the Devil negotiating as to trading tenants of Heaven and Hell. I recall your other delightful ditties about Patrick--this is a worthy addition to the priceless collection. I peg this as a winner.
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2021
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Brilliant! Wickedly witty parody on God and the Devil negotiating as to trading tenants of Heaven and Hell. I recall your other delightful ditties about Patrick--this is a worthy addition to the priceless collection. I peg this as a winner.
Comment Written 20-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2021
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Thanks, Liz. Hopefully, Patrick will be back in a few weeks.
Comment from LJbutterfly
This is hilarious and very creative. I never would have thought of the devil and God having a conversation, and on a phone, no less. Just when I thought I'd read every kind of subject, you write something totally different. I laughed several times. This sounds like a winner. I wish you the best in the contest.
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2021
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This is hilarious and very creative. I never would have thought of the devil and God having a conversation, and on a phone, no less. Just when I thought I'd read every kind of subject, you write something totally different. I laughed several times. This sounds like a winner. I wish you the best in the contest.
Comment Written 20-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2021
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Thanks, LJ. Glad I could make you laugh.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That was brilliant!! And the winner of the contest, I'm sure. I'm sure God has a sense of humour and would love this if He gets to read it. The poem flows so well, I didn't miss a beat reading it aloud to my husband. It was just such plain, innocent fun and very enjoyable. Well done! Good luck in the contest. :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2021
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That was brilliant!! And the winner of the contest, I'm sure. I'm sure God has a sense of humour and would love this if He gets to read it. The poem flows so well, I didn't miss a beat reading it aloud to my husband. It was just such plain, innocent fun and very enjoyable. Well done! Good luck in the contest. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 20-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2021
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Thanks, Sandra. I did run this by God before I sent it in.
Comment from C. Gale Burnett
I was thinking maybe the devil was going to ask God to resurrect dear Patrick and send him back to his wife.
Paul, I seldom laugh out loud when reading, but I did with this one. I love Patrick, too. He is quite the character; adorable in a way.
There is no way I could tell you my favorite stanza; each stanza was just layer upon layer of excellence, creativity, humor and entertainment. Please keep Patrick coming back :)
Gale
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2021
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I was thinking maybe the devil was going to ask God to resurrect dear Patrick and send him back to his wife.
Paul, I seldom laugh out loud when reading, but I did with this one. I love Patrick, too. He is quite the character; adorable in a way.
There is no way I could tell you my favorite stanza; each stanza was just layer upon layer of excellence, creativity, humor and entertainment. Please keep Patrick coming back :)
Gale
Comment Written 20-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2021
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Thanks, Gale. I'm working on another one.
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Awesome!!
Comment from dragonpoet
Paul,
This story flows will with the abcb rhyme scheme.
This guy sounds like a good person to be in Hell. It is good that he gets on the Satan's nerves. At least something should make his life harder. I like how the both use Hell in there vocabulary. Something you wouldn't think from God. I also like the fact he is trying to show this guy's positives, in that he can play softball well.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2021
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Paul,
This story flows will with the abcb rhyme scheme.
This guy sounds like a good person to be in Hell. It is good that he gets on the Satan's nerves. At least something should make his life harder. I like how the both use Hell in there vocabulary. Something you wouldn't think from God. I also like the fact he is trying to show this guy's positives, in that he can play softball well.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
Comment Written 20-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2021
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Thanks, Joan. Satan should have someone like this every now and then.
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No problem, Paul. I agree.
Joan
Comment from RGstar
Well, this one is different.
Almost like a limerick, instead, incorporates faith.
I guess some will not smile, but I see your angle...just the lightness of being harms nobody.
Wishing you a good weekend.
RGstar
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2021
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Well, this one is different.
Almost like a limerick, instead, incorporates faith.
I guess some will not smile, but I see your angle...just the lightness of being harms nobody.
Wishing you a good weekend.
RGstar
Comment Written 20-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2021
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Thanks for the review. Hopefully, everyone will smile.
