Shape Shifter
Viewing comments for Chapter 20 "Shape Shifter Part Twenty"A Detective John Dutton Novellette
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Comment from Liz O'Neill
My brother & I are always joking about this expression. It's a great expression to fill in blank thoughts: "and what-nots" You can almost hear the sighs with the alliterative h's: "heavy heat" It's getting closer to a conclusion. Moving on
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2022
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My brother & I are always joking about this expression. It's a great expression to fill in blank thoughts: "and what-nots" You can almost hear the sighs with the alliterative h's: "heavy heat" It's getting closer to a conclusion. Moving on
Comment Written 26-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2022
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Appreciate the review.
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Coming to the finish line
Comment from BethShelby
You stopped this chapter just at the right moment to now learn whether or not he will be captured. Dutton believes he is about to capture his prey. We will see whether or not he will succeed.
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2021
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You stopped this chapter just at the right moment to now learn whether or not he will be captured. Dutton believes he is about to capture his prey. We will see whether or not he will succeed.
Comment Written 22-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2021
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Thorough, insightful, much appreciated review.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Brett, so they finally got him. That was a great finale to your story.The hunt has been so intense and you've described it so very well. I've really enjoyed reading this story. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2021
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Hi Brett, so they finally got him. That was a great finale to your story.The hunt has been so intense and you've described it so very well. I've really enjoyed reading this story. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 20-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2021
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Stay tuned. Story is not completed yet. But, do appreciate the review.
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Ah, okay. I'll be there.
Comment from Judy Lawless
This is a nail biting chapter, Brett. Reading it first thing in the morning has y adrenaline flowing! I was hoping this was it, Adler would be captured, but I guess we have to wait.
One suggestion. This sentence is a little awkward to read. "Could the series of tragedies that befell him before he became the beast he now is be the secret to Adler's code?" I think putting commas after tragedies and after now, and putting "is" before "now, would help.
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2021
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This is a nail biting chapter, Brett. Reading it first thing in the morning has y adrenaline flowing! I was hoping this was it, Adler would be captured, but I guess we have to wait.
One suggestion. This sentence is a little awkward to read. "Could the series of tragedies that befell him before he became the beast he now is be the secret to Adler's code?" I think putting commas after tragedies and after now, and putting "is" before "now, would help.
Comment Written 20-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2021
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Appreciate the suggestion and review.
Comment from lancellot
This is a well written chapter. At first when you told the reader Dutton's emotional state, I was a little leery, but as the chapter progressed you slowly showed more and more of Dutton's rising and building emotions through his actions, that added to the feeling and tone of the chase scene.
Good work.
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2021
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This is a well written chapter. At first when you told the reader Dutton's emotional state, I was a little leery, but as the chapter progressed you slowly showed more and more of Dutton's rising and building emotions through his actions, that added to the feeling and tone of the chase scene.
Good work.
Comment Written 20-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2021
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Glad you enjoyed this chapter. Appreciate the review.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This Mystery and Crime Fiction, chapter/part twenty in the book Shape Shifter, a Detective John Dutton Novelette, speaks about shape shifter; Well said, well done, thanks 4 sharing this, happy reviewing this legible post, time is rare gift, post more, fast, I, DR, wrote 114 books on God, Law, Truth, R 123000/N21. ALCREATOR
You may check the following typos (inexpressive expression):
1) Thirty feet seperated the hunter from his prey. (Thirty feet separated the hunter from his prey.)
2) The squirrell goes (The squirrel goes)
3) he was successul. (he was successful.)
4) muster any symphathy for (muster any sympathy for)
ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2021
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This Mystery and Crime Fiction, chapter/part twenty in the book Shape Shifter, a Detective John Dutton Novelette, speaks about shape shifter; Well said, well done, thanks 4 sharing this, happy reviewing this legible post, time is rare gift, post more, fast, I, DR, wrote 114 books on God, Law, Truth, R 123000/N21. ALCREATOR
You may check the following typos (inexpressive expression):
1) Thirty feet seperated the hunter from his prey. (Thirty feet separated the hunter from his prey.)
2) The squirrell goes (The squirrel goes)
3) he was successul. (he was successful.)
4) muster any symphathy for (muster any sympathy for)
ALCREATOR
Comment Written 20-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2021
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Okay.
Comment from Ric Myworld
I always wonder whenever someone that seems like a very nice person knows every thought and feeling of a psychopath. LOL. Thanks for sharing another fine chapter. You're in my thoughts and prayers and I'm wishing you the best tomorrow! Hope tomorrow puts this behind you! Ric
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2021
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I always wonder whenever someone that seems like a very nice person knows every thought and feeling of a psychopath. LOL. Thanks for sharing another fine chapter. You're in my thoughts and prayers and I'm wishing you the best tomorrow! Hope tomorrow puts this behind you! Ric
Comment Written 19-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2021
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Appreciate your support more than words can tell. Can not wait to get this tumor out of my head.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I am worried about Dutton. He needs to get his head back in the game, although I completely understand why he's angered. This is good writing.
I hope you're doing okay and I will continue my prayers.
"That's why his ferocious, and bloodthirsty, murders have continued," Ballister responded. (positive you don't need the second comma and pretty sure you don't need the first.)
He grabbed his weapon from the rack it hung on, "Let's roll." (period after 'on')
He is turned towards Bogart Boulevard. (omit 'is')
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2021
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I am worried about Dutton. He needs to get his head back in the game, although I completely understand why he's angered. This is good writing.
I hope you're doing okay and I will continue my prayers.
"That's why his ferocious, and bloodthirsty, murders have continued," Ballister responded. (positive you don't need the second comma and pretty sure you don't need the first.)
He grabbed his weapon from the rack it hung on, "Let's roll." (period after 'on')
He is turned towards Bogart Boulevard. (omit 'is')
Comment Written 19-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2021
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Appreciate the suggestions and review.
Comment from royowen
This tone Dutton catches up with Adler, but what will be the outcome? Will he apprehend, and did he have a genuine plan to capture him? Or was this just as slippery as any other? Beautifully written Brett, blessings Roy
Typo : Unsatisfied, heavy hea(r)t. 2: Nor (hsd) Adler sent. Had? 3: the squirrel goes dow(n) now.
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2021
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This tone Dutton catches up with Adler, but what will be the outcome? Will he apprehend, and did he have a genuine plan to capture him? Or was this just as slippery as any other? Beautifully written Brett, blessings Roy
Typo : Unsatisfied, heavy hea(r)t. 2: Nor (hsd) Adler sent. Had? 3: the squirrel goes dow(n) now.
Comment Written 19-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2021
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Appreciate the catches and insightful review.
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Most welcome
