Nine Million Men
The war was four long years.4 total reviews
Comment from John Cranford
A very poignant poem. Being a veteran of Vietnam, I can relate and I particularly like your last verse.
It reminded me of this passage from the book, "We Were Soldiers": "We were the children of the 1950s and John F. Kennedy's young stalwarts of the early 1960s. He told the world that Americans would pay 'any price, bear any burden, meet any hardship' in the defense of freedom. We were the down payment on that costly contract. But the man who signed it was not there when we fulfilled his promise. John F. Kennedy waited for us on a hill in Arlington National Cemetery, and in time we came by thousands to fill those slopes with our white marble markers and to ask on the murmur of the wind if that was truly the future he had envisioned for us."
Very good poem with much food for thought. Thank you.
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2021
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A very poignant poem. Being a veteran of Vietnam, I can relate and I particularly like your last verse.
It reminded me of this passage from the book, "We Were Soldiers": "We were the children of the 1950s and John F. Kennedy's young stalwarts of the early 1960s. He told the world that Americans would pay 'any price, bear any burden, meet any hardship' in the defense of freedom. We were the down payment on that costly contract. But the man who signed it was not there when we fulfilled his promise. John F. Kennedy waited for us on a hill in Arlington National Cemetery, and in time we came by thousands to fill those slopes with our white marble markers and to ask on the murmur of the wind if that was truly the future he had envisioned for us."
Very good poem with much food for thought. Thank you.
Comment Written 16-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2021
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Welcome
Comment from robyn corum
Dear Mystery Author,
This is a very special and heartfelt poem about an important topic. Thank you for your good heart.
Here are some notes to consider:
1.) Evil Eddie got you - please go through and delete all the extra symbols and then try to make sure you always look at your posts as soon as you release them.
2.) There (were) nine million men (who) had to fall,
--> 'who' for humans
3.) All of the soldiers (who) remained had to stand tall.
4.) There were alsoĆ? women (who) had to fall.
5.) Around twenty million (who) died in all.
Thanks!
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2021
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Dear Mystery Author,
This is a very special and heartfelt poem about an important topic. Thank you for your good heart.
Here are some notes to consider:
1.) Evil Eddie got you - please go through and delete all the extra symbols and then try to make sure you always look at your posts as soon as you release them.
2.) There (were) nine million men (who) had to fall,
--> 'who' for humans
3.) All of the soldiers (who) remained had to stand tall.
4.) There were alsoĆ? women (who) had to fall.
5.) Around twenty million (who) died in all.
Thanks!
Comment Written 13-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2021
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Thanks.
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I changed the thats to who. Thanks for saying my poem is special. That means a lot.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Hi Mystery Author,
Your topic is good, the picture is a good pairing, and your lines flow well.
You have several odd characters in you work.
To get rid of them:
go to work on edit page using advanced editor
delete those (capital A etc)
highlight whole poem
SAVE while highlighted
repeat if any don't take a hike.
Best wishes, Jan
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2021
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Hi Mystery Author,
Your topic is good, the picture is a good pairing, and your lines flow well.
You have several odd characters in you work.
To get rid of them:
go to work on edit page using advanced editor
delete those (capital A etc)
highlight whole poem
SAVE while highlighted
repeat if any don't take a hike.
Best wishes, Jan
Comment Written 13-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2021
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I wrote the best poem I could.
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I just gavey ou some help to delete those characters. Try it. Your poem is fine.
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I did delete the characters.
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There's a letter t on a line maybe first one that you could delete. 😊
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Thanks, all fixed.
Comment from Modee
War is a nasty thing. My dad fought in WW2, but I never was in the army or any other service. Very good poetry for this day of the year. I enjoyed it. Thanks for the reminder of my father. :)
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2021
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War is a nasty thing. My dad fought in WW2, but I never was in the army or any other service. Very good poetry for this day of the year. I enjoyed it. Thanks for the reminder of my father. :)
Comment Written 13-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2021
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I wrote the best poem I could.
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My dad was in WW2 too.
