Tears
For the most precious of all gifts30 total reviews
Comment from Patty Palmer
There is no greater pain than to have to bury a child, no matter their age. But it does hurt when the child never even had a chance to experience life at all. Good luck with the contest. This poem brought tears to my eyes.
Patty
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2021
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There is no greater pain than to have to bury a child, no matter their age. But it does hurt when the child never even had a chance to experience life at all. Good luck with the contest. This poem brought tears to my eyes.
Patty
Comment Written 18-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2021
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Hi Patty, thank you so much for your compassion and lovely words. Thank you too for the honour, greatly valued, of six stars! Thank you too for your good wishes. I appreciate all of these every much.
Comment from tfawcus
Your poem describes a heart-stopping moment with great poignancy. Surely, there can be no greater grief than the loss of an infant child. A fine entry to the contest. I hope it does well.
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2021
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Your poem describes a heart-stopping moment with great poignancy. Surely, there can be no greater grief than the loss of an infant child. A fine entry to the contest. I hope it does well.
Comment Written 17-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2021
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Thank you very much for your good wishes and for such an encouraging review. I appreciate it a lot.
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
Did you recently lose someone you loved? It sounds like the person was young and never got to fulfilled his/her dream. It was the saddest lost for everybody in your family.
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2021
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Did you recently lose someone you loved? It sounds like the person was young and never got to fulfilled his/her dream. It was the saddest lost for everybody in your family.
Comment Written 17-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2021
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It was for friends who lost their baby. Thank you so much for reviewing, always greatly appreciated.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your picture and words pair perfectly Mystery Author, though this is such a sad poem. You did a great job. Your few words accurately tell the story. I like the bit of end rhyme.
Best wishes in the contest.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2021
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Your picture and words pair perfectly Mystery Author, though this is such a sad poem. You did a great job. Your few words accurately tell the story. I like the bit of end rhyme.
Best wishes in the contest.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 17-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2021
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Thank you very much Jan for your lovely review and good wishes. I appreciate both.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
This one made me tear up! You have made excellent use of your fifteen words to convey a message about the devastation of the loss of a child. The artwork . . . !
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2021
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This one made me tear up! You have made excellent use of your fifteen words to convey a message about the devastation of the loss of a child. The artwork . . . !
Comment Written 17-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2021
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Thank you Janice, I appreciate your kind and compassionate review very much!
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Excellent entry for the Short Poem writing prompt contest. You have a heartbreaking meaningful message in a few words, that is harder than most people think. I like the presentation too but it's very sad.
suggestion to improve the flow....
unprepared grieving hearts
hold on to babe's last breath -
life so short, dreams unfulfilled ...
saddest loss of all
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2021
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Excellent entry for the Short Poem writing prompt contest. You have a heartbreaking meaningful message in a few words, that is harder than most people think. I like the presentation too but it's very sad.
suggestion to improve the flow....
unprepared grieving hearts
hold on to babe's last breath -
life so short, dreams unfulfilled ...
saddest loss of all
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 17-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2021
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Thank you so much for reviewing, and for your excellent suggestion. Unfortunately this poem had to be no more than fifteen words, to meet the contest rules, so that is quite limiting.
Comment from NaughtieScribe
The pic is heartbreaking enough. You short poem completes the devastation. This is an experience I hope never to know. I found nothing to adjust or tweak. Well Written, Well Done.
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2021
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The pic is heartbreaking enough. You short poem completes the devastation. This is an experience I hope never to know. I found nothing to adjust or tweak. Well Written, Well Done.
Comment Written 17-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2021
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Thank you very much for your kind and compassionate review, and your very encouraging words. I appreciate it.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
It must be heart breaking to lose a child and your poem is poignant and grief filled, such a sad scene you painted here with your short poem, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2021
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It must be heart breaking to lose a child and your poem is poignant and grief filled, such a sad scene you painted here with your short poem, love Dolly x
Comment Written 17-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2021
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Thank you very much for your kind review. I appreciate it.
Comment from royowen
I think losing a little one would be the worst kind of grief one could suffer, no memories to treasure, a future unfulfilled is positively devastating, Beautifully and compassionately written, good luck, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2021
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I think losing a little one would be the worst kind of grief one could suffer, no memories to treasure, a future unfulfilled is positively devastating, Beautifully and compassionately written, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 17-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2021
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Thank you so much for your lovely review and good wishes . Much appreciated.
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Most welcome
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That is the worst of all, a death of a baby before he/she has had a chance of life. You're right, no words can express such grief. Your short poem tells us a lot. Well done and good luck! :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2021
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That is the worst of all, a death of a baby before he/she has had a chance of life. You're right, no words can express such grief. Your short poem tells us a lot. Well done and good luck! :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 17-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2021
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Thank you very much Sandra for your lovely review and good wishes. Both are valued.
